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小灵易碎UID: 2733622

208"The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people."


第一次限时，还是超了几分钟……泪目>_<~~请大家多指教

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ps:我的word“工具”里为什么没有语法和拼写纠正呢？哪位好心的G友来给我普知一下呗~先谢过了(∩_∩)//❀（献花！）


中文提纲（展开段）：
1.人们生来具有用表情表达情感的能力。通过观察穿着和举止，可以显示人们各自的态度和偏好。
2.当个人的穿着和举止传播和扩大时，就会成为一个社会共有的外在特征，可以显示这个社会的理念和价值
3.但是从外在判断不一定准确，因为人们可以通过外在来表达自己，就能通过掩盖外在特征来隐瞒内心

名词解释
attitude
1 : the arrangement of the parts of a body or figure : POSTURE
2 : a position assumed for a specific purpose <a threatening attitude>
3 : a ballet position similar to the arabesque in which the raised leg is bent at the knee
4 a : a mental position with regard to a fact or state <a helpful attitude> b : a feeling or emotion toward a fact or state
5 : the position of an aircraft or spacecraft determined by the relationship between its axes and a reference datum (as the horizon or a particular star)
6 : an organismic state of readiness to respond in a characteristic way to a stimulus (as an object, concept, or situation)
7 a : a negative or hostile state of mind b : a cool, cocky, defiant, or arrogant manner

interest
1 a (1) : right, title, or legal share in something (2) : participation in advantage and responsibility b : BUSINESS, COMPANY
2 a : a charge for borrowed money generally a percentage of the amount borrowed b : the profit in goods or money that is made on invested capital c : an excess above what is due or expected <returned the insults with interest>
3 : ADVANTAGE, BENEFIT also : SELF-INTEREST
4 : SPECIAL INTEREST
5 a : a feeling that accompanies or causes special attention to an object or class of objects : CONCERN b : something that arouses such attention c : a quality in a thing arousing interest

appearance
1 a : external show : SEMBLANCE <although hostile, he preserved an appearance of neutrality> b : outward aspect : LOOK <had a fierce appearance> c plural : outward indication <trying to keep up appearances>
2 a : a sense impression or aspect of a thing <the blue of distant hills is only an appearance> b : the world of sensible phenomena
3 a : the act, action, or process of appearing b : the presentation of oneself in court as a party to an action often through the representation of an attorney
4 a : something that appears : PHENOMENON b : an instance of appearing : OCCURRENCE

behavior
1 a : the manner of conducting oneself b : anything that an organism does involving action and response to stimulation c : the response of an individual, group, or species to its environment
2 : the way in which someone behaves also : an instance of such behavior
3 : the way in which something functions or operates



By judging the annul rings, people can easily acknowledege the internal condition of a tree. This is true of judging people in the way of observing the look, dress and act,further distinguishing a society's ideas and values from others.However, sometimes it is not exactly accurate, even misleading, for people could express and reveal their attitudes and interests with outrageous appearance, surely could they disguise inherent thinking and feeling by covering the outsided characteristics.

People are born to be able to transmit their emotions by body language or look.Otherwise, dress and act offer comparetively more obvious way to tell one's manner and preference.For example, the luxury goods, such as Gucci and Burberry, are regarded as the symbols of social status and personal taste.Stars prefer to express their individual characteristics and special clothing style, by which the common public make a distinction of each.On the other hand, if the youngsters who have wired clothing and hairstyle, they would be always associated with outrageous actions and rebellious character, like Punk style or Anarchism.To a great extent, with the help of the way people look, dress,and act,people's specificity, especially their attitude and interest, could be well indicated at the first glance.

Once the personal style is becoming wide-spread and gradualy accumulate as time pass by, finally the common  feature of people would be the basis of typical cultural identity.Thus telling much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people is attainable.Cheongsm, a kind of traditional Chinese clothing, comes from the acient royalty and becomes more and more popular among the public,for its good-fit style fancy clipping.Nowadays, the Cheongsm deserves to be called the most representative clothing of China.Simulteneously, the Cheongsm reveals distinctive aethetic standard of Chinese people and the exquisite trait of eastern femine, which can be defined as the common ground of Chinese society, particularly in the aspect of social ideas and senses of beauty.

