tomatoo的独立作文

amanda_qinyyUID: 2632170

2.11 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In 20 years from now on, students will not use printed books anymore
If you are a serious observer of life, perhaps you have found that more and more people around you prefer getting information and knowledge from ebooks and other resources to printed books. However, there still large numbers of people are learning from printed books, especially those students. Moreover（我觉得用therefore会更恰当一点吧）, I want to baldly（好词） assert that most students will depend on printed books in a long-term period which will be more than 20 years undoubtedly.

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At first, I have to acknowledge that ebooks are indeed more advanced than printed books. They are less space consuming, less money consuming, easier to edit and
so on so forth（这个词组好）. But all of these benefits have a prerequisite（benefits have pre..好像不太合适，不如说there is an unavoidable pre.. for all of these benefits）: we need to own a computer or other related machine first(first可省). Thought（Though?） the society is developing in an incredible speed, I do not believe that every people(person, or everybody) including students can possess a computer in 20 years.(我觉得这里说students in rural area更充分一些) In other words, it is impossible that students will not use printed books anymore for the objective situation.

Even if there is no such an objective limitation, some subjective reasons will make many people keep reading printed books. Books whose history spanned thousands of years are the most traditional way for people to get knowledge(books are the way 主语不大对). It is a kind of culture that is not so easy to disappear completely. For instance, when radio came into people’s life, many experts predicted that newspapers will extinct soon.这个例子很好 The result is we can still enjoy the information on the newspapers nowadays. Because people are not only pursuing the current technology’s convenience, but also want to keep enjoying those traditional cultures. So I promise that the books and other information medium will co-exist in 20 years.

No matter for the objective cause or the subjective reason, the printed booked（books） will not disappear after sever(several?) decades, not to mention 20 years. therefore, I totally believe that students will still use printed books many years later.

Tomatoo的作文一如既往的语言流畅，很多词汇运用的很恰当很自如，值得我好好学习！
和我的作文是两个不同的观点，很新颖，尤其是第三段的那个例子我觉得非常棒！
文章没什么大问题，偶尔一点点输入上的错误再仔细点很容易避免。

tomatooUID: 2754865

48# jbc88

1，to是prefer...to...的TO啊
2，我这次字数是比较少啊，才320左右啊，写的比较急，呵呵
3，多谢指导！

tomatooUID: 2754865

2.17 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology makes people’s lives simpler in turn to make people’s lives more complicated.

It is said that science and technology are the primary productive forces. With the advanced technology, our lives indeed become increasingly convenient and simpler in some fields to some extend. If we speculate it seriously, however, we will find that technology makes our lives more complex definitely.

First of all, on the surface it seems that we benefit from the technology, actually it will take us more time and energy to tackle many troubles which are coming with the technology. As we know, nowadays we can get more all-round information in a quicker way by internet. But just because the information on internet is too abundant, we have to spend more time to choose those information which we really need. Another example, in theory automatic machine can help people save time to do some meaningful jobs instead of waiting lines. The problem is the automatic machine is not always so safe because some evil people adopt certain means could get customers’ passwords. the fact is that it really often happens, the customers may lose some money and have to report the loss or transact procedure again which will be more terrible than standing in lines. Therefore, as I said, technology always brings us more complicated problems.

Anyway, we can easily make corret judgements about the above problems and try our best to deal with them. However, technology also contributes to some unprecedented issues which are too perplexing for us to cope with. For instance, there is still no universally agreed-on evaluation about cloning technique resulting from ethical problems. Clone can be used in medicine to cure diseases and save lifes, whereas it can also help some people commit crimes. So it is difficult to decide whether we will continue the research, whether it is legal to put it into application, and so on so forth. All these will never happen before the technology coming forth. In other words, modern technology really makes our lives more complicated.

Based on the discussion have made, Iife becomes more complex than before, since the technology is developing. What I am saying does not mean complexity is not so good, because complexity and comfort can co-exist if we treat them with appropriate ways.

tomatooUID: 2754865

52# jbc88
有道理，我本来就时间不够，用些这样的example,可少花时间想！

lixinwei1992UID: 2743934

It is said that science and technology are the primary productive forces. With the advanced technology, our lives indeed become increasingly convenient and simpler in some fields to some extend（这里的extend想表达什么意思呢？extend是动词）. If we speculate（speculate不可直接加名词吧貌似，可以用seoculate on/about/upon） it seriously, however, we will find that technology makes our lives more complex definitely.（这里的definitely换个位置会更舒服一些)
First of all, on the surface it seems that we benefit from the technology, （我建议是改成technology is beneficial to us.这里是个句号，一句话已经结束了）actually, it will take us more time and energy to tackle many troubles which are coming with(记不大请是coming along 还是coming with 了) the technology. As we all know, nowadays we can get more all-round information in a quicker way by internet.(建议多使用被动句等，使句式多样化，例如internet provides people with all-round information) But just because the information on internet is too abundant, we have to spend more time to choose those information which we really need. Another example, in theory automatic machine can help people save time to do some meaningful jobs instead of waiting lines. The problem is the automatic machine is not always so safe(safe enough 是不是更好些) because some evil people（指具体哪一类人）adopt certain means could get customers’ passwords. the fact is that it really often happens, the customers may lose money and have to report the loss or transact procedure again which will be more terrible than standing in lines. Therefore, as I said, technology always brings us more complicated problems.
Anyway,（换一个过渡自然点的词） we can easily make corret judgements about the above problems ，and try our best to deal with them. However, technology also contributes to some unprecedented issues which are too perplexing for us to cope with. For instance, there is still no universally agreed-on evaluation about cloning technique resulting from ethical problems. Clone can be used in medicine to cure diseases and save lifes, whereas it can also help some people commit crimes. So it is difficult to decide whether we will continue the research or not, whether it is legal to put it into application, and so on so forth. All these will never happen before the technology coming forth. In other words, modern technology really makes our lives more complicated.% ]2 h9 Q' _8 t+ t5 _1 q()z
这一段分论点的结尾好像和上一段有些重复，不要老是说让我们的生活变得更复杂了，可以从多方面总结
Based on the discussion have made（above）, since the technology is developing,(换了一下位置)Iife becomes more complex than before, What I am saying does not mean complexity is not so good（good enough或者别的词）, because complexity and comfort can co-exist if we treat them with appropriate ways

