[phoenix] issue56 第8次作业 by 3号 球拍

ningbo1990UID: 2641538

Issue56
"Governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today rather than trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future."

提纲：1.诚然短期问题的解决很重要。
2.但是过度重视短期问题解决会忽略长期问题，短期问题就像急性病，而长期问题就像慢性病，急性病来的快去的快，慢性病等发现的时候就来不及了。
3.政治选举制度的弊端造成了习惯解决短期问题而不是长期问题。

Time: 47:32.90
Words: 561 (496 before revising)

Every truth can be checked by history. One of history truths is that potential anticipated problems always be the reason causes a nation or a dynasty died. So the ideas of the issue seems ridiculous, to solve the anticipated problems of future has equal importance of solving immediate problems.

Admittedly, the importance of solving immediate problems cannot be ignored. Paragons, such as when earthquake happened, the government must take measures and helps as immediately as it can. If the government takes it slowly, thousands of people who under attack of this disaster will be died, furthermore, the government will be condemn by other countries and even lose partners.

Over taking importance to solving immediate problems and neglecting anticipated problems, however, may cause problems. Just metaphor the immediate problems as acute disease and the anticipated ones are chronic disease. It is well know that acute diseases as influenza are likely be found immediately and also solved quickly; while the chronic disease are not obvious at first but later they will cause deadly problems. Lung cancer, for example, one of the chronic diseases, when suffered it at first, they sufferer could not realized, while at the time he realized it, he almost went the edge of his life. Only when he found it at early time, he could escape death. So, the anticipated problems as like the chronic diseases cannot be neglected and must prevent early. For instance, the Louis 16th, the last king of France, was levying heavy tax on French people to solve his immediate finance shortage. At first, it seems effective, but after a long time of extorting people, all people cannot bear with it, people got together to storm the Bastille and finally killed the king. So, enlighten the long-term problems will end governments themselves.

Both the immediate problems and anticipated problems must be equal treated. To incline each side, government would be trouble by the other. But it seems in today`s society, more immediate problems are taking more importance to anticipated problems. The feudal institute of electing is the main cause. The electing system limited every government officers` serving time. It is said if they want to re-elect in next term, they must perform much well in this term. So, in order to get re-elect, they turned to solve these immediate problems since they can be easily found and solved, while the long-term problems will be put aside even if the government officers found them since these problems hardly to impact their election. For example, in this economic crisis, many countries, such as America, solve it by releasing dollars. At the first glance the measure is success because it turns over the economic and the unemployment rate begin to decrease, but they do not care about the inflation, it will be higher in the future and high rate inflation may cause big problem. Because inflation will happen in the future, it has nothing about nowadays` governments, they put aside the anticipated problems.

After analysis this issue, it is obviously that neglecting anticipated problems of the future is dangerous. The immediate problems and long-term problems must be treated equally. And the reason why nowadays governments attend to focus on solving the short-term problems is the shortage of electing institute, I suppose a new system should be built to require officers to prevent and taking importance of long term problems.

86145787UID: 2672301

Issue56
"Governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today rather than trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future." 短>长
提纲：
1.
诚然短期问题的解决很重要。（短+）
2.但是过度重视短期问题解决会忽略长期问题，短期问题就像急性病，而长期问题就像慢性病，急性病来的快去的快，慢性病等发现的时候就来不及了。这个比方超级赞！（短—，长+）
3.政治选举制度的弊端造成了习惯解决短期问题而不是长期问题。（现状）

Time: 47:32.90
Words: 561 (496 before revising)

Every truth can be checked by history. One of history truths is that potential anticipated problems always be the reason causes a nation or a dynasty died. So the ideas of the issue seems ridiculous, to solve the anticipated problems of future has equal importance of solving immediate problems.

Admittedly, the importance of solving immediate problems cannot be ignored. Paragons, such as when earthquake happened, the government must take measures and helps as immediately as it can. If the government takes it slowly, thousands of people who under attack of this disaster will would
虚拟语气 be died, furthermore, the government will be condemn by other countries and even lose their 加一个代词指代才明确 partners.

Over taking importance to solving immediate problems and neglecting anticipated problems, however, may cause problems. Just metaphor the immediate problems as acute disease and the anticipated ones are chronic disease.这句话得重写

It is well know that acute diseases as influenza are likely be found immediately and also solved quickly; while the chronic disease are not obvious at first but later they will cause deadly problems. Lung cancer, for example, one of the chronic diseases, when suffered it at first, they sufferer could not realized, while at the time he有性别歧视。。 realized it, he almost went the edge of his life没有这种说法，你可以去google上搜搜看，很chinglish.. Only when he found it at early time, he could escape death主句的要倒装. So, the anticipated problems as like the chronic diseases cannot be neglected and must prevent early. For instance, the Louis 16th, the last king of France, was levying用一般过去式比较好，表示过去发生的事 heavy tax on French people to solve his immediate finance shortage. At first, it seems effective, but after a long time of extorting people, all people cannot bear with it, 这里缺少一个连词，加一个and要好些people got together to storm the Bastille and finally killed the king. So, enlighten the long-term problems will end governments themselves这句有两个动词而且没有主语，.

