琳子的综合写作

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TPO3 By linzi
On the whole, the professor in the lecture totally disagrees with the view made in the reading that the Portrait of an Elderly Woman in a White Bonnet was not painted by Rembrandit.

First of all, the professor states that the color of this painting was not original. In order to increase the value of this painting, some people changed the color of the painting to  make the woman look more formal. However, this point is not mentioned in the reading material, which states that the inconsistency of the cloths that the woman is wearing reveals that this painting is not Rembrandit's work.

Second, it is true that the light and shadow do not fit in this painting, which is put forward in the reading. However, the professor has a quite different opinion with that in the reading material. He argues that the original light and shadow is realistic just we expect in Rembrandit's work. He explains that if the color in the surface is removed, the original color reflects the light illuminated in the face, and it is fit with the shadow.

Finally, in the reading, the author believes that because the painting was painted on a panel made of more than one pieces of wood, which was not Rembrant's tradition, this painting was not painted by him. On the other hand, the professor says that the painting had been changed by others in order to make it  more grand and more valuable. Actually, the professor states, that the orginal painting was on a single piece of wood. And in addition, the wood panel of this painting came from the same tree as that used for another painting by Rembrandit.

ganbeUID: 2759187

[On the whole] Generally, the professor in the lecture totally disagrees with the view made [in] by the reading who says that the Portrait of an Elderly Woman in a White Bonnet was not painted by Rembrandt.

First of all, the professor states that the color of this painting was not original. In order to increase the value of this painting, some people changed the color of the painting to make the woman look more formal. However, this point is not mentioned in the reading material, which states that the inconsistency of the clothes that the woman is wearing reveals that this painting is not Rembrandt's work. [改变的是只是一部分将衣服变为fur color, 细节是fur color 是原作完成一百多年后加上的]

Second, it is true that the light and shadow do not fit in this painting, which is put forward in the reading. However, the professor has a quite different opinion with that in the reading material. He argues that the original light and shadow is are realistic just we expect in Rembrandt's work. [He explains that] If the color in the surface is removed, the original color reflects the light illuminated in the face, and it is fit with the shadow. [把fur color去掉后光影就吻合了，original color出来应该就对上]

Finally, in the reading, the author believes that this painting was not painted by Rembrandt, because the painting was painted on a panel made of more than one piece of wood and this was not Rembrandt's tradition, [this painting was not painted by him.] On the other hand, the professor says that the painting had been changed by others in order to make it grander and more valuable. Actually, [the professor states that] the original painting was on a single piece of wood. [And] In addition, the professor demonstrates that the wood panel of this painting came from the same tree [as that,] which used for another painting by Rembrandt.

删除线不支持，括号内的代表删掉的部分。

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TPO4 by 琳子
Generally, the professor challenges the point of view that the dinosaurs are endotherms, which is illustrated in the reading material.

First of all, the author in the reading material says that the discovery of dinosaur fossils in the polar regions indicates they are endotherms. However, the professor argues that this discovery does not prove the dinosaurs are endotherms. For one thing, at that time, the polar regions were much warmer than those in today and dinosaurs could live there even they were not endotherms. In addition, the professor also points out that the polar dinosaurs were adapt to the cold place and could not migrate to warmer areas.         

Secondly, the author states that the legs of dinosaurs are undereath their bodies, just as other modern endotherms' legs are, so dinosaurs would be endotherms. In contrast, the professor holds the opposite opinion and believes that the legs position can not necessarily indicate this conclusion. And she provides us another explanation for the legs' position by saying that the legs are used to  support the heavy weight. She states that only with the legs under the body can the dinosaur grow into a large size.

Finally, the professor also points out that the dinosaurs have a specific kind of bones, which can indicate they would stop growing during cooler period. Furthermore, she points out that if the dinosaurs are endotherms, they would not stop growing even in cool environment. This point casts doubt on the author's opinion in the reading stating that the bone structure called Haversian canals can prove that the dinosaurs are endotherms.

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TPO5 BY琳子
Generally, the professor challenges the three theories about how the "great houses" built by settlements of Chaco Canyon were used, which are provided by the author in the reading material.

First of all, the author  presents one theory by stating that the buildings were usded exclusively for residents because they have a apartment-appearance. However the professor argues that these buildings were not residential. He explains that if the buildings were used for residents only, there should be fire places for cooking. But in face, in the "great houses" there are only a few fire places for just 10 families to cook.

Secondly, the author also provides another theory by stating that the Chaco strutures were used for food storing for the reason that the size of these houses makes them a appropriate place for the storing. In contrast, the professor holds the opposite opinion and believes that it is not plausible to make this conclusion. And moreover he states that if they were used for storing places, there would be some traces left, such as some big containers. However there is none.

