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Although the speaker claim that arts can reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society is true, it cannot conclude all of the fiction and meaning of arts. Arts, in some extent, play a role of pusher and revolutionary of a society. Literature and movie are two of the main forms of arts nowadays.

Turning to the literature, it is not only a carrier of histories but also a guide to tell people where should go. Consider, for example, Victor Hugo's Hotre Dame de Paris described the horrible destinies of citizens suffered from palace governor and Church can be treat as a mirror the society condition in the Middle Age. What's more, the hidden idea of people to be eager to get freedom from the governor was reflected by the master of the fiction who struggle with these two groups. Besides, Dream of the Red Chamber, one of the greatest literature works in Chinese history, also is a convincing evidence. It not only reflected the social structure and situation then, but also is a condensed essence of thousands years of Chinese Feudalism Culture.

Turning to the movie, which have become indispensable since it was invented. Take one of early movie work, Charles Chaplin's Modern Times, as an example, It reflects the hidden pains of worker suffered from capitalists' who enjoy their life in contrast, in the beginning of American industrialization period. Another Schindler's List is great film described the history of Jew butchered by Germanic army in the Second World War. At that time, even American president Bill Clinton seriously called for going to the cinema at one Press conference after his watching of the film. Therefore, to reflect the history as well as rise human's reconsideration, the strength of movie, one of most popular forms of art, was proved naturally.

No matter literature or movie, both of them have some otherwise effective functions including inspiring human beings to rethink and pushing the society approaching. Such as Le Rouge et Le Noir, the first great fiction to criticize the Realism, make people to consider what is real important in one's life. In addition, reconsideration of human will be also rose by Schinder's list after watching it. So it is undeniable that everyone will be inspired a lot by great art works, therefore, our society will be promoted forwards by each individual keeping space of arts.

In sum, art is not just a discovery of otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society, but a mind soup for inspiring human beings. And art also are as crucial as science to illuminate and promote our society forward.

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Although the speaker claims that arts can reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society is true (reasonable), it cannot conclude all of the fiction and meaning of arts(meaning of arts 已经包括fiction了 可以用个like ,such as 来构造句子). Arts, in (to) some extent, play a (significant) role (这样改 可以把role管到两个作用) of (as) pusher (a propellent) and in the revolutionary of a society. Literature and movie are two (of) the main forms of arts (nowadays). (嘿嘿 感觉是北美范文的风格!)

Turning (When it comes) to the literature, it is not only a carrier of histories but also a guide to tell people where should go. Consider(嘿嘿 3号风格吗), for example, Victor Hugo's Hotre Dame de Paris described the horrible destinies of citizens suffered from palace governor and Church can be treated as a mirror the society condition in the Middle Age. What's more, the hidden idea of people to be eager to get freedom from the governor (have strong desire to break the shackle from governors) was reflected by the master of the fiction who struggle with these (指代什么?) two groups. Besides, Dream of the Red Chamber, one of the greatest literature works in Chinese history, also is the convincible evidence. It not only reflected the social structure and situation then, but also is a condensed essence of thousands years of Chinese Feudalism Culture.(加个段落总结句…还有一个是not only …but also 用太多了可以用both 等语言来替换一下)

Turning (When to mention) to the movie, which have become indispensable since it was invented. Take one of early movie work, Charles Chaplin's Modern Times, (as) for (an) example, (it) reflects the hidden pains of workers suffered from capitalists' (exploitation) (who enjoy their life in contrast), in the beginning of American industrialization period(放到前面). Another Schindler's List is great film described the history of Jew butchered by Germanic army in the Second World War. At that time, even American president Bill Clinton seriously called for going to the cinema at one Press conference after his watching of the film. Therefore, to reflect the history as well as rise human's reconsideration (conscientiousness), the strength of movie, one of most popular forms of art, was proved naturally(这里是什么意思?).

No matter literature or movie, both of them have some otherwise (alternative) effective functions including inspiring human beings to rethink (the past) and pushing the society approaching (advancing the social development). Such as Le Rouge et Le Noir, the first great fiction to criticize the Realism, make people to consider (ponder) what is real important in one's life (感觉是废话). In addition, reconsideration of human will be also rose by Schinder's list after watching it. So it is undeniable that everyone will be inspired a lot by great art (artistic) work. Therefore, our society will be promoted (put) forward by each individual keeping space (pace to) of arts.

In sum, art is not just a discovery of otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society, but a mind soup for inspiring human beings. And art also are as crucial (useful) as science to illuminate and promote (put) our society forward.

点评:
1 这篇文章的确有点不好写,像你这样风格的抽象化为具体来论证需要大量例子来支撑的,考场上不好弄.
2 整体还算不错,就是有些语言用得不到位,还发现一个问题你比较喜欢用not only but also一段就出现了2 次….