cjlu的作文修改铺

jinziqiUID: 2387034

刚想跟暖羊羊学。。但不能占楼超过三层，这15楼跟3有关吗？是3的倍数哦~

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刚想跟暖羊羊学。。但不能占楼超过三层，这15楼跟3有关吗？是3的倍数哦~
jinziqi 发表于 2010-1-19 16:21

moyixianagebeiwoqiangdaole

jinziqiUID: 2387034

17# 霁月难逢 。。只有几十秒之差。。那。。18跟3有关吗？ 也是倍数哇 ;-)

霁月难逢UID: 2718354

moshiyihuierhuiyourenlaiqinglide

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哇~来占楼~暖羊羊你那么胖，动作却堪比慢羊羊的坐骑了~！

小灵易碎UID: 2733622

21楼是我的！哈
第一次限时作~https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1052323-1-1.html
求拍~谢谢~辛苦啦啦啦~~~

cjluUID: 2448066

疯羊...
霁月难逢 发表于 2010-1-19 16:21

看见这两个字 我喝的水差点喷了……\(^o^)/~哈哈

cjluUID: 2448066

17# 霁月难逢 。。只有几十秒之差。。那。。18跟3有关吗？ 也是倍数哇 ;-)
jinziqi 发表于 2010-1-19 16:34

这个……7的倍数一定改 3的倍数看情况 事情不多就改^^
要不jinziqi先把链接贴过来？我要这两天有时间就改~

cjluUID: 2448066

moshiyihuierhuiyourenlaiqinglide
霁月难逢 发表于 2010-1-19 16:40

呃……我好不容易把上句看懂了 这句……Orz  霁月你从月球回来吧……

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lulu我帮你把楼该起来 让大家来占⑦得倍数

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每次作文修改铺..我都赶不上啊..:mad:

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第一篇argue

已在bela版主的意见下做了修改~ 谢谢bela~!

不过还有一些问题, 希望lz帮我修改~谢谢拉!

2. The following appeared in a letter sent by a committee of homeowners from the Deerhaven Acres to all homeowners in Deerhaven Acres.

"Seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Since then, average property values have tripled in Brookville. In order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our own set of restrictions on landscaping and house painting."

七年前，附近的Brookville社区的业主实施了一系列关于该社区的庭院应如何布置以及房屋应涂何种颜色的规定。从那以后，Brookville的地产平均价格翻了三番。为使Deerhaven
Acres的地产升值，我们也应该对于景观和房屋涂色实自己的规定。


This plausible argument recommends a set of restrictions on landscaping and house painting to increase the proper values when selling houses in DA. However, after scrutinizing these evidence and the reasoning of the author, this argument is neither logical nor practical. The tripling property value of Brookville may result from other significant factors other than(rather than 哪个好点?) adopting such set of restrictions. Besides that fallacy of “after this, therefore because of this”, the author also wrongly assumes that the experience from Brookville seven years ago is sure to be suitable and accurate for DA today.

When it is true that the average property values in Brookville have tripled, the author cannot simply conclude this achievement as a result of the landscaped yards and the painted houses. It is completely possible that others factors contribute to the increase of average property values in Brookville community. For instance, the tripling of property values may resulted from its perfect facilities such as swimming pool, tennis court, children's park, and health club. It is also likely that the convenience to public transport adds to the values (用在这里是不是有点问题?) in Brookville. Without ruling out these and other alternative explanations for the increase, the author cannot reasonably infer on the basis of the set of restrictions.


Even if there is causal relationship between the set of restriction and the tripling of property values，to make the recommendation that a similar policy should be promoted in DA still cannot result from the experience from Brookville seven years ago. The times are different. People with latest values in DA might pursue a sense of individuality and won’t easily get uniformed with the others as Brookville did 7 years ago. Furthermore modern people are getting more mobile than before, they might not stay at one place forever; therefore they might not take it seriously to benefit the whole community at the cost of giving up their own homes’ characteristics.(这个假设是不是不太好?跟现实不符?人们不愿意呆在一个地方跟他们买房有没有关系?) So the letter requires all the homeowners in DA to paint their homes in the same color, which might cause much resistance.


If we concede that the policy seven years ago is still useful today，the final conclusion that DA should landscape the yard and paint the exteriors wall is still questionable. DA and Brookville，although shares some common characteristics, might be totally different in other aspects. For example homeowners in Brookville community may adopt greater purchasing power and the price level there is high, while homeowners in DA are not as capable as they in Brookville to pay for the extra cost of landscaping and painting.

After analyzing the evidence as well as the reasoning, it is clear that we cannot safely reach the conclusion that DA should adopt their own set of restrictions on landscaping and house painting. If I were the author, I will try to find other evidences to preclude those possibilities mentioned above to make a better argument. After all, a false confidence in ineffective gear could be just as dangerous as no gear at all.

jinziqiUID: 2387034

嘿嘿 这次30楼 一定可以了吧~~呷呷~~

jinziqiUID: 2387034

这个……7的倍数一定改 3的倍数看情况 事情不多就改^^
要不jinziqi先把链接贴过来？我要这两天有时间就改~
cjlu 发表于 2010-1-19 23:24

谢谢cjlu！我先贴上来好了~
Issue 98
"Colleges and universities should offer more courses on popular music, film, advertising, and television because contemporary culture has much greater relevance for students than do arts and literature of the past."

The author believes that there should be much more courses concerning about the contemporary culture instead of the arts and literature of the past, which I disagree. Courses are designed carefully for students to receive education in one area, while contemporary culture is for fun at our spare time. The culture of the past is necessary for students to get the general understanding of the world.

Indeed, contemporary culture has much more relevance to students for the reason that people often discuss them in daily life such as the hot episode, popular music and coming movies. People should know what is Avatar, why Google ends in China, and what is the hottest television recently. If one knows nothing about it, other people will not like to chat with him because there is nothing interesting in his mind. On the contrary, knowing about what is popular can help you make friends who have the same interests with you and can quickly become familiar with someone instead of strangers. Common interest is the premise of getting along with someone.

Although contemporary is a part of our lives, it is also necessary to study arts and literature of the past. By taking those courses, it can help students to build the basic value of the world, so that students can choose the right things to concern with. Nowadays, quantities of new movies are showed on the Internet only in a week. How should we choose our favorites to watch in order to save time? If one is interested in Pride and Prejudice, he may also like Jane Eyre but he will not spend time on watching commercial movies such as 2012. At the same time, by studying the classic literature, he can distinguish the bad and the good, the hate and the love, so that he knows how to behave as a good man in reality.

Courses in colleges are not only giving a direction to students, but also can bring the classic that is in the past to the contemporary society. If we have no idea about the arts and literature of the past, we may not truly understand the contemporary culture which often quotes the classic to make the art work better. In addition, the reason why those arts and literature can pass down for many years is that they are popular during many generations so they can be called famous and classic. As for students, there is no reason that we don’t read those classic works at first to improve our quality and this is why we have to recite those famous and profound poems just at early ages. As time passes by, we can gradually understand the true meaning of those poems and they will have much more influence on one’s behavior than contemporary culture that is only hot for a short time.

To sum, courses in colleges and universities are necessary for students and cannot be instead. To learn about the contemporary culture, the Internet is enough to know everything. But we should study the past culture before to choose the right things to go on to study.