Issue235 忠诚 谢谢，请留下链接，一定回拍

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最新修改贴在了3楼，欢迎拍之~~

TOPIC: ISSUE235 - "Most people are taught that loyalty is a virtue. But loyalty-whether to one's friends, to one's school or place of employment, or to any institution-is all too often a destructive rather than a positive force."

Loyalty, as a virtue, which means faith, obedience, and devotion, is the base of a society and needs to be handed down from generation to another. Although during history or even today there are many destructive events pushed forward by blind and overdue loyalty, we should positively recognize that mostly it is loyalty that makes teams integrated, leading to the prosperity of the society.

Admittedly, sometimes blind and overdue loyalty is utilized by those who hold unjust purposes, causing devastating results. In the Second World War, Japanese people answered the call of militarists to launch the aggression to other nations, in the name of loyalty to Mikado, and brought about tragedies to Asian countries. If not for the faith and obedience to Mikado and the country, why did the Japanese soldiers devote their lives to the war? But what we should understand is that loyalty itself is harmless, thus blameless; while a blind or overdue one is the key of the problem, which is always become a tool to control integrity by others. Therefore, what we should do is educate people to harbor rational loyalty to others rather than give it up in haste.

In most cases, loyalty acts as a positive force reinforcing the mutual credits and communication that make people enjoying a happy life and groups working more efficiently.

Firstly, people with loyalty to friends, organization they work for, and the nation will have a life with goal, harmonious environment, thus happiness and fruitful. For one thing, they have a relatively pure mind realizing their value for their friends and the group to make achievement. With loyalty, they trust others, understand the situations the group meet and is willing to devote all their time and energy to the work; they won't be distracted by other lure that makes them confused with their aims. For another, loyal people can probably enjoy a more relax environment in their life. Since they are always genuine and credible to others, they will be entangled with fewer imbroglios in personal relations, suffering less annoyance, and living a simple life that is good for their health and work. The head of our institute, professor Huang, is a good example. After study from Clemson University, he came home and started his research in the field of microwave chemistry. He loves his work, we students as well as our college very much, spending part of time on the fundamental courses for freshmen despise of busy research work. He trusts his partners in the group and other faculty, willing to share progress with others. Meanwhile, he is also admired by subordinates and students. Only with an age of 40s, professor Huang has become Changjiang Scholar for his great contribution to the field.

Furthermore, loyalty prompts teamwork in a group that is placed much more emphasis on nowadays. As the development of the society with a trend of globalization, individuals can hardly achieve progress without any other help from partners; groups also need members struggle together towards the same aim. Thanks to loyalty of everyone, cohesive power will be injected into the group, without which, things would be followed by suspect, jealousy, or even hostility that are fatal to the team. Successful world are filled with such ensamples. Haier Corporation, one of the biggest household electrical appliance manufacturers, was once a factory facing bankrupt in 1980s. How could it survive and thrive? As David Parks, the director of the branch factory in South Carolina established in 1999, once said to journalist, everyone here is genuine and endeavor with the same purpose of development. Unlike other American workers, always shift jobs every three or five years, local workers in Haier are willing to work here forever. It is thus clearly that loyalty plays an important part in the development of this increasingly global corporation.

In general, though blind and overdue loyalty will become a devastating force in certain circumstances, we are supposed to recognize that rational one is of great significance for the growth of both individuals and groups. Thereby, loyalty should be inherited as a treasure o f virtue.

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因為自己也是新手 不敢給別人看邏輯 所以只是稍微改了一下
覺得樓主一句話中的逗號太多了 割裂了句子中各個成分的關係

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谢谢你的修改，我明天回拍。这是我根据你的建议作的改进。

TOPIC: ISSUE235 - "Most people are taught that loyalty is a virtue. But loyalty-whether to one's friends, to one's school or place of employment, or to any institution-is all too often a destructive rather than a positive force."

Loyalty, as a virtue, which means faith, obedience, and devotion, is the base of a society and needs to be handed down from generation to another. Although during history or even today there are many destructive events pushed forward by blind and overdue loyalty, we should positively recognize that mostly it is loyalty that makes teams integrated and thus society prosperous.

Admittedly, utilized by those who hold unjust purposes, blind and overdue loyalty sometimes causes devastating results. In the Second World War, Japanese people answered the call of militarists to launch the aggression to other nations, in the name of loyalty to Mikado, but brought about tragedies to Asian countries. If not for the faith and obedience to Mikado and the country, why did the Japanese soldiers devote their lives to the war? But what we should understand is that loyalty itself is harmless, thus blameless; while a blind or overdue one is the key of the problem, which always become a tool to control the righteous by others. Therefore, what we should do is educate people to harbor rational loyalty rather than give it up in haste.

In most cases, however, loyalty acts as a positive force reinforcing the mutual credits and communication that make people enjoying a happier life and groups working more efficiently.

Firstly, people with loyalty to friends, organization they work for, and the nation will have a life with goal, harmonious environment, thus happiness and fruitful. For one thing, they have a relatively pure mind realizing their value for their friends and the group to make achievement. With loyalty, they trust others, understand the situations the group meet and are willing to devote all their time and energy to the work; they won't be distracted by other lure that makes them confused with their aims. For another, loyal people can probably enjoy a more relaxed environment in their life. Since they are always genuine and credible to others, they will be entangled with fewer imbroglios in personal relations, suffering less annoyance, and living a simple life that is good for their health and work. The head of our institute, professor Huang, is a good example. After having finished study in Clemson University, he came home and started his research in the field of microwave chemistry. He loves his work, we students as well as our college very much, spending part of time on the fundamental courses for freshmen despise (despite) of busy research work. He trusts his partners in the group and other faculty, willing to share progress with others. Meanwhile, he is also admired by subordinates and students. Only with an age of 40s, professor Huang has become Changjiang Scholar for his great contribution to the field.

