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3月5号
, B# W6 P$ @+ Z2 sDo you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most people prefer having other people make decisions for them rather than making decisions by themselves8"
Along with the rapidly economic growth , people 's life dramatically changed by modern science and technology. However, people’s independence is undergoing a decline, especially the means of tackling questions we meet(和上面衔接有问题). According a recent survey, people in growing numbers are beginning to make decisions depend on others. In my opinion, it is important to decide by ourselves when considering experience, convenience, and family
The main reason lies in the fact that [url=]make [/url][*1] decisions by ourselves could enhance our experience,which put us in a favorable position in future questions . For example, we make a decision by ourselves to solve certain [url=]thing [/url][*2] , if it is not a good one , we also can gain much experience ,which we will never be able to get from our textbooks . And when it comes to us again ,we could readily tackle it very well and afflict us greatly. On the contrary , if our choosing is gorgeous ,then think about what would we get? Experience , confidence , victory ---the list goes on . All comes to the point that by ourselves is worthy on both accounts
感觉论证不够充分去支持“experience”
Another factor involves the recognition is that it is convenient to decide by ourselves . Especially when we are alone or in trouble ,it bring us the efficiency. For instance , we encounter a calamity when wandering outside at night , there are few people around. Would you find some people and ask him or her for helping make a decision ? Or will you wait there until anyone appears and decide what should do together ? Of course not, indisputably , we should send victims to hospital or phone without hesitate .
问句使用的好,
To further clarify that ,we could add that it contributes to our family. Actually ,it is very usual for us . Take me for example, i am a boy , if i always need friends to help me make decisions, what would i do in such a situation. I am going after a girl[url=] i love[/url][*3] ,we are shopping and a particular problem comes to us , no friends there , if she helps me solve the problem , then what 's on her mind ? Undoubtedly ,it will be a tragedy ,which has no association with a family .
这个好像和family有用比较勉强,不如说对自己成长或者独立由于,句子很“中式”
Judging what has been discussed above ,we can safely draw the conclusion that make a choosing by ourselves produce an essential impact on our lives in modern society . Anyone who is blind to this point will pay a heavy price we can not afford
总体情况还好,但是句子上面稍欠缺,还有逻辑上面要加强
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