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谢谢outsider 和zhisnoopy的点评啊，我会好好看的
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It's better to watch serious movies to get deeper think or watch movies that amuse or entertain you.

      Along with the rapid development of our society, movies have penetrated every corner of our lives. Naturally, there is discussion over the the movies in recent years, one of questions under debate is movie is more serious or entertaining. As far as i am concerned, the seriousness of movies far outweigh the entertainment.
The main reason lies in the fact that watching movies could give more sights into the culture of the country it belongs to. No one can deny the basic fact that movies are usually attractive and entertaining,but is the only advantage ? Or is the biggest merit? Of course not. Within our dramatically growing country,we have to keep track of the culture of a country, and movies offer us this opportunity--a efficient one. Across the world,only when we have a better understanding of each country can we contribute greatly to individuals or our country,on the other hand,people who watch movies just for fun partially would be considered selfish,they could obtain nothing or the country except entertainment for himself or herself. On both account, we should lay more emphasis on the seriousness of movies than entertainment.
Another equally factor is watching movies could make us keep track of various landscape,whether scenery in the other regions of our country or the imposing ancient architectural complex all over the world ,which could greatly widen our scope of knowledge. From individual aspect, one can enjoy the unique visual enjoyment and unique national identity through appreciating the beautiful scenery in the movies.From the national aspect,however,constant rapid growth assure the later proper circumstance to watch movies, a country carry its influence forward by movies and thus intentionally further its economic development, audience have a deeper thinking based on the output of the movie and thus elevate his\her thinking,experience ,and the scope of knowledge. That is to say, having a deeper thinking is more meaningful than entertainment.
Another factor involved this recognition is that watch movies with a deeper thinking could give us various aspiration. Far example,when students majoring in arts are creating some works and in difficulties, they often can obtain certain aspiration from a variety of movies ,therefore gradually having a rapid progress and making great achievement. Moreover, they could become more confident and acquire more incentive to move forward. However, people who watch movies for fun can really have a good time,but what else they could obtain maybe nothing,furthermore, watching movies for fun would produce imperceptibly harmful influence on them,lavishing time and money on the movies,intellectually detrimental impacts--the list goes on.
Keeping track of cultural relics ,appreciating picturesque scenery and rich historical and cultural heritage,and having access to creative aspiration. All are suited to the present needs and good access to understand the cram of national culture. The icing on the cake is that we watch movies to have a deeper thinking,then all of those would be penerated into our mind gradually and invisibly.which watching movies for fun can not do it.
Judging from what have discussed above,we can safely draw the conclusion that watch movies for is less useful than have a deeper thinking. Anybody who is blind to this point would pay a heavy price.

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4.4Do you agree or disagree that scientists should be responsible for the negative impacts of their discoveries?) Y

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Along with the rapid growth of our world,more and more demands are penestrated into every corner of human ' s life,especially the elite force of the development of society--scientists. While much discussion over the role of scientists exist in daily life, one of the questions under debate is that whether scientists have right to bear the responsibility of opposed influence of their own discoveries. In my opinion, scientists should lay more emphasis on the negative impacts brought about by their discoveries when considering the benign reputation and prolific experience.
   The main reason lies in the fact that no one could resist the temptation of reputation,and no one deny this basic fact. There goes in "scientists lives". Scientists would do vast quantities of researches and test the production comprehensively before carry it into execution. Do you know what such process aims to? Generally,making great contributions to society,fulfilling their dreams and so forth. The icing on the cake is that all of those give rise to their reputation invisibly. Speaking of benign reputation,scientists would impereptibly work on in their fields ,bearing the responsibility and researching in general. Not owning benign reputation give scientists strong incentives and desires to more forward persistently though in difficult times while having owned reputation give more confidence and encourage to have a better grasp of his\her field. In this case, negative effects of their discoveries would be kept in their mind and thus would be faded step by step through incentives,encourage,and confidence obtain from the desire of reputation while positive effects would greatly further the later and useful researches of scientists. In a word, the desire of reputation would efficiently prevent and decrease the incidence of negative impacts of scientists ' discoveries.
    Another equally important aspect is that scientists,having get the habit of high responsibility,would amass much experience in special field and thus have access to success. Suppose that a scientist contrive a high-technology product but the test demonstrate its demerits. Common people maybe bring it into effect without a grumble while certain scientists would analyze its functioning again and make efforts to improve on. Through it is in fact a laborious process, scientists can gain wider experience and solid a firm foundation. Therefore working toward a common goal and years of concentrated efforts would abruptly be converted to admiring accomplishment.
Good reputation and wider experience drive scientists more forward, expand their horizons, and gain more experience. All are visible alternatives for scientists to resolve straits in appropriate ways and form strong sense of responsibility.
All above comes to my point that negative impacts of discoveries should be placed much emphasis by scientists. Anyone who is blind to this point would pay a heavy price.