Furthermore, loyalty prompts teamwork in a group, upon which much more emphasis is placed nowadays. As the development of the society with a trend of globalization, individuals can hardly achieve progress without help from partners; groups also need members strugglling together towards the mutual goal. Thanks to loyalty of everyone, cohesive power will be injected into the group, without which, things would be followed by suspect, jealousy, or even hostility that are fatal to the team. Successful world are filled with such ensamples. Haier Corporation, one of the biggest household electrical appliance manufacturers, was once a factory facing bankrupt in 1980s. How could it survive and thrive? As David Parks, the director of the branch factory in South Carolina established in 1999, once said to journalist, everyone here is genuine and endeavor with the same purpose of development. Unlike other American workers, always shift jobs every three or five years, local workers in Haier are willing to work here forever. It is thus clearly that loyalty plays an important part in the development of this increasingly global corporation.

In general, though blind and overdue loyalty will become a devastating force in certain circumstances, we are supposed to recognize that rational one is of great significance for the growth of both individuals and groups. Thereby, loyalty should be inherited as a treasure o f virtue.

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TOPIC: ISSUE235 - "Most people are taught that loyalty is a virtue. But loyalty-whether to one's friends, to one's school or place of employment, or to any institution-is all too often a destructive rather than a positive force."

Loyalty, as a virtue, which means faith, obedience, and devotion, is the base of a society and needs to be handed down from generation to another. Although during history or even today there are many destructive events pushed forward by blind and overdue loyalty, we should positively recognize that mostly it is loyalty that makes teams integrated and thus society prosperous.开头简洁明确。学习了。

Admittedly, utilized by those who hold unjust purposes, blind and overdue loyalty sometimes causes devastating results. In the Second World War, Japanese people answered the call of militarists to launch the aggression to other nations, in the name of loyalty to Mikado, but brought about tragedies to Asian countries. If not for the faith and obedience to Mikado and the country, why did the Japanese soldiers devote their lives to the war? But what we should understand is that loyalty itself is harmless, thus blameless; while a blind or overdue one is the key of the problem, which always become a tool to control the righteous by others. Therefore, what we should do is educate people to harbor rational loyalty rather than give it up in haste.

In most cases, however, loyalty acts as a positive force reinforcing the mutual credits and communication that make people enjoying a happier life and groups working more efficiently（楼主在细看一下，我记得make sb do而不是doing）.

Firstly, people with loyalty to friends, organization they work for, and the nation will have a life with goal, harmonious environment, thus happiness and fruitful(楼主的a life with goal 与 harmonious environment 并列吧，可是后面的happiness 与fruitful，词性也不同). For one thing, they have a relatively pure mind realizing their value for their friends and the group to make achievement. With loyalty, they trust others, understand the situations the group meet and are willing to devote all their time and energy to the work; they won't be distracted by other lure that makes them confused with their aims. For another, loyal people can probably enjoy a more relaxed environment in their life. Since they are always genuine and credible to others, they will be entangled with fewer imbroglios in personal relations, suffering less annoyance, and living a simple life that is good for their health and work. The head of our institute, professor Huang, is a good example. After having finished study in Clemson University, he came home and started his research in the field of microwave chemistry. He loves his work, we students as well as our college very much, spending part of time on the fundamental courses for freshmen despise (despite) of busy research work. He trusts his partners in the group and other faculty, willing to share progress with others. Meanwhile, he is also admired by subordinates and students. Only with an age of 40s, professor Huang has become Changjiang Scholar for his great contribution to the field. 说实话，个人感觉这一段有点不明确。作者一方面想说的是忠诚可以营造一个和谐的环境，因而身心快乐blanla，另一方面是事业上的发展，但是感觉教授的例子不太充足，就是说他对专业的热爱，如果能在给他加点困难，比如说尽管很冷门啊，很多同行都转行啊，但是由于对自己兴趣的忠诚，选择继续研究，最终有所成绩blabla.

Furthermore, loyalty prompts teamwork in a group, upon which much more emphasis is placed nowadays. As the development of the society with a trend of globalization, individuals can hardly achieve progress without help from partners; groups also need members strugglling together towards the mutual goal. Thanks to loyalty of everyone, cohesive power will be injected into the group, without which, things would be followed by suspect, jealousy, or even hostility that are fatal to the team. Successful world are filled with such ensamples.（example） Haier Corporation, one of the biggest household electrical appliance manufacturers, was once a factory facing bankrupt in 1980s. How could it survive and thrive? As David Parks, the director of the branch factory in South Carolina established in 1999, once said to journalist, everyone here is genuine and endeavor with the same purpose of development. Unlike other American workers, always shift jobs every three or five years, local workers in Haier are willing to work here forever. It is thus clearly that loyalty plays an important part in the development of this increasingly global corporation.个人感觉这一段论证的很好，因为观点比较明确，就是有助于团队的发展。引用海尔的例子，还是挺恰当的


In general, though blind and overdue loyalty will become a devastating force in certain circumstances, we are supposed to recognize that rational one is of great significance for the growth of both individuals and groups. Thereby, loyalty should be inherited as a treasure o f virtue.

楼主的水平已经很好了，呵呵，词汇方面也很好，感觉有一点就是绿色的那一段一类的，用and 连接的，如果不是前后的都是一种词性，就是一会动词一会系动词。看起来有点不舒服，语法上还是对的啊。楼主加油，还有就是楼主是不是限时的，如果限时就很好了，呵呵偶到现在还没限时呢，楼主的机考什么时候啊。https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=1059482&extra=   欢迎回拍啊

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