第二次作业Argument2

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第二次作业Argument 2 （正文字数：377）
题目2The following appeared in a letter sent by a committee of homeowners from the Deerhaven Acres to all homeowners in Deerhaven Acres.

"Seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Since then, average property values have tripled in Brookville. In order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our own set of restrictions on landscaping and house painting."
正文
According to the arguments, the arguer concludes that they can add property values in Deerhaven Acres by adopting their set of restrictions on landscaping and house painting. This conclusion is basic on the fact that homeowners raise property values in nearby Brookville community successfully after adopting a set of restrictions on landscaped and painting colors on the exteriors of homes seven years ago. The two serious logic mistakes in this argument are as follows.

In the first place, the idea that arguer simply considers that homeowners in Brookville community can raise their property values by adopting a set of restrictions on landscaped and painting outside of their houses is one-side. Because the arguer fails to give enough evidences to prove the relationship between raising property values and appearance of Brookville community. As we know, the property value is related to many factors such as convenient traffic network, perfect supporting facilities, suitable living condition and so on. Unfortunately, the arguer ignores these factors which also affect the property values. As a result, we can tell that the arguer’s idea is not comprehensive.

Secondly, arguer comes to a conclusion too hasty. The arguer thinks that they can also add the value of property by simply copying the methods of changing the landscaping and house painting. Let’s make an assumption. Adopting a set of restrictions on landscaping and painting the outside of houses is the true reason of raising property values in Brookville. There is not enough evidence to prove that the homeowners in Deerhaven can also use this method to gain property value in Deerhaven for sure. Although, Brookville community is just nearby, the arguer doesn’t tell us that the situation between Deerhaven and Brookville is the same. Brookville might enjoy better position than Deerhaven, so that Brookville can attack people to investigate the property more easily. However, arguer ignores these important factors to make a conclusion. We can tell that the conclusion is too hasty to convince.



To sum up, if the homeowners want to increase values of property in Deerhaven community, they must analysis the situation of their community and over come their own shortcoming by leaning other’s strong points. A simply copy without any analysis will bring a lot of lose for the homeowners in Deerhaven.

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According to the arguments, the arguer concludes that they can add property values in Deerhaven Acres by adopting their set of restrictions on landscaping and house painting. This conclusion is basic on the fact that homeowners raise property values in nearby Brookville community successfully after adopting a set of restrictions on landscaped and painting colors on the exteriors of homes seven years ago. The two serious logic mistakes in this argument are as follows.

In the first place, the idea that arguer simply considers that homeowners in Brookville community can raise their property values by adopting a set of restrictions on landscaped and painting outside of their houses is one-side. Because the arguer fails to give enough evidences to prove the relationship between raising property values and appearance of Brookville community. As we know, the property value is related to many factors such as convenient traffic network, perfect supporting facilities, suitable living condition and so on. Unfortunately, the arguer ignores these factors which also affect （on）the property values. As a result, we can tell that the arguer’s idea is not comprehensive.

Secondly, arguer comes to a conclusion too hasty. The arguer thinks that they can also add the value of property by simply copying the methods of changing the landscaping and house painting. Let’s make an assumption. Adopting a set of restrictions on landscaping and painting the outside of houses is the true reason of raising property values in Brookville. There is not enough evidence to prove that the homeowners in Deerhaven can also use this method to gain property value in Deerhaven for sure. Although, Brookville community is just nearby, the arguer doesn’t tell us that the situation between Deerhaven and Brookville is the same. Brookville might enjoy better position than Deerhaven, so that Brookville can attack（attract） people to investigate the property more easily. (much easier)However, (因为前面没有让步，所以这个地方的转折看起来有点牵强)arguer ignores these important factors to make a conclusion.(因为文章字数偏少，所以我觉得单纯说“可能B的条件比D好”没有说服力，好在哪里应该说清楚，比如，B有更优越的自然风光和良好的投资政策之类的。这样还可以用来充实文章) We can tell that the conclusion is too hasty to convince.



To sum up, if the homeowners want to increase values of property in Deerhaven community, they must analysis the situation of their community and over come（overcome） their own shortcoming (shortcomings)by leaning other’s strong points. A simply copy without any analysis will bring a lot of lose(loss) for the homeowners in Deerhaven.

整体上没什么问题，论证理由也很充分，谬误也找得很准确，但好像只是找出来谬误，关于题目的逻辑关系展开不是很清楚，有点“知其然不知其所以然”的样子，字数有点少，其他都很不错。

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As we know, the property value is related to many factors such as convenient traffic network, perfect supporting facilities, suitable living condition and so on. Unfortunately, the arguer ignores these factors which also affect the property values. As a result, we can tell that the arguer’s idea is not comprehensive. 这句中 可以加精一下批评对作者的盲目性

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谢谢小猫和小灵易碎同学的批改。