But what can be expressed by means of extranal quality, can also be covered by disguising the appearance and behavior. Propbably no one has considered or recognized, Nancy Wake, who is called "sweetie" by Hitler,actually owns a spy identity.Wearing Nazi uniform and keeping accompany with Hitler, it is just the outward appearance that fools Hitler, ultimately does help to offer useful information to the Allies. Indeed in this light judging people from what the expression and wearing show is possibly right, quite often this is misguided.

In sum, the way people express outside, including the look, dress or action, is capable to be indicators of the inner opinion and preference.But being blind to believe that the only way to judge the people is to watch external characteristics is unwise and uncomprehensive.Further communication and practical cratieria are needed, for what we look is not exactly what is true.

小灵易碎UID: 2733622

自己顶一个……

cjluUID: 2448066

OK 先占楼 明天或者后天放上来^^

小灵易碎UID: 2733622

谢谢LULU~辛苦啦~

小猫2007UID: 2728803

By judging the annul rings(annual ring   貌似这个是固定搭配）, people can easily acknowledege the internal condition of a tree. This is true of judging people in the way of（by way of ） observing the look, dress and act,further distinguishing a society's ideas and values from others.However, sometimes（After careful consideration 这里是想表达你的观点 我想 应该是思考的结果 sometimes 有点让人不知所以然的感觉  纯属个人意见 呵呵） it is not exactly accurate, even misleading, for people could express and reveal their attitudes and interests with outrageous appearance, surely could they disguise inherent thinking and feeling by covering the outsided characteristics.

小猫2007UID: 2728803

真是佩服你的 想象力    各段落转接的让我羡慕

karen_06UID: 2728072

我下载了，上午帮别人搬家，争取下午看看你作品呵呵

Lisa-yuanUID: 2748489

By judging the annul rings, people can easily acknowledege（正确的是：acknowledge） the internal condition of a tree. This is true of judging people in the way of observing the look, dress and act, further（further 用得漂亮） distinguishing(用tell会不会好点？) a society's ideas and values from others（by judging members’ appearance and behavior）. However, sometimes it is not exactly accurate, even misleading, for people could express and reveal their attitudes and interests with outrageous（为何用这个形容词？现实社会中隐藏自己真实一面的，不一定全是坏人吧） appearance, surely could they disguise inherent thinking and feeling by covering the outsided(正确拼写outside) characteristics.

People are born to be able to transmit their emotions by body language or look. Otherwise, dress and act offer comparetively more obvious way to tell one's manner and preference. For example, the luxury goods, such as Gucci and Burberry, are regarded as the symbols of social status and personal taste. Stars prefer to express their individual characteristics and special clothing style, by which the common public make a distinction of each（加上 other）. On the other hand, if the youngsters who have wired clothing and hairstyle, they would be always associated with outrageous actions and rebellious character, like Punk style or Anarchism. To a great extent, with the help of the way people look, dress, and act, people's specificity, especially their attitude and interest could be well indicated at the first glance.

Once the personal style is becoming wide-spread and gradually accumulate as time pass by, finally the common feature of people would be the basis of typical cultural identity. Thus telling much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people is attainable. Cheongsm（正确拼写：Cheongsam）, a kind of traditional Chinese clothing, comes from the ancient royalty and becomes more and more popular among the public, for its good-fit style fancy clipping. Nowadays, the Cheongsm deserves to be called the most representative clothing of China. Simulteneously, the Cheongsm reveals distinctive aethetic standard of Chinese people and the exquisite trait of eastern femine, which can be defined as the common ground of Chinese society, particularly in the aspect of social ideas and senses of beauty.

But what can be expressed by means of external quality, can also be covered by disguising the appearance and behavior. Probably no one has considered or recognized, Nancy Wake, who is called "sweetie" by Hitler, actually owns a spy identity. Wearing Nazi uniform and keeping accompany with Hitler, it is just the outward appearance that fools Hitler, ultimately does help to offer useful information to the Allies. Indeed in this light judging people from what the expression and wearing show is possibly right, quite often this is misguided.

