ISSUE13 保护语言 (新人发帖，请多1024)

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第一篇ISSUE, 修改了2遍(并不是在规定时间内完成)。开始字数只有400-，后来加了几个例子
我是按高频50写的。请多多给建议

ISSUE 13
"Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct."

许多世界上鲜为人知的语言由于越来越少的人使用而逐渐消失。使用这些语言的国家应该采取措施防止这些语言绝迹。


It is estimated there are six thousand languages in our planet, butthey are disappearing at an alarming rate, about one language per week. If rareplants and animals are precious, then languages should not be more precious and deserve better preservation? Governments in which minority languages are spokenand developed countries are obliged to make efforts to protect these languages.

As our world is going through globalization exponentially, the world becomes unprecedented homogeneous in terms of language, culture and everydaylife such as clothes and food. This increasing unity brings benefits and conveniences for humans. Today there are several universal, or official, languages acrossall continents, such as English, Chinese, Spanish. Universal languages offer usmerits in many aspects especially in everyday communication and academic. Forexample, there are dozens of nations in Europe, and although nearly everycountry has its own language, they actually speak only a couple of mainstream languages in public for communicating conveniently; in academic, foreign researchers can read original research papers to keep pace with state-of-the-art research results to avoid waiting for translation of original manuscripts. A report surveyed the top countries in research and hightechnology. The top one is undoubtedly America, but the second one is surprisingly Britain. Can it not be Japan or Germany? The survey concludes English is its mother language so that Britain researchers manage to absorbfirst-hand materials without translation. Another realworld example is international sports tournaments such as US Open. This event consists of many parts, players, referees, and journalists. Players all speak English in courtto communicate with referees; players also speak English in press conference. In this situation unified language indeed avoids many problems.

However, to our dismal, culture diversity has been seriously jeopardized by the lost of languages. What is the true value of language?Languages play an important role in human history served as a major means to record history and to inherit culture. Before language appeared, humans couldonly record events with simple symbols which was too inaccurate and hard tomaintain large amount of information. Language represents culture that through language, we understand its people and traditions. If we want to know onecountry, the best approach is to learn its language. For example, in Japanese verbs have many forms that if you speak to a higher level person, the verb shouldbe used in an appropriate form. So it can be inferred Japanese is a country ofdeep hierarchy. Language can also exert influence on thinking pattern. In Western countries in which languages usually consist of literals, Western people think in a linear manner, while in Asia where languages are comprised of complex symbols, they think is a non-linear fashion. Without languages, we might be still in primitive age, for culture heritance becomes difficult, not mention to developing science and technology,

It is also worth to explore why languages are disappearing at analarming rate. Some minority languages are used in remote areas even inprimitive tribes; thus limited condition and technology hinder locals maintaining and developing languages. The second cause is we attach muchemphasis on mainstream and neglect those minorities. Minorities are equally important because each one is an indispensible element of the world’s diversity.

When the time that our plant speaks only a few languages, it will be a disaster for mankind because what we have lost is not only languages but cultures they represent. Hence the government of countries in which the minority languages are spoken as well as developed countries should make effective measures to preserve those languages. For example, setup curriculum of minority languages, use high technology to preserve languages.

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It is estimated （强调句that不能省）there are six thousand languages in ourplanet, but they are disappearing at an alarming rate, about onelanguage per week（这个数据好，不知有attribution否？）. If rare plants and animals are precious, thenlanguages should not be more precious and deserve better preservation?（额。。个人觉得这个analogy不是那么convicing）Governments in which minority languages are spokenand developedcountries are obliged to make efforts to protect these languages.

As our world is going through globalizationexponentially, the world becomes unprecedented homogeneous（这个词好） in terms oflanguage, culture and everydaylife such as clothes and food. Thisincreasing unity brings benefits and conveniences for humans. Todaythere are several universal, or official, languages acrossallcontinents, such as English, Chinese, Spanish. Universal languagesoffer usmerits in many aspects especially in everyday communication andacademic（这是个形容词）. Forexample, there are dozens of nations in Europe, andalthough nearly everycountry has its own language, they actually speakonly a couple of mainstream languages in public for communicatingconveniently; in academic, foreign researchers can read originalresearch papers to keep pace with state-of-the-art（甲引号不需要短横） research results toavoid waiting for translation of original manuscripts. A reportsurveyed the top countries in research and hightechnology（whose report? when?最好指出，不然会被人质疑）. The top oneis undoubtedly America, but the second one is surprisingly Britain. Canit not be Japan or Germany? The survey concludes English is its motherlanguage so that Britain researchers manage to absorbfirst-handmaterials without translation. Another realworld example isinternational sports tournaments such as US Open. This event consistsof many parts, players, referees, and journalists. Players all speakEnglish in courtto communicate with referees; players also speakEnglish in press conference. In this situation unified language indeedavoids many problems.（例子还是很新的，不过觉得收尾草了点）

（上段主要证明国际语言有很多好处，而这段开头突然说语言的消失会影响文化，两者没什么直接关系，逻辑就不严密了）However, to our dismal, culture diversity has beenseriously jeopardized by the lost of languages. （个人觉得这里的transition也有点跳）What is the true valueof language?Languages play an important role in human history served asa major means to record history and to inherit culture. Before languageappeared, humans（human beings） couldonly record events with simple symbols which wastoo inaccurate and hard to maintain large amount of information.Language represents culture that through language, （though which）we understand itspeople and traditions.（还是同样的问题，加点过渡吧。前面说了语言出现以前怎么不好，这里就突然说语言室代表文化的了） If we want to know onecountry, the best approachis to learn its language. For example, in Japanese verbs have manyforms that if you speak to a higher level person, the verb shouldbeused in an appropriate form. So it can be inferred Japanese is acountry ofdeep hierarchy（这是自己的YY，作为证明语言体现文化有点力度不够。个人觉得可以先说明日本社会阶层很明显，然后这个可以语言中体现出来，如：。。。）. Language can also exert influence on thinkingpattern. In Western countries in which languages usually consist ofliterals, Western people think in a linear manner, while in Asia wherelanguages are comprised of complex symbols, they think is a non-linearfashion. Without languages, we might be still in primitive age, forculture heritance becomes difficult, not mention to developing scienceand technology, （这段总体感觉就是比较混乱，想说清楚很多东西，结果都没有说清）

It is also worth to explore why languages aredisappearing at analarming rate. Some minority languages are used inremote areas even inprimitive tribes; thus limited condition andtechnology hinder locals maintaining and developing languages. Thesecond cause is we attach muchemphasis on mainstream and neglect thoseminorities. Minorities are equally important because each one is anindispensible element of the world’s diversity.

When the time that our plant speaks only a fewlanguages, it will be a disaster for mankind because what we have lostis not only languages but cultures they represent. Hence the governmentof countries in which the minority languages are spoken as well asdeveloped countries should make effective measures to preserve thoselanguages. For example, setup curriculum of minority languages, usehigh technology to preserve languages.


后面两段没有仔细看，就前面而言LZ要理顺想论证的东西，总觉得有点乱，然后论述不够有力。。。
拍的有点狠不好意思了~~大家讨论讨论吧！！

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非常感谢， 我会仔细修改。 确实逻辑不够严密