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惊现马夹~哈哈

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谢谢版主的修改~~ :loveliness:  以后写作的过程中我会慢慢学习脱离模板哒~

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好~你都抢了3个3的倍数楼了 那一定改^^不过可能得等两天 我明天回家 暂时上不了网了^^ 31# jinziqi

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版主我贴上来啦，谢谢了
Issue64.“ Many people know how to attain success, but few know now to make the best use of it.”

The speaker asserts that many people know how to attain success but do not know how to make full use of it. I agree with it for these few people do not define success accurately.

First, many people want to achieve success attributed to their ambition and desire these days, which propelling them accumulate every possible experience from the successful individuals. The fact can be demonstrated by the tremendous books, TV programs and interviews about the way to success that people collected. Keeping an eye on the experience of these famous ones, we could easily and rapidly learn how to succeed. My professor, a famous math scholar at our college, has some achievements at such a young age and we considered him as a successful person. Every time I went to visit him at his office, I found that he was busy working in front of his computer. He told me that in order to success, we must work hard especially to think about some problems often. Besides hard work, some other factors are also crucial in ensuring success. With the diverse ways to success, people can conclude that success ascribe to hard work, talents and most importantly, interest.

However, there are a certain number of people have not make full use of success. On the one hand, some people simply considered success as achieve material goals, thus do not make full use of the so-called success. Then such "success" has no more value for society in the long run, or even harmful to society. In the business world, the only goal for managers is to raise profits and decrease costs. They try to raise profits on the cost of cheating customers and urging employees, which may deprived the rights of these victims. With their harmful effects to society, such enterprise must be defeated by other competitors in the long term. On the other hand, some other people considered success as get to a high social level. In the case of political area, some leaders would be satisfied with their power and abused of it. They misuse their power regardless of people's interests, and their positions can not stand any longer. Though these people achieve their so-called success for the time being, they could not stand any longer for their misuse.

Finally, the best use of success should be helpful not only to oneself but also to society, and that would better the success. Success can be decided by one's interest for the most part. Fortunately, the majority of citizens combine their interest with the destination of society, thus their success is beneficial to society. The successful artists devote all their energy and intellect into arts with their interest, which could satisfy their interest and convey delight and happiness to the masses. In turn, praise and appreciation from the public could give them confidence to succeed. On balance, the better use of one’s success can help one gain even greater success, and the society will thus benefit even more as well.

In sum, we conclude that though most people are eager to success, they do not know how to take advantage of it. Therefore, to make the best use of success is more important than simply gaining it. And the best use of success can improve society ascribe to one's interest.

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楼主，我看大家都在等，35楼以后就没人贴啦。https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1053937-1-1.html我就把链接放上啦。碰碰运气吧，楼主心情好的话就一起改了吧，多谢啊。

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我来顶一下。。。。

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碰运气了。。。发吧~
2010-1-29 13：52
提纲：
不同意，我们所处的社会是有很多因素决定的，不单单是孩子的社会化，而且，事实证明我们是可以培养出那些推动社会发展的年轻一代的。
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诚然，孩子的社会化可以促进社会发展，因为孩子是未来社会的中坚力量，社会化的培养使得他们更加有社会责任感，正如primer Wen said…，而且也可以使他们更有集体意识和团队精神。
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但是，不够社会化与无法领导社会走向成功是两码事，很多英雄式的任务往往显得与社会格格不入。
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其次，社会怎样并不单纯取决于孩子，还有很多其他因素：例如中国加入世贸组织促进经济发展，我们研制新型的武器装备来确保社会安定，通信，交通的发展使得我们的社会节奏加快，但这些与孩子的社会化没有你然的联系。
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而且，我们对于下一代的培养还是极大地促进了社会的发展，例如美国牛校出了恩多诺贝尔奖获得者，海伦凯勒在老师的教导下从一个看不见听不道的世界走出来，为人类的精神文明创造了极大的财富。所有这些都说明我们的教育是可以是社会更好的。
总结：孩子的社会化重要但不是唯一，而且我们会教育。
2010-1-29 14：18
正文：
Children in our society are becoming more and more socialized, however, the claim that our children’s socialization can decide the destiny of society is apparently exaggerate the function of socialization of our children.

Granted that the socialization is vital to the formation of the social responsibility and the realization of teamwork and consideration. Perhaps just like Primer Wen,who is the current primer of China, said:”Our country need children who would like to look up to the star-space.” That is, who have the responsibility to hold up the mission in the future. Besides, during the socialized cultivation, children can also learn how to work with others so that they can achieve the target and how to concern others to establish emotional relationship with their team-members. All of these virtues are profit from the socialization of our children and education.

However, the extent of socialization cannot-at least only-indicate the merit of a person. For example, Gandy, who was always be alienated by the upper-class of Indian, also contribute a lot for our society. Van Gough, who was regarded as a crazy man at the time he was alive, had to rove from here to there because of poverty and people’s misunderstanding. His “sunflower” is now preserved as fortune of our human beings. Roosevelt, in spite of his isolate, odd manners in his early life, he ascended to the social-activist presidency of USA, he achieve all of these rely on his determination of overcoming his physical infirmities, his voracious appetite to knowledge and his intellect. These heroes, who are not so socialized, also became a leader of their realm and even the whole society.
Moreover, not only the socialization of children, but also other factors like economic, politics, and culture can promote our society as a better one. The participation of WTO promote Chinese economic development, the study of technological arms ensure the peace of our country,meanwhile, the rapid modernization and automation in the fields of transportation, telecommunication and even entertainment have allowed people enjoy a much better society than ancient times,which, as all may know , has no necessary relationship with how our children are socialized.

Furthermore, even assumes that the status of children’s socialization cannot be replaced, a deluge of evidence show that we have learned how to raise a person who can lead to a better circumstance.Just take a look at the elites from The Ivy League, a majority of them have been awarded the Nobel Prize, which is regarded as an honor for their prominent contributions to human beings. Can you say that they are the victim of our education?Helen Keller, whose story inspired a large number of people suffered from the fate,thanks for Ms Mary,who leaded her to the world filled with”sound” and “color”,and, of course, love. Even though there are still a lot of flaws and shortages of our education which rely on the assistance from various aspects, like the government, the educational departments ,etc. to improve and ameliorate, these persons inform us that we have cultivated children not only socialized, but also have promoted the society.

To sum up, socialization is a standard to measure a person, however , not the unique one. What we should consider includes many aspects like economic, politics and education to ameliorate our society.
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占楼

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不好意思地占一下，I急需点评~~

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43楼，和3有关哦，本人也喜欢3
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lulu好像很久都米来过了啊... ><

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突然发现好多作文铺也

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