Finally, the author puts forward a third theory by saying that the Chaco strutures were used for ceremonial meetings for the reason that some discarded pots were found there. On the contrary, the professor casts doubts on this point by stating that other materials also have been found there, and these materials even include some building materials such as sands, stones, and contruction tools. So the professor explains that it is much more likely that these materials besides the pots were the building materials that were not used up by the settlements, but not the ceremonial stuff.
辛苦修改的同学啦，谢谢~请狠拍

wyacUID: 2633619

Generally, the professor challenges the three theories about how the "great houses" built by settlements of Chaco Canyon were used, which are provided by the author in the reading material.

First of all, the author presents one theory by stating that the buildings were usded（used） exclusively (好词) for residents because they have a（an） apartment-appearance. However the professor argues that these buildings were not residential. He explains that if the buildings were used for residents only, there should be fire places for cooking. But in face (fact), in one of the largest(最大的中的一个) "great houses" there are only a few fire places for just 10 families to cook.

Secondly, the author also provides another theory by stating that the Chaco strutures were used for food storing for the reason that the size of these houses makes them a(an) appropriate place for the（删去）storing. In contrast, the professor holds the opposite opinion and believes that it is not plausible to make this conclusion. And moreover he states that if they were used for storing places（删去）, there would be some traces left, such as some big containers. However there is none（原文说很少遗迹，并非一点也没有）.

Finally, the author puts forward a third theory by saying that the Chaco strutures were used for ceremonial meetings for the reason that some discarded pots were found there. On the contrary, the professor casts doubts on this point by stating that other materials also have been found there, and these materials even include some building materials such as sands, stones, and contruction tools. So the professor explains that it is much more likely that these materials besides the pots were the building materials that were not used up by the settlements, but not the ceremonial stuff.

TO琳子：
总的来说，点抓的很全，用词也较丰富，但其中几个点不是很准确，
另外建议写完之后，在发上来寄托之前，把文章放到word里面check一下，这样就会减少很多文字错误。
总之，加油哇！^_^

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对不起，改晚了
TPO4 by 琳子
Generally, the professor challenges the point of view that the dinosaurs are endotherms, which is illustrated in the reading material.' r6 I" @- J2 s9 ~

First of all, the author in the reading material says that the discovery of dinosaur fossils in the polar regions indicates they are endotherms. However, the professor argues that this discovery does not prove the dinosaurs are endotherms. For one thing, at that time(这样用可以吗,我不确定哦，我觉得把at that time放到后面是不是好点？), the polar regions were much warmer than those in today at that time ，and dinosaurs could live there even they were not endotherms. In addition, the professor also points out that the polar dinosaurs were adapt to the cold place and could not migrate to warmer areas.         

Secondly, the author states that the legs of dinosaurs are undereath （拼错：underneath）their bodies, just as other modern endotherms' legs are, so dinosaurs（用代词they是不是更好点？） would be endotherms. In contrast, the professor holds the opposite opinion and believes that the legs position can not necessarily indicate this conclusion. And she provides us another explanation for the legs' position by saying that the legs are used to  support the heavy weight. She states that only with the legs under the body can the dinosaur grow into a large size.! P" ?% b. e' Q8 D! h0 K( r3 _
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Finally, the professor also points out that the dinosaurs have a specific kind of bones, which can indicate they would stop growing during cooler period. Furthermore, she points out that if the dinosaurs are endotherms, they would not stop growing even in cool environment. This point casts doubt on the author's opinion in the reading stating that the bone structure called Haversian canals can prove that the dinosaurs are endotherms.
（总结：我个人认为每段开始可以先说阅读/听力，再叙述听力/阅读，你的第一段和第二段都是先叙author，再professor,但是第三段就颠倒过来了。。不知道这个有没有影响。另外，个人认为你在叙述阅读材料内容时，可以考虑用更好的句子讲阅读材料的信息用自己的话转述出来，这样可能显示作者良好的复述实力。个人观点，仅供参考~最后，谢谢琳子给我的批阅，感谢！ By 平常心）

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Generally, the professor challenges the three theories about how the "great houses" built by settlements （这个跟主题没什么关系，可以删掉，然后把of 改成in）of Chaco Canyon were used（for）, which are provided by the author in the reading material.（我不建议你第一段只用一个句子表达， 这样读起来有些费力，可分成两个句子写，个人拙见~）

First of all, the author  presents one theory by stating that the buildings were used exclusively for residents because they have a apartment-appearance. However the professor argues that these buildings were not residential. He explains that if the buildings were used for residents only, there should be fire places for cooking. But in face（fact）, in the "great houses" there are only a few fire places for just 10 families to cook.(这里应该再提一下房子的数量很多，远远超过10，这样论证才更有力)
Secondly, the author also provides another theory by stating that the Chaco structures were used for food storing for the reason that the size of these houses makes them an appropriate place for the storing. In contrast, the professor holds the opposite opinion and believes that it is not plausible to make this conclusion. And moreover (moreover 和and用一个就行了) he states that if they were used for storing places, there would be some traces left, such as some big containers. However there is none.

