ISSUE179~求拍~

xiemeng2370UID: 2749773

TOPIC: ISSUE179 - "What most human beings really want to attain is not knowledge, but certainty. Gaining real knowledge requires taking risks and keeping the mind open-but most people prefer to be reassured rather than to learn the complex and often unsettling truth about anything."
WORDS: 611
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010-1-19 20:14:44

The statement dual claim seemingly appears plausible at first blush. The first claim that certainty is most humans really want to attain but not knowledge, while appealing in some respects, is an over-statement at best. And the second claim that most people prefer to be reassured rather than to learn the complex and often unsettling truth about anything is poorly supported by empirical evidence. If followed to this statement, our society, culture, technology and even civilization will not development for the reason that they are all complex and dramatically unsettled at the beginning.

However, in one respect I agree with the speaker's contention that gaining real knowledge requires taking risks and keeping the mind open for the reason that real knowledge, especially the knowledge hasn't discovered by anyone, is virtually veiled by many other common and ordinary things. For instance, the invention of light bulb by Edison went through hundred times of experiments to seek the proper material of filament. And if our mind just limited to the condition and environment which we see or known, as I mentioned at first, our life firmly won't change and improved at all. For that reason, I strongly agree with the speaker's claim that we must taking risks and keeping the mind open to gain real knowledge, especially the new and undiscovered knowledge.

Despite the merits of the speaker's claim, I find it problematic in two crucial respects. First, common sense informs me that knowledge is a conception that has been proved by previous people and even could equal to certainty. Thus, the people want to attain certainty, to some degree, is also means that he or she desire to obtain knowledge. A daily life example can powerfully prove my conclusion: children are always asked why, how and what about a new thing he or she unknown. We could say that the child want to attain certainty about that unsettling thing. Otherwise, we cannot deny that it isn't also

the knowledge about that new thing. The behavior of desire attain knowledge is our nature sense and ability that we cannot simply beg and omit. Secondly, our everyday experience as humans informs us that the more unsettling thing, the more we want to reassure. That is to say, people prefer to be reassured unsettling truth. Unfortunately and some what ironically, this claim just opposite the speaker's claim that most people prefer to be reassured rather than to learn the complex and often unsettling truth about anything.

Admittedly, we also need to take vast of people that actually don't like thinking and learning or even don't have the ability and intelligent to learn the complex and unsettling truth into account. The phenomenon that a myriad of people quite school early and then pursuit job market to work without brainwork can exactly reflect that condition. However, the others that graduated from university or even decided to pursue knowledge during their whole lifetime like scientists are actually overwhelming the first kind of people. And even though the people dislike learning, they also desire to know the unsettled thing around them for the sake of fearing the unknown thing. Thus, we could conclude that most people desire to obtain unsettling truth, especially the truth that associates with their daily life.

In conclusion, I agree with the speaker insofar as gaining real knowledge requires taking risks and keeping the mind open. However, in a sense the speaker begs the question, by overlooking the fact that knowledge is a kind of certainty, especially for the uncertain and undiscovered thing. Moreover, the claim unfairly ignores equally grave problem that the thing people desire to reassure precisely often unsettling and sometimes even complex.

PS：好兴奋啊~这次只用了不到一个小时就完成了，虽然还是看着模板啥的吧，可是对我自己来说已经是很大很大的进步了。不过由于太在意时间的缘故吧，写的时候思维有点混乱，语言也没想，直接招呼的，求各位帮忙修改一下啦~不胜感激！

Maci.UID: 2731643

The statement dual claim seemingly appears plausible at first blush.

这句看起来确实是很模板 而且有点像是argue里面的套语。

xiemeng2370UID: 2749773

2# Maci.
哈哈~被发现了呢~可是我就20天了~英语基础还很差~没时间让我独创文风了~只能是踩在巨人的肩膀上
坏了~这样不会被判抄袭吧= =

Maci.UID: 2731643

应该不会 没有关系的
不一定要有自己的风格
重在analytical&critical吧
多写多改吧 来得及的
自己也多改改
我帮你简单看下好了 我也不是特别厉害 呵呵

Maci.UID: 2731643

"What most human beings really want to attain is not knowledge, but certainty. Gaining real knowledge requires taking risks and keeping the mind open-but most people prefer to be reassured rather than to learn the complex and often unsettling truth about anything."

