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发表于 2010-1-19 16:03:37 |显示全部楼层

TOPIC: ARGUMENT51 - The following appeared in a medical newsletter.

"Doctors have long suspected that secondary infections may keep some patients from healing quickly after severe muscle strain. This hypothesis has now been proved by preliminary results of a study of two groups of patients. The first group of patients, all being treated for muscle injuries by Dr. Newland, a doctor who specializes in sports medicine, took antibiotics regularly throughout their treatment. Their recuperation time was, on average, 40 percent quicker than typically expected. Patients in the second group, all being treated by Dr. Alton, a general physician, were given sugar pills, although the patients believed they were taking antibiotics. Their average recuperation time was not significantly reduced. Therefore, all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain would be well advised to take antibiotics as part of their treatment."
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TIME: 00:30:00
DATE: 2010-1-19 15:48:30

This medical newsletter concludes that all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain would be well advised to take antibiotics as part of their treatment for the reason that secondary infections may keep some patients from healing quickly after severe muscle strain. To support this hypothesis, the newsletter cites a study of two groups of patients which being treated by different doctors. As discussed below, the argument suffers from a series of critical flaws and logical problems, and is therefore wholly unpersuasive.

To begin with, a careful analysis of the study reveals several problems with the newsletter's argument. First of all, the position of patients’ muscle strain is uncharted. Unfortunately, common sense informs me that different places of body are entirely different and thus, the muscle strain's recuperation time of different position is wholly different. Secondly, we could easily notice that the doctors of two groups are also not in the same. So, the treatments of two groups are whether equal or not is uncharted. For that two reasons, the argument cannot justifiably concludes that the preliminary results of this study could prove the hypothesis that take antibiotics as part of patients treatment would useful.

Also, the newsletter cites the fact that the average recuperation time of patients in the second group was not significantly reduced is problematic for the reason that “average” and “every” are totally different conceptions and cannot simply concern equal. It's possible, for instance, that a myriad of patients in the second group are reduced their recuperation time dramatically, but others not only did not reduced but also increased. Thus, the average of their recuperation time cannot be reduced significantly. However, in this condition, we also cannot concludes that the antibiotic virtually take practically effect to healing muscle strain.

Finally, a careful reading of this newsletter's argument reveals two additional problems. One is that the sample of this study is not overwhelming all kinds of people and all different geography areas, this is to say, we cannot carelessly draw the conclusion by only taken one study.
Another is that the argument fails to indicate that all patients in the study have wholly equal habitus and physique. Perhaps most of the first group of patients are juvenile that indeed recuperate quickly and the second group of patients are almost elder that their recuperation time originally long, no matter how effective treatment the doctor taken. In short, it’s unfairly to conclude that take antibiotics for muscle strain patients would be well advised.

In conclusion, the argument cannot be taken seriously as it stands. To better evaluate the argument we would assure that the patients of two groups in this study are nearly identical and they are treated for muscle injuries by same doctor or at least same treatment and it must show that other patients, especially in different ages, habitus and even geography areas, are all reduced their recuperation time by taking antibiotics. Thus, the argument could rely justifiably on this evidence for the recommendation.

PS：这次进步了很多，用了40多分钟，进步明显啊~哈哈~就是质量不知道有没有提高~自己感觉写的时候思维有点混乱，主要是因为要计时~有点慌张
我记得老师说agument350字就够了~可我一写就冲着500字去了~我想如果我就写350字，时间应该就差不多了~可是怎么压缩字数啊？这玩意儿不是我能控制的啊~我觉得~
望各位赐教~主要是我这次argument的句子和论述，自我感觉很多地方貌似有点说不通，但自己又找不出来。。。。。。

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