[phoenix] issue51 by 6号

hhfboyUID: 2749089

TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
思路:
(+)兴趣是最好的老师
(-)如果只以学生兴趣作为依据会带来的问题.1 知识面窄 2 大量的开销给政府带来的经济压力
Conclusion: 鉴于分类教育存在的问题,可以用其他的方法来提高教学质量.

Although students will have great motivation to learn when the education is designed to meet their interest, it is rather unilateral. The speaker so overemphasizes the effects of interest that overlooks other influence what may impact the process of educational amelioration.

Admittedly, interest is the best teacher for learning. If one individual has strong desire to something, he will try his best to accomplish the task. Alan Turing, the father of computer, has keen interest on the scientific research when his three years old. It is even amazing that he attempted to write his first book named <about one kind microscope>.Just for the strong enthusiasm on research, he addicted into exploring the unknown world. His efforts were no in vain because of he provided a formalisation of the concept of the algorithm and computation with the Turing machine which playing a significant role in the creation of modern computer. On the other hand, if one person lose interest in one field, to achieve success in this field seems to be impossible. Nash, a famous NBA player who played soccer when he at high school, now has gained great success in basketball game. If Nash still chooses to be a soccer player rather than a basketball one what he dreams up to be, he probably still a common player. In short, interest can provide us unexhausted power to make all efforts to do achieve success.



However, is it our education designed only considering the student's interest? Unfortunately, it is not the case. The education whose goal is to foster a person with the well-round ability should consider many aspects when want to be ran in a healthy way. If student was educated in diversity ways, they are likely to choose to learn what they interest but refuse to study other important subjects such as mathematics, physics which containing huge knowledge will help their further research and study. Moreover, to survive in competitive society, the students should master some means of subsistence. The practices, for their boring procedure, may be abandoned for students in the "freedom" educational system. It will cause a terrible result that our students lacked the survival ability will hardly earn their bread ,let alone make contribution to our society.
The other deficiency in the "freedom" educational system is that the students are so immature that they can't realize what they really interest in. It is possible that their current personal preference is just in the heat of moment. Unfortunately, our educators mistook this impulse for interest. The consequence is that the students are limited in a certain field in their early age which they are interest in it. However, the constraints are the biggest barrier for these students when they find that they are not fit to this field after growth. Therefore, these students have to face the reality that they hardly change their profession after they find it actually does not favor them. Otherwise, in order to attain the "freedom" educational mechanism, the government should invest much money on it for building infrastructure and training the new teachers what may let them be trap into budget deficit. After all, the resources are limited.

The speaker's proposal to design the education to meet the student's interest is unreasonable and lacks feasibility. Educators, who desire to improve the educational system, should take other effective measures, such as enhancing the ability of teachers and giving some proper guidance, rather than only focus on the students' interest.

zachary19891018UID: 2765757

TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
思路:
(+)兴趣是最好的老师
(-)如果只以学生兴趣作为依据会带来的问题.1 知识面窄 2 大量的开销给政府带来的经济压力
Conclusion: 鉴于分类教育存在的问题,可以用其他的方法来提高教学质量.
Although students will have great motivation to learn when the education is designed to meet their interests, it is rather unilateral. The speaker so overemphasizes the effects of interest that overlooks other influence what(that) may impact(这个词的用法不妥，imapct作为动词时没有影响的意思) the process of educational amelioration.这个词一般用于土地改良 用这里不妥 ，整个这句话的 so that 用法也是错误的。

Admittedly, interest is the best teacher for learning. If one individual has strong desire to（do） something, he will try his best to accomplish the task(这句话感觉有点别扭，一个人如果想要做某事，不是就要尽力完成任务，应该是想要做就努力做). Alan Turing, the father of computer, has keen interest on the scientific research when his(he was) three years old. It is even amazing that he attempted to write his first book named <about one kind microscope>.Just for the strong enthusiasm on research, he addicted into(be addicted to 是沉迷于的意思，addict into
我不知道有没有这样的用法) exploring the unknown world. His efforts were no in vain because of（of 要删掉） he provided a formalisation of the concept of the algorithm and computation with the Turing machine which playing（played语态错误） a significant role in the creation of modern computer. On the other hand, if one person lose（loses） interest in one field, to achieve success in this field seems to be impossible. Nash, a famous NBA player who played soccer when he (was)at high school, now has gained great success in(the) basketball game. If Nash still chooses to be a soccer player rather than a basketball one what he dreams up to be(dream up 用法错误 改为a basketball player that he ever dreamed to be), he probably still (少be动词)a common player. In short, interest can provide us（with） unexhausted power to make all efforts to do achieve success.（这句话结构我不太理解 ）

However, is it our education designed only considering the student's interest? （作者这句话的意思错了吧，你这里的意思是是不是我们的教育只考虑了学生的兴趣？ 正确的意思应该是是不是只考虑学生的新趣就够了，所以这句话的翻译是有问题的）Unfortunately, it is not the case. The education whose goal is to foster a person with the well-round(well-rounded) ability should consider many aspects when want to be ran in a healthy way(education不能want). If studens was(were) educated in diversity（形容词是diverse） ways, they are likely to choose to learn what they interest（are interested in） but refuse to study other important subjects such as mathematics, physics which containing(使用一般现在时contain) huge knowledge（that） will help their further research and study（help them with their further research and study）. Moreover,(in order to) to survive in (the)competitive society, the students should master some means of subsistence. The practices, for their boring procedure, may be abandoned for（by） students in the "freedom"(optional是否更好呢) educational system. It will cause a terrible result that our students lacked（who lack） the survival ability will hardly earn their bread ,let alone make contribution to our society.


The other deficiency(deficiency是不足的意思，不能作为缺点) in the "freedom" educational system is that the students are so immature that they can't realize what they really interest in.（what they are really interested in） It is possible that their current personal preference is just in the heat of moment. Unfortunately, our educators mistook this impulse for interest. The consequence is that the students are limited in a certain field in their early age which they are interest in it(it删去，这句话语法有错误  你的which从句修饰的是early age，应该是修饰certain field). However, the constraints are the biggest barrier for these students when they find that they are not fit to this field after growth. Therefore, these students have to face the reality that they hardly change their profession after they find it actually does not favor them. Otherwise, in order to attain the "freedom" educational mechanism, the government should invest much money on it for building infrastructure and training the new teachers what may let them be trap （trapped）into budget deficit. After all, the resources are limited. (what这个从句的用法是错误的，我觉得可以用个并列句)

The speaker's proposal to design the education to meet the student's interest is unreasonable and lacks feasibility. Educators, who desire to improve the educational system, should take other effective measures, such as enhancing the ability of teachers and giving some proper guidance, rather than only focus on the students' interest.


分析：
1.作者的语法作物比较多，还有一些单词的用法有待商榷

2.主体部分三段分别说了正 反 反 三段，但是个人觉得二三段可以合并缩写，第三段作者就可以提出自己的看法，比如说可以optional courses和required courses结合等等，这就是一个思维散发的过程 ，而不是在最后一段总结的时候才提出自己的想法。

3.不过总体来说全文的逻辑还是很合理的

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