2.20日 第一次发独立作文 大家帮帮忙！

shake7570UID: 2459145

第一次发独立作文 本人3.13号考，今天刚写了两篇 发上来看看，大家帮忙改改   谢谢！！！！！！！！！！！！！1

     第一篇  政府是不是应该在网络上比公共交通上花更多的钱？

The author gives me an issue that is being discussed by considerable in number of people: the government should put more money on accessing the internet than building the public transportation. As for me, I disagree with the view because author ignores a fact that the effort of internet to the society is not same as that of the public transportation. Therefore, we can’t make a simple decision that which one should be built by more money.
Nowadays, No one can deny that the internet has been changing the way we live. We can chat with out friends online, establish spaces of ourselves, purchase objects that have cheaper price than that of the shopping mall and other people delivery the objects I brought at my door. Moreover, when we really need some specific information, we can google it to get the exact answer very quickly, such as travel information and images of famous places in the foreign region. And the information online is usually the latest, in that to update a website is much more fast and economical than to republish a book. Last but not the least, as the development of the internet, an increasing number of people can work at home in terms of internet connection tools. Therefore, people don’t need to catch the bus in the morning or put up with the traffic jam at rash hour anymore. I need to confirm that the internet brings the efficiency and convenience to our daily life. So in order to increase our networking society, more money be used on the accessing internet is not weird.
However, the internet can’t replace the public transportation in some points, especially the situation that we need take action outside. For instance, although we can search the information that the update images of traveling city online rapidly, networking tool isn’t work after we reach the travel city. We hence should take the local transportation to see the charming sight in the city and feel the atmosphere around the local people. So if the traffic is so terrible that we can’t move in the street, how can we appreciate the traveling place with good mood? Finally, the tourists will be given unfavorable experience about the travel. Meanwhile, in my own city, some people, who work on the industry or public station, have no choose that working at home by internet because they operate the specific technologies at working place, meanwhile, some of them can’t afford the advance car because they incomes are not adequate. Consequence, they still need to catch the public transportation tool at the rush hour. If the traffic is awful or the number of the bus is not substantial, how the work people arrive at there firms within the regular scale in the company? As a result, the productivity of the company and the efficiency of the staff will be dramatic decreased.
That’s why I express that the investment of the public transportation should hold constant sum of money.

From the discussion above, I will draw the conclusion that the money that put on the development of internet and that of the public transportation both should very enough. But the respective efforts of internet and public transportation and work in the different fields,we can’t simply express what sort of apartment need more cash to adorn.

shake7570UID: 2459145

第二个，电话是不是比电视对人有更大影响？
    The author expresses a complex issue that is being discussed by considerable in number of people: The telephone has a greater effect on people's lives than the television do. Depending on diverse personalities, different experiences and emotion concerned, different people hold variety issues in their minds. As for me, I disagree with the author’s view because the respective efforts of telephone and television are works in the different aspects in people’s daily lives, we can’t make the horizontal comparison to decide which effort is bigger.
No one can deny that the telephone is one of the best inventions in the human developing process. We can talk to numerous people without meeting the real person by the telephone line. So when we want to express our affection to our lovers, sending the blessing to our families and ask for help to the professional surgeons, the telephone is the best choice. In terms of the telephone, we can understand other people’s real situation by listening the statement directly, make sure our their feeling by the voice and express our views by ourselves without misunderstanding by other people’s repeat. But we can’t finish these processes by watching television because we can’t communicate with other individuals though the screen. So the effort of telephone is develop the communication between diverse individuals by the voice and talking.
On the other hand, we can’t ignore the television, which is also the one of the contributing invention in the history. There is the truth that should be admitted that the televisions offer us a incredible opportunities to know what happen in the world in terms of news and talking show. With such information, people will have a better understanding of the world they live in. Meanwhile, TV provides lots of interesting programs that many people enjoy after a long day’s hard work. Its visual effort makes people feel more relaxed and less stressed. An uncontroversial view is that television has a great influence on the way people think and talk. Obviously, the telephone can’t have the equal effort as a result of the information that we talk is far less than that of known from the TV programs.
From the discussion above, I will draw the conclusion that we can’t the horizon comparison about the respective efforts of television and telephone on modern people live. Different efforts produce positive influences in different aspects. But the truth is that we can’t leave the telephone and television at present, because they are both indispensable and all have significant results in our daily live.

dairymanUID: 2683905

楼主不按帖子出的题目写作文，我无语

shake7570UID: 2459145

The author states a complex issue that is being discussed by lots of people: People don’t work because they get enough money are rarely happy. Depending on different experiences, diverse personalities and emotional concerned, each individual hold different views in mind. As for me, I agree with the author’s view because I confirm that if the person who gets adequate money is barely pleased, the inventive of working is disappeared and working is no meaning.
    I confirm that people don’t’ work because desire of money has decreased is not weird. No one can deny that one of the contributing factors that people stay in the working place is earning money. If we don’t have enough money, we can’t afford the rent house, buy the charming clothes, purchase the high healthy food and provide the security to our lovers. So that’s why we work hard in the stuff every single day in order to reach our pursuing state and make our desiring dream come true. Meanwhile, every individual’s distinguish goals lead to different plan of life. If the person approach the enough money which he desired, his passion of work will be decreased because there is no extra target is worth to achieve. In this case, he can stop working and withdraw the apartment.
    Meanwhile, during the working process, it is undisputed that people want to stay away from working because they feel the person value can’t be upgraded and emotion is submerged in negative fields. After we graduated from university, we eager to find a good job to achieve our dreaming about life path and to practice our expertise knowledge. So at first, we must spare no effort to accomplish the project that the superior gives, abstract what we have learned from the stuff every day. It is meaningful that we proceed to look for in the mental achievement every step of the way. But when the working surrounding doesn’t give us the incentive of process value, at the same time, modifying plan is also very vague, we should stop working and reconsider the road we choose and revise our next travel. Because working constant is not the way of progress but the repeat of natural movement.
    However, I can’t ignore the situation that some people want to do the matters they really interested in whey they have enough money such as building of charity. During this process, maybe the money was worked on the development of society. Countless number of children achieves the chance to finish the collage education in order to find a favorable job in the future. Considerable in number of build which was destroyed by natural disasters is rebuilt again by fund. So maybe the people who donate the money will feel enjoyable, but what he operates is not sorts of jobs, just a kind of satisfy.
    Above the discussion above, I will draw the conclusion that people don’t work they get enough money are rarely happy because there is no achievement we can obtain in our mental.

love_angellUID: 2754679

sorry~~昨天一直等，都没看到你交作业，找了很多遍，然后看我的作文也没被改就以为你没交...
今天往前翻了挺多的才看到~不好意思啊~~批改迟了~
下午有事~晚上回来给你改好么？
是不是也没找到我的呀，我的在
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1063004-1-1.html
也在地板层
有空帮我改吧^_^

love_angellUID: 2754679

不好意思
终于改完了~呼呼
复制有乱码，直接附件了呵呵