Finally, the author puts forward a third theory by saying that the Chaco structures were used for ceremonial meetings for the reason that some discarded pots were found there. On the contrary, the professor casts doubts on this point by stating that other materials also have been found there, and these materials even include some building materials such as sands, stones,（细节，学习了~） and constructions tools. So the professor explains that it is much more likely that these materials besides the pots were the building materials that were not used up by the settlements（好像不是settlements吧，应该是construction workers）, but not the ceremonial stuff.  
我是第一次写综合写作，自己仅提了些拙见，楼主可参考下~楼主写的不错，大部分细节都写出来了，只是语言应该再简洁些，观点方面，尽量保证展示出阅读和听力观点中的对立点~~加油~O(∩_∩)O~

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TPO6 by linzi
Generally, the professor challenges the point of view that the communal online encyclopedias have some disadvantages compared with the traditional, printed ones, which is illustrated by the author in the reading material.

First of all, the author says that being lack of academic credentials, the contributors have a higher probability to make many errors in the communal online encyclopedias than in the printed ones. However, the professor argues that almost every edition of encyclopedias has some mistakes. It is very hard to find an comprehensive encyclopedia without mistakes. In addition, the professor also points out that it is much easier to correct the errors in the online encyclopedias than in the traditional ones.

Secondly, the author in the reading points out that the user of communal online encyclopedias could not distinguish the original entry if there are some changes in the text. In contrast, the professor holds the opposite opinion and believes that the format of the text will not change. Moreover, the online encyclopedias have some mechanism to monitor these changes to help the users to tell the entry.

Finally, the author also puts forward that the communal encylopedias just concentrate on the hot topics. On the contrary, the professor casts doubt on this point by stating that only the online encyclopedias can decide what is important to people's life. She states that they can reflect the wide range varity of interests that people have. More importantly, they can also provide a great diversity of articles on certain topics, which is the biggest advantages of commual online encyclopedias.

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对不起，改晚了
TPO6 by linzi
Generally, the professor challenges the point of view that the communal online encyclopedias have some disadvantages compared with the traditional, printed ones, which is用are吧？ illustrated by the author in the reading materials.
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First of all, the author个人觉得用reading更好 says that being lack of academic credentials, the contributors have a higher probability to make many errors in the communal online encyclopedias than in the printed ones. However, the professor argues that almost every edition of encyclopedias has some mistakes. It is very hard to find an改a comprehensive encyclopedia without mistakes. In addition, the professor also points out that it is much easier to correct the errors in the online encyclopedias than in the traditional ones.; j5 _& b& A" P; M2 B/ ]
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Secondly, the author in the reading points out that the user of communal online encyclopedias could not distinguish the original entry if there are some changes in the text. In contrast, the professor holds the opposite opinion and believes that the format of the text will not change. Moreover, the online encyclopedias have some mechanism这里是说editors to monitor these changes to help the users to tell the entry.

Finally, the author also puts forward that the communal encylopedias just concentrate on the hot topics. On the contrary, the professor casts doubt on this point by stating that only the online encyclopedias can decide what is important to people's life. She states that they can reflect the wide range varity of interests that people have. More importantly, they can also provide a great diversity of articles on certain topics, which is the biggest advantages of commual online encyclopedias.

琳子写的很好，细节全都照顾到了，学习学习，仅有些小问题，已用红色标记出。对于字数，上次在群里据说综合征225字以内较好，个人建议再简洁些～

小心littleheartUID: 2726034

Generally, the professor challenges the point of view that the communal online encyclopedias have some disadvantages compared with the traditional, printed ones, which is illustrated by the author in the reading material.（言简意赅的开头，学习了~O(∩_∩)O~）

First of all, the author says that being lack of academic credentials, the contributors have a higher probability to make many errors in the communal online encyclopedias than in the printed ones. However, the professor argues that almost every edition of encyclopedias has some mistakes. It is very hard to find an comprehensive encyclopedia without mistakes. In addition, the professor also points out that it is much easier to correct the errors in the online encyclopedias than in the traditional ones.

Secondly, the author in the reading points out that the user of communal online encyclopedias could not distinguish the original entry if there are some changes in the text. In contrast, the professor holds the opposite opinion and believes that the format of the text will not change.（最好能说一下为什么will not change~因为是only-read format,我自己也没听清这个~囧） Moreover, the online encyclopedias have some mechanism to monitor these changes to help the users to tell the entry.

Finally, the author also puts forward that the communal encyclopedias just concentrate on the hot topics. On the contrary, the professor casts doubt on this point by stating that only the online encyclopedias can decide what is important to people's life.(这个观点好像有点偏激，我觉得这个观点应该是在reading中描述traditional encyclopedia的，就是在reading中，traditional encyclopedia能有的放矢的选择一些信息，而不像online one没有重点) She states that they can reflect the（a） wide range varity of interests that people have. More importantly, they can also provide a great diversity of articles on certain topics, which is the biggest advantage of communal online encyclopedias.

楼主真的写的很不错，就是有个别句子观点有点怪，已经在上面标出来了~想问一下，楼主在练习的时候，听力一般只听一遍么~~好厉害啊~~把细节都写出来了~~学习ing~~~