In sum, the way people express outside, including the look, dress or action, is capable to be indicators of the inner opinion and preference. But being blind to believe that the only way to judge the people is to watch external characteristics is unwise and uncomprehensive（正确拼写：incomprehensive）. Further communication and practical criteria are needed, for what we look is not exactly what is true.
总结与点评：可以看出作者采用的论证方法是不完全赞同题目通过人们的外表和行为可以判断出社会的价值和思想的说法。但是文章中最大的一个弱点是，中间段通过用Nancy Wake的例子，则是证明通过人们的外表无法判断一个人的真实想法。因为人是可以通过外表隐藏一个人的内心。这个跟题目偏离了。还有最后结尾段，也没有很好地讲到社会的values和ideas是如何不能根据人们的行为和外表作判断的，这样的论证不够有力，而且有点偏题。

cjluUID: 2448066

先为我这么晚才放上来忏悔一下……对不起啊小灵……

By judging the annul rings, people can easily acknowledege the internal condition of a tree. This is true of judging people in the way of observing the look, dress and act,further distinguishing a society's ideas and values from others.（我觉得这个比较不太恰切。如果比的话我老是想起“人活脸，树活皮……”。也可以说年轮是内在的东西呀）However, sometimes it is not exactly accurate, even misleading, for people could express and reveal their attitudes and interests with outrageous appearance, surely could they disguise inherent thinking and feeling by covering the outsided characteristics.

People are born to be able to transmit their emotions by body language or look.Otherwise, dress and act offer comparetively more obvious way to tell one's manner and preference.For example, the luxury goods, such as Gucci and Burberry, are regarded as the symbols of social status and personal taste.Stars prefer to express their individual characteristics and special clothing style, by which the common public make a distinction of each.On the other hand, if the youngsters who have wired clothing and hairstyle, they would be always associated with outrageous actions and rebellious character, like Punk style or Anarchism.我觉得这个例子举的特好^^To a great extent, with the help of the way people look, dress,and act,people's specificity, especially their attitude and interest, could be well indicated at the first glance.

Once the personal style is becoming wide-spread and gradualy accumulate as time pass by, finally the common  feature of people would be the basis of typical cultural identity.Thus telling much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people is attainable.（联系起上段，我很容易联想到人人都穿Gucci之类的……这个感觉完全就是客观条件制约了）Cheongsm, a kind of traditional Chinese clothing, comes from the acient royalty and becomes more and more popular among the public,for its good-fit style fancy clipping.Nowadays, the Cheongsm deserves to be called the most representative clothing of China.Simulteneously, the Cheongsm reveals distinctive aethetic standard of Chinese people and the exquisite trait of eastern femine, which can be defined as the common ground of Chinese society, particularly in the aspect of social ideas and senses of beauty.（这个例子举的不太透彻，看完以后我不太明白它是怎么代表Chinese society的）

But what can be expressed by means of extranal quality, can also be covered by disguising the appearance and behavior. Propbably no one has considered or recognized, Nancy Wake, who is called "sweetie" by Hitler,actually owns a spy identity.Wearing Nazi uniform and keeping accompany with Hitler, it is just the outward appearance that fools Hitler, ultimately does help to offer useful information to the Allies. Indeed in this light judging people from what the expression and wearing show is possibly right, quite often this is misguided.（觉得spy这个例子好好啊^^)

In sum, the way people express outside, including the look, dress or action, is capable to be indicators of the inner opinion and preference.But being blind to believe that the only way to judge the people is to watch external characteristics is unwise and uncomprehensive.Further communication and practical cratieria are needed, for what we look is not exactly what is true.

觉得小灵举的例子选择的角度都还挺不错的~整体行文把握的也不错。
只是首先拼写的错误太多了……我也就没一个一个挑了。
然后文章全部看完觉得其实是“个人——社会——个人”。其中社会那一段我觉得还是值得推敲的，因为还是有好多漏洞。而且第三段spy那段，按理说应该证明个人和社会两方面不能完全靠着外表和行为，但是完全没有让我有“社会”的感觉，这里和上一段链接不畅通。
其他都还不错^^
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