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It's better to watch serious movies to get deeper think or watch movies that amuse or entertain you.
Along with the rapid development of our society, movies have penetrated every corner of our lives. Naturally, there is a discussion over the(去掉) movies in recent years, one of questions under debate is movie is more serious or entertaining.（would be better serious or entertaining） As far as i am concerned, the seriousness of movies far outweigh the entertainment.

The main reason lies in the fact that watching movies could give more sights into the culture of the country it belongs to. No one can deny the basic fact that movies are usually attractive and entertaining,but is（is it） the only advantage ? Or is(去掉) the biggest merit? Of course not. Within our dramatically growing country,we have to keep track of the culture of a（in our） country, and movies offer us this opportunity--a efficient one. Across the world,only when we have a better understanding of each country can we contribute greatly to individuals or our country,on the other hand,people who watch movies just for fun partially would be considered selfish,they could obtain nothing or the country(they could contribute nothing to both their country and themself) except entertainments for himself or herself(去掉). On both account, we should lay more emphasis on the seriousness of movies than entertainment.

Another equally factor is watching movies could make us keep track（同一个短语最好避免重复） of various landscape,whether（no matter） scenery in the other regions of our country or the imposing ancient architectural complex all over the world ,which could greatly widen our scope of knowledge.（我明白你的意思但是读起来不叫困难） From individual aspect, one can enjoy the unique visual enjoyment and unique national identity through appreciating the beautiful scenery in the movies.(我认为这句应该在第一句 因为你强调的事serious movies 的优点 你的观点就是电影很好 然后在是解释 为什么）From the national aspect,however,constant rapid growth assure the later proper circumstance to watch movies, a country carry its influence forward by movies and thus intentionally further its economic development, audience have a deeper thinking based on the output of the movie and thus elevate his\her thinking,experience ,and the scope of knowledge.（我个人认为这段逻辑很混乱） That is to say, having a deeper thinking is more meaningful than entertainment.(这段的句子都普遍太长 我觉得长短句搭配更好 )

Another factor involved this recognition is that watch movies with a deeper thinking could give us various aspiration. Far example,when students majoring in arts are creating some works and in difficulties, they often can obtain certain aspiration from a variety of （serious 这样更好）movies ,therefore gradually having a rapid progress and making great achievement. Moreover, they could become more confident and acquire more incentive to move forward. However, people who watch movies for fun can really have a good time,but what else they could obtain maybe nothing,furthermore, watching movies for fun would produce imperceptibly harmful influence on them,lavishing time and money on the movies,intellectually detrimental impacts--the list goes on.（和上段问题一样）

Keeping track （第三次出现）of cultural relics ,appreciating picturesque scenery and rich historical and cultural heritage,and having access to creative aspiration. All are suited to the present needs and good access to understand the cram of national culture. The icing on the cake is that we watch movies to have a deeper thinking,then all of those would be penerated into our mind gradually and invisibly.which watching movies for fun can not do it.

Judging from what have discussed above,we can safely draw the conclusion that watch movies for is less useful than have a deeper thinking. Anybody who is blind to this point would pay a heavy price.