在那么短的时间写出这样的文章真的好不容易啊~佩服！文章中也有很多让我学习的闪光点~我第一次改作文，可能对的都能让我改错了...就多多见谅吧~一起加油！

tomatooUID: 2754865

54# lixinwei1992

1，应该是to some extent，我拼写错误，呵呵，是“在一定程度上”的意思
2，"come with" and "come along with" both ok!
3, not so adj可能比较口语化一些，对的，not adj enough好一点
4，非常感谢，改得很认真！

tomatooUID: 2754865

2.19 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for a teacher to help students gain self-confidence than to teach them specific knowledge?
It is said that teaching a person how to fish is more significant than giving a person fishes. It is the same principle as to students, learning how to study is more crucial than getting knowledge. We can see that helping students gain self-confidence is a kind of ways of teaching them methods. So as far as I am concerned, aquiring self-confidence is absolutely more important than gaining knowledge itself.

To begin with, self-confidence is a prerequisite for students to learn knowledge more effectively and efficiently. Because if a student who is very confident can always dare to express their own ideas and more willing to participate those discussions and activities both of which are beneficial to students study. For instance, in an acting class which require students to perform in front of large numbers of people, those students who are confident will do better than others. Their confidences will bring them the natural performences which can also bring them more praise. The praise will make them give the acting class more preference which can also promote them to study hard. It is a very good cycle for study. On the opposite, if teachers just tell students what to perform, how to perform,
it will be boring and not helpful for students, especially for those shy students who maybe even would not want to stand in the stage, not to mention do well in such classes. Therefore, gaining self-confidence should come first rather than the knowledge.

In addition, knowledge is more easier for students to get comparing with the self-confidence, so the teachers are supposed to focus on those difficult stuff. We know that in such an abundant information society, students can get the knowledge from many resources like books, internet, and so on so forth. However, those spirit aspects such as self-confidence once which are lacked will be hard to get and this will influence their future life . For example, my little brother who is very shy always be afraid of express himself. Nobody try to help him to aquire self-cofidence resulting from many factors. Until now he still feel uncomfortable when communicate with people, especially those unfamiliar persons. The point worth mentioning is that he is knowledgable through learning by himself from books and other resources. However, he can not learn how to become confident even though he know he lack of self-confidence. It is not so easy to learn such spirit things by one’s own, so we really need the teachers’ help.

Based on the discussion above, I totally agree that it is more significant for teachers to help students gain self-confidence rather than teach them knowledge.

helenhuang19UID: 2742635

56# tomatoo
omg,, 你写了500多，才超10分钟。。正常的啦

helenhuang19UID: 2742635

2.19 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for a teacher to help students gain self-confidence than to teach them specific knowledge?


It is said that teaching a person how to fish is more significant than giving a person fishes. It is the same principle as to students, learning how to study is more crucial than getting knowledge. We can see that helping students gain self-confidence is a kind of ways of teaching them methods. So as far as I am concerned, aquiring self-confidence is absolutely more important than gaining knowledge itself.+ P: }' Q' o) L6 [) `$ }5 e: J
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To begin with, self-confidence is a prerequisite for students to learn knowledge more effectively and efficiently. Because if a student who is very confident can always dare to express their own ideas and more willing to participate those discussions and activities both of which are beneficial to students study. For instance, in an acting class which require (requires) students to perform in front of large numbers of people, those students who are confident will do better than others. Their confidences will bring them the natural performences which can also bring them more praise. The praise will make them give the acting class more preference which can also promote them to study hard.(The praise will make them have more preference to the acting class which can also promote them to study hard. )It is a very good cycle for study. On the opposite, if teachers just tell students what to perform, how to perform,  kit(kids?) will be boring and the class is not helpful for students, especially for those shy students who maybe even would not want to stand in the(on) stage, not to mention do well in such classes. Therefore, gaining self-confidence should come first rather than the knowledge.


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In addition, knowledge is more easier for students to get comparing with the self-confidence, so the teachers are supposed to focus on those difficult stuff. （提了却没继续阐述）We know that in such an abundant information society, students can get the knowledge from many resources like books, internet, and so on so forth(?). However, those spirit aspects such as self-confidence once which are lacked will be hard to get and this(which) will influence negatively their future life . For example, my little brother who is very shy always be afraid of express himself. Nobody try to help him to aquire self-cofidence resulting from many factors. Until now he still feel(has felt) uncomfortable when communicatecommunicating with people, especially those unfamiliar persons(person 没有复数，people). The point worth mentioning is that he is knowledgable through learning by himself from books and other resources. However, he can not learn how to become confident even though he know he lack of (lacks) self-confidence. It is not so easy to learn such spirit things by one’s own, so we(one) really need the teachers’ help.5 Q' o) v. |! Y( @/ B2 W( o

Based on the discussion above, I totally agree that it is more significant for teachers to help students gain self-confidence rather than to teach them knowledge.

论证的很好哈，相对我那象鬼一样的逻辑嘿
语法问题明显少少的，
如果你仍旧超时，就试着写少点吧，我觉得语法错误更致命
写的很好，加油，
前面都没什么错，到后面觉得你精疲力竭了




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看了楼上的同学的批改，我是不是太挑了。。。