Both the immediate problems and anticipated problems must be equal treated. To incline each side, government would be troubled by the other. But it seems in today`s society, more immediate problems are taking more importance to anticipated problems这句话还有问题. The feudal institute of electing“选举封建研究所?”is the main cause. The electing system limited every government officers' serving time. It is said if they want to re-elect in next term, they must perform much well in this term. So, in order to get re-elect, they turned to solve these immediate problems since they can be easily found and solved, while the long-term problems will be put aside even if the government officers found them since these problems hardly to impact their election. For example, in this economic crisis, many countries, such as America, solve it by releasing dollars. At the first glance the measure is successful because it turns over the economic and the unemployment rate begin to decrease这句话有两个动词而且逻辑有问题, but they do not care about the inflation, although it will be higher in the future and high rate inflation may cause big problem. Because inflation will happen in the future, it has nothing about nowadays` governments, they put aside the anticipated problems.这三个句子逻辑混乱，而且没有连词（或许问题的症结不在于选举制，而在于政策的连贯性）

After analysis this issue, it is obviously that neglecting anticipated problems of the future is dangerous. The immediate problems and long-term problems must be treated equally. And the reason why nowadays governments attend to focus on solving the short-term problems is the shortage of electing institute选举制应该是electing system, I suppose a new system should be built to require officers to prevent and taking importance of long term problems.


感觉三号的论述手段相当好。先顺承ISSUE的论点，说出当前问题的重要性不能忽视；然后论述忽视长远问题的弊端；第三部分提出并论述自己的观点，举的例子很好，但分析的结果有问题。然而在最后一段本应该重申或者升华自己的论点的，可是三号却在最后一句呼吁体制改革。。。有点雷。。。而且有点偏离论述重心


以上是我的愚见，还请指正。

ningbo1990UID: 2641538

自己修改下：
Every truth can be checked by history. One of history truths is that anticipated problems always serve as the reasons which bring a nation or a dynasty to the end. So the ideas of the issue seem ridiculous, in my opinion, to solve the anticipated problems of future has equal importance of solving immediate problems.

Admittedly, the importance of solving immediate problems cannot be ignored. Paragons, such as when earthquake happens, the government must take measures to help the injured people immediately. If the government takes action slowly, thousands of people who under attack of this disaster maylose their lives; more worse, the government will be condemned by other countries and even lose itspartners.

However, placing undue emphasis to solve immediate problems and neglect anticipated problems may cause problems. Here, I choose acute disease and chronic disease as metaphor to explain the immediate the anticipated problems. It is well know that acute diseases such as influenza are likely be avoided immediately and solved quickly while things are not the same for chronic diseases. People may not place enough attention on those diseases, which seemingly are not obvious at earlier time but likely to contribute to bad results later if leaving them alone.

Lung cancer, for example, one of the chronic diseases, when suffered it at first, the sufferer may not realize, while at the time it appeared obviously, he or she almost suffer death. The only way to escape death isto find it at an early time. In contrast, the anticipated problems have the same characteristic as the chronic diseases. It should be also found in early time, if not, death will come. For instance, Louis 16th, the last king of France, he levied heavy tax on French people in order to solve immediate finance shortage. At first, it seems effective, but after a long time of extorting people, all people cannot bear with it, and then got together to storm the Bastille and finally killed the king.

Both the immediate problems and anticipated problems must be equally treated. As I have discussed above, government would be troubled if inappropriate emphasis on either one of them. But why it seems in today`s society, solving immediate problems are taking more importance to anticipated problems? From my point view, the electing institution is the main cause. The electing system limits every governmental officers' serving time. It is said if they want to re-elect in next term, they must perform well in this term. So, in order to get re-elect, officers are more inclined to solve these immediate problems since they can be easily found and solved, while the long-term problems will be put aside even if the government officers find them since these problems can hardly contribute to their election. For example, when faced with the economic crisis in 2009, many countries manage to address the tough problem through releasing dollars. At the first glance， economic turns over and unemployment rate decreases, it seems the measure achieve success while these countries put aside future inflation. As economists said, the more money released, the higher inflation will emerge in the future, and it will cause problems. But future conditions do not impact nowadays` governmental officers, they trend to go through the immediate economic crisis, and get voted from civil. Inflation, the long term problem, is neglected by officers.

After analysis above, it is obviously that neglecting both immediate problems and anticipated problems of the future are dangerous. Both of them should be treated equally.