我之前看过几个人的作文 我觉得虽然他们的句式没有你复杂词汇也不高级 但是读起来更清晰 所以我建议你可以先不急着用模板 高级词汇 先尝试表达清楚 加油！

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我没有用模板啊，你说的读起来困难的几个短语是惯用的短语，可能比较本土化吧，所以不习惯，那个长的是一个排比，童鞋可以交流下 49# 轴轴

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Most people prefer having other people make decisions for them rather than making decisions by themselves。3 K( i& [9
    Throughout the world, feise competition has penetrated every corner of our lives. Many individuals are faced with such a dilemma, whether they should make a decision by others or by themselves. With every aspect taken into consideration, I strongly agree that people make a determination by themselves is much better when considering the accumulation of experience, the building up of character,and the convenience.
      The main reason lies in the fact that making a choosing depend on oneself could greatly expand one ' s life experience, which puts him or her in a favorable position in future job markets. People,whether youngster in the school or adults in the company, can make a progress through tackling and absorb encountered problems personally. Dealing with those successfully, benign experience would haunt around their minds as well as confidence. Furthermore, Failing to transact gracefully also would present much essential and prudent experience,which would find a deep way into their consciousness. On both accounts, success or fail, all come to my point that making a choosing by ourselves really contributes directly to one ' s experience.
     Anther equally important aspect is that determining personally conductive to the building up of one ' s character. No one can deny the basic fact that people ' s personality could largely be influenced in their lives, especially youngster, who are in formative years. For instance, when children is in difficult times, if teachers or students around induct them to depend on others, maybe it would bring to benefit, but therefore they would get into the habit of depending on others several times later, which greatly prevent their character from building up and places harmful effects on their later lives. On the other hand, if those teachers or students induct them to do be strong and determine by themselves with partial help of seniors, whatever the result is, through such a learning process, they could gain a lot and form a strong sense of endurance imperceptibly.7

In addition to mentioned above, there are many occasions that making decisions personally is really convenient. Suppose that one boy is walking through a city at tranquil and peaceful night and a accidental traffic accident, he freezes and finds nobody there, then what should he do ? Trying to find someone to converse with each other and make a decision? Just think about what would be like if this is the case, patients involved maybe go to die. Is what we want ? Of course not,  Indisputably, he should call 120 without a grumble,which benefits the patients, himself, or even society as a whole.
     In sum, the amassment of experience, the formation of personality, and the expediency. All are suited to the present needs in order to catch up with rapid development of our society. Basis to above easily leads to the point that people should make decisions by themselves.

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4.15  09.12.11北美

Parents do not understand their children so well as parents did 50 years ago. Agree or disagree.-
   With the advent of significant changes in the society, the problem of whether parents' understanding toward their children has declined or not in the past 50 years has been thrown into sharp relief. With every aspect take into consideration. socially, this phenomenon is an normal consequence because of the constantly progressed awareness,economic and expertise--the list goes on.
   The main reason lies in the fact that variant circumstance and situation, personally or generally, breeds different thought in mind, which plays a significant role in determining parents' attitude toward later generation. Before 50years, what people are mindful of might be how to find enough food and live along. To survive, people in growing numbers were becoming selfish since they have no choice, especially in china. Let alone one was concern about others.  Worse yet, this grave situation has reached such proportions that the parents--children relationships was also involved, which is rare for general people to believe. In sharp contrast, through the overall rapid development in the past 50years, most aspects such as awareness, expectation, the way of thinking and living has dramatically changed. Parents dedicate more and more time and money to the physical and mental growth of their children. Trying to equip them with the ability to do things they like or want to, expanding their outlook, fulfilling their potential, thus affording a excellent vehicle for their success.
However, there are also some situations that children are treated by their parents equally throughout the past 50years. Some classical examples of this are minorities or Indian. As chinese people, we all know our country has vast territory and 56 minorities included. Likewise, no one can deny the fact that many minorities in china keep many elements of them intact, the way of thinking and living, awareness and so forth. Certainly, There is no exception for the understanding of parents toward their children. To some degree, they were almost insulated from outside world on a more day-to-day level. In their view of the world, they have found their niche, that is their nation. Taking pleasure in their own customs and tradition.
On balance all the arguments above, although several exceptions exist in this world, it is no exaggeration to say that the understanding of parents toward their children has generally changed during the past 50years.

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作文修改意见改好啦！～

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bwb2014 发表于 2014-12-3 12:59
作文修改意见改好啦！～

你好！你的那句话引起我的思考。记得以前都是agree or disagree 类型的，现在变的这种本质上和那种有什么不同，请问你怎么看？