【Clover】第三次习作 Issue 25 ——Julyman

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写得太烂了~自己都不敢再看一眼~~哎……

25、Anyone can make things bigger and more complex. What requires real effort and courage is to move in the opposite direction-in other words, to make things as simple as possible.



We conclude theorems from complicated natural phenomena; we make rules to avoid chaos; we summarize experiences to get rid of confusions. All the things we do above are in order to make things simple. Simplicity let people feel easy and safe.

It certainly requires real effort and courage to make things simple. For instance, when facing to a complex situation, judicious administers should give up some profits in order to hold the emphases. Deciding which to be quitted asks for strong courage and determination.
That is to say, to make things simple requires the abilities, which are thought to be a necessary quality for a success, to trade off and figure out the emphases. Moreover, make things simple means exclude the varied interferences surrounding, especially in this era full of complex information and rapidly transformed technologies. How to concentrate the attentions on the goal, how to pick out the valuable information from the sea of data and how to get rid of the colorful world filled of lures outside become a definitive problem which calls for stability and decision. In a word, to make things simple calls for real effort and courage.



On the other hand, it is not easy to make things complex, for complication means more manpower, more material resources and more financial resources. The goal, on the surface, seems to be achieved by a simple way, but, without good fortune, it seems to be reasonable that coming to turns with varied problems on the process. So a good administer will take these problems into account, which may cause a lot of waste of resources, with more heavy pressure on the shoulder. Hence one can see that, not everyone can make things bigger and more complex, because, like making things simple, making things more complicate calls for real effort and courage, too.


To sum up, whether to make things simple or complex both require real effort and courage. The people who equipped the two qualities mentioned above will be the one who achieve the aim at last.

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25、Anyone can make things bigger and more complex. What requires real effort and courage is to move in the opposite direction-in other words, to make things as simple as possible.



We conclude theorems from complicated natural phenomena; we make rules to avoid chaos; we summarize experiences to get rid of confusions. All the things we do above are in order(有be in order to这种用法吗？) to make things simple. Simplicity let people feel easy and safe.

It certainly requires real effort and courage to make things simple. For instance, when facing to a complex situation, judicious administers should give up some profits in order to hold the emphases. Deciding which to be quitted asks for strong courage and determination.
That is to say, to make things simple requires the abilities, which are thought to be a necessary quality for a success, to trade off and figure out the emphases. Moreover, make things simple means exclude the varied interferences surrounding, especially in this era full of complex information and rapidly transformed technologies. How to concentrate the attentions on the goal, how to pick out the valuable information from the sea of data and how to get rid of the colorful world filled of（full of或者filled with，两个都可以） lures outside become a definitive problem which calls for stability and decision. In a word, to make things simple calls for real effort and courage.



On the other hand, it is not easy to make things complex, for complication means more manpower, more material resources and more financial resources. The goal, on the surface, seems to be achieved by a simple way, but, without good fortune, it seems to be reasonable that coming to turns with varied problems on the process. So a good administer will take these problems into account, which may cause a lot of waste of resources（a waste of many resources）, with more heavy pressure on the shoulder. Hence one can see that, not everyone can make things bigger and more complex, because, like making things simple, making things more complicate calls for real effort and courage, too.


To sum up, whether to make things simple or complex both require real effort and courage. The people who equipped the two qualities mentioned above will be the one who achieve the aim at last.


蓝色标出的词我用的比较少，所以我也不确定是否用的准确，如果用的对，那值得学习

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25、Anyone can make things bigger and more complex. What requires real effort and courage is to move in the opposite direction-in other words, to make things as simple as possible.

We conclude theorems from complicated natural phenomena; we make rules to avoid chaos; we summarize experiences to get rid of confusions. All the things we do above are in order to make things simple. Simplicity let people feel easy and safe.
It certainly requires real effort and courage to make things simple. For instance, when facing to a complex situation, judicious administers should give up some profits in order to hold the emphases. Deciding which to be quitted asks for strong courage and determination.
That is to say, to make things simple requires the abilities, which are thought to be a necessary quality for a success, to trade off and figure out the emphases. Moreover, make things simple means exclude the varied interferences surrounding, especially in this era full of complex information and rapidly transformed technologies. How to concentrate the attentions on the goal, how to pick out the valuable information from the sea of data and how to get rid of the colorful world filled of lures outside become a definitive problem which calls for stability and decision. In a word, to make things simple calls for real effort and courage.

On the other hand, it is not easy to make things complex, for complication means more manpower, more material resources and more financial resources. The goal, on the surface, seems to be achieved by a simple way, but, without good fortune, it seems to be reasonable that coming to turns with varied problems on the process. So a good administer will take these problems into account, which may cause a lot of waste of resources, with more heavy pressure on the shoulder. Hence one can see that, not everyone can make things bigger and more complex, because, like making things simple, making things more complicate calls for real effort and courage, too.

To sum up, whether to make things simple or complex both require real effort and courage. The people who equipped the two qualities mentioned above will be the one who achieve the aim at last.

注意看勾出的每段主题句
这篇文章主要的问题有两点：1.开头和结尾的论点不对应   开头：Simplicity let people feel easy and safe. 没有谈到complex methods的问题
结尾whether to make things simple or complex both require real effort and courage， 首先，这个句子貌似有语病  whether to 改成 making
其次  这里论点多出了一个complex
2. 这篇文章没有思维上的亮点，很难给出高分。
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