写AW，其实开始的时候破题很重要，这个题目我也不熟悉，也没写过。
你觉得这个题目有啥关键词不
找题目中的关键词很重要的 嘿嘿

xiemeng2370UID: 2749773

5# Maci.
额~关键词的话~应该是knowledge and certainty

Maci.UID: 2731643

你有没有去搜一些以往关于这个题目的老帖子？
可以去看看
但不要copy
可以当是打开思路 看了这些帖子后 再看看自己写得
也许会有新的收获

xiemeng2370UID: 2749773

7# Maci.
好的好的~万分感谢！

xiemeng2370UID: 2749773

顶起来顶起来~

sophielynnUID: 2742714

哇好厉害~加油吧亲~

xiemeng2370UID: 2749773

10# sophielynn
不能那个够！

rodgoodUID: 2619326

The statement dual claim seemingly appears plausible at first blush. The first claim that certainty is most humans really want to attain but not knowledge (not应该放在knowledge后面，因为表语从句中certainty是主语，knowledge和其地位一样，省略了is), while appealing in some respects, is an over-statement at best. And the second claim that most people prefer to be reassured rather than to learn the complex and often unsettling truth about anything is poorly supported by empirical evidence. If followed to this statement, our society, culture, technology and even civilization will not development for the reason that they are all complex and dramatically unsettled at the beginning.
开头应该起总领全文的作用，是全文的theme。但是body里面有很多在开头中没有出现的信息。个人觉得不好。

However, in one respect I agree with the speaker's contention that gaining real knowledge requires taking risks and keeping the mind open for the reason that real knowledge, especially the knowledge(the one that) hasn't discovered by anyone, is virtually veiled by many other common and ordinary things. For instance, the invention of light bulb by Edison(by前面是否应该加个动词被动式如made之类的？请确认。或者把by换成of) went through（go through的主语可以是invention?后面的seek也不对） hundred times of experiments to seek the proper material of filament. And if our mind just limited（s 一般现在时） to the condition and environment（情形和环境在knowledge范畴里面？） which we see or known, as I mentioned at first, our life firmly won't change and improved at all.（“如果我们的思想局限在熟悉的……内，我们的生活不会改善”这句话和本段TS没有关系，knowledge哪里去了？） For that reason, I strongly agree with the speaker's claim that we must taking risks and keeping the mind open to gain real knowledge, especially the new and undiscovered knowledge.

Despite the merits of the speaker's claim, I find it problematic in two crucial respects.(个人觉得应该在TS这里把两个方面概括一下，便于读者有准备看下去，毕竟下面的first和second相隔太远了。万一后面没论证清楚，至少这里可以给一个轮廓) First, common sense informs me that knowledge is a conception that has been proved by previous people and even could equal to certainty.（这是你的看法还是共识呢？感觉不能作为后面thus的理由） Thus, the（×） people want to attain certainty, to some degree, is also means that he or she desire to obtain knowledge. A daily life example can powerfully prove my conclusion: children are always asked（ing） why, how and what about a new thing he or she unknown（×）. We could say that the child want to attain certainty about that unsettling thing. Otherwise, we cannot deny that it isn't also the knowledge about that new thing. The behavior of desire attain knowledge is our nature sense and ability that we cannot simply beg and omit. Secondly, our everyday experience as humans informs us that the more unsettling thing, the more we want to reassure. That is to say, people prefer to be reassured unsettling truth. Unfortunately and some what ironically, this claim just opposite the speaker's claim that most people prefer to be reassured rather than to learn the complex and often unsettling truth about anything.（人们的日常生活经验就能够证明题目的命题错误？个人觉得不能。况且这里的经验还不一定公认正确呢。请给出原因和例子）
本段的主题句说“我发现两个有问题的地方”然后戛然而止，接着第一第二就说自己的看法。个人认为不妥。首先应该论述哪里错了，为什么错了，我的看法是什么。让读者自己直接去看作者的看法，然后揣测题目哪里错了，不太好吧。
下面也有类似的问题

Admittedly, we also need to take vast of people that actually don't like thinking and learning or even don't have the ability and intelligent to learn the complex and unsettling truth into account. The phenomenon that a myriad of people quite（×） school early and then pursuit job market to work without brainwork can exactly reflect that condition. However, the others that graduated from university or even decided to pursue knowledge during their whole lifetime like scientists are actually overwhelming the first kind of people. And even though the people dislike learning, they also desire to know the unsettled thing around them for the sake of fearing the unknown thing. Thus, we could conclude that most people desire to obtain unsettling truth, especially the truth that associates with their daily life.

In conclusion, I agree with the speaker insofar as gaining real knowledge requires taking risks and keeping the mind open. However, in a sense the speaker begs the question, by overlooking the fact that knowledge is a kind of certainty, especially for the uncertain and undiscovered thing. Moreover, the claim unfairly ignores equally grave problem that the thing people desire to reassure precisely often unsettling and sometimes even complex.

不好意思，拍得严重了一点，有些也不敢保证正确，只是自己的看法。望批判性接受。
不过可以理解限时的困难，自己现在还没有能力和勇气限时呢，呵呵。而且这个题目也很难。加油吧~~~

这里是我今天的习作issue48，请给予宝贵的建议，谢谢~~~
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xiemeng2370UID: 2749773

12# rodgood
一点也不重，说实话我写的时候思维就挺混乱的~
你批改的太认真了~还帮我弄成doc格式的了~真的让我太感动了~
Thanks a million！