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130 ---How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society
提纲：
1.作为社会的未来，孩子如何能很好的融入社会，如何更好发挥自己的才能，最终为社会的进步贡献力量。一直是社会的热点。不可否认，社会化的过程，一方面可以提高孩子认知社会的能力，可以告诉他们社会需要什么样的人才，进入社会时他们至少具备哪些技能或只是，另一方面，通过与他人的接触从而提高他们的交流能力和合作意识。从这个角度来看，孩子的社会化程度对这一过程有一定的影响。
2.但是，要使社会更加和谐，美好，只注重孩子的社会化问题是远远不够的，许多其他因素并不比社会化次要，比如个人的品格，技能知识，还有高尚的道德。历史上，许多伟人都证明了这点，比如，爱因斯坦，虽然从小被嘲笑，而且不善言语，但是他对知识无止尽的追求，造就了他的一生，为社会做出了巨大的贡献。另一个具有代表意义的例子就是甘地，他为社会做出的巨大贡献大多数应该归功于他内心的宗教信仰和高尚的道德。
3.谈到如何培养那些能更好建设社会的下一代的问题，现状没有论题说的那么严重。随着全球化的加剧以及通信设条件的极大提高，了解社会的途径更加便捷和多样化，对于孩子也是一样的，孩子不仅可以在学校通过与同伴的交往，培养合作能力和表达自我的能力，也可以通过互联网了解社会。而纵观这30年的社会的变化，各个地域之间，各个国家之间的合作日益加深，而这些都是一代一代孩子长大后的贡献，所以没有理由怀疑我们培养孩子的方式。

When it comes to the issue of relationship bewteen educating children and the future of society. The speaker claims that the destiny of society actually depends on how children are socialized，and that we have not been qualified for this job.the statement,while having merits in several aspects,in fact have overstated the severity of the status quo in educating next generation.
As the master of society's future,the issue is becoming vogue ,which is in which way to cultivate children's ability to adopt themselves to socity ,hence to better exert their potential talents and finally to contribute a lot to society as a whole. Undeniably,the process of socialization not only inhance their recognition to siciety and tell what ability should be acquied before going into society,but also supply sufficent opportunities for them to communicate with socialized people ,hence improve their conciousness of cooperating and communicating.To this extent,I fundermentally agree that socialization is a important factor infuencing the extent to which an individual will ultimately contribute to society.
Notwithstanding,the speaker fails to take into account some other crucial factors, such as honesty,persistence,probity and so forth ,which are inculcated by parents and no less important than socialization. History is fraughted with  example in point.one is the famous scientist--Albert Einstein,who was often derided and tanciturn during his childhood,made a ineffaceable contribution to modern physician owed to his unsatiable appetite for knowledge which stemed from his inner faith rather than socialization.An even more remarkable modern example was mahatma ganhdi's profound contribution sprang primarily from his persistent conviction rooted deeply in his heart.
Regarding the theme that how to cultivate next generation for the future development of society,empirical evidences convince us that the way we raise children is in general proper and effective,though flaws in some small aspects.With the increasing globlization and the significant improvment in telecommunication,children have more universal access to society.Not only can they learn to negotiate and cooperate by communicate with their peers in the school ,but also come to know things happening in the remote corners all over the world through Internet.Further more,the last 30 years wittnessed a better and more harmonious society which are more sensitive to ,and respectful of ,the rights of women, of homosexuel,different culture as well as human rights.Further more,the healthy trend of society is the outcome of devotion of several generations who were thought incompetent for the responsibility of sustaining development of society when they were child.In short ,the speaker's claim that we have not yet learned how to raise children to bring about a better society flies in face of the empirical evidence discussed above.
To conclusion, on the one hand,the speaker ignores other factors,such as honesty,persistence,probity and so forth,which are no less important than socialization in influencing the destiny of society.On the other hand,no extant evidence forces us to lose confidenc to our education,since the whole society is progressing healthily to more tolerant,respectful and civilized one.

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130 ---How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society
提纲：
1.作为社会的未来，孩子如何能很好的融入社会，如何更好发挥自己的才能，最终为社会的进步贡献力量。一直是社会的热点。不可否认，社会化的过程，一方面可以提高孩子认知社会的能力，可以告诉他们社会需要什么样的人才，进入社会时他们至少具备哪些技能或只是/知识，另一方面，通过与他人的接触从而提高他们的交流能力和合作意识。从这个角度来看，孩子的社会化程度对这一过程有一定的影响。
2.但是，要使社会更加和谐，美好，只注重孩子的社会化问题是远远不够的，许多其他因素并不比社会化次要，比如个人的品格，技能知识，还有高尚的道德。历史上，许多伟人都证明了这点，比如，爱因斯坦，虽然从小被嘲笑，而且不善言语，但是他对知识无止尽的追求，造就了他的一生，为社会做出了巨大的贡献。另一个具有代表意义的例子就是甘地，他为社会做出的巨大贡献大多数应该归功于他内心的宗教信仰和高尚的道德。
3.谈到如何培养那些能更好建设社会的下一代的问题，现状没有论题说的那么严重。随着全球化的加剧以及通信设条件的极大提高，了解社会的途径更加便捷和多样化，对于孩子也是一样的，孩子不仅可以在学校通过与同伴的交往，培养合作能力和表达自我的能力，也可以通过互联网了解社会。而纵观这30年的社会的变化，各个地域之间，各个国家之间的合作日益加深，而这些都是一代一代孩子长大后的贡献，所以没有理由怀疑我们培养孩子的方式。

When it comes to the issue of relationship bewteen/between educating children and the future of society. The speaker claims that the destiny of society actually depends on how children are socialized，and that we have not been qualified for this job.The statement,while having merits in several aspects,in fact have overstated the severity of the status quo in educating next generation.
As the master of society's future,the issue is becoming vogue ,which is in which way to cultivate children's ability to adopt themselves to socity(这句话读起来有点乱) ,hence to better exert their potential talents and finally to/删 contribute a lot to society as a whole. Undeniably,the process of socialization not only inhance/enhance their recognition to siciety and tell what ability should be acquied before going/steping会不会合适些 into society,but also supply sufficent/suffcient
opportunities for them to communicate with socialized people ,hence improve their conciousness of cooperating and communicating(我的意见是这句到这里可以适当断句，不然整个句子结构有点冗长).To this extent,I fundermentally agree that socialization is a/an important factor infuencing the extent to which an individual will ultimately contribute to society.
Notwithstanding,the speaker fails to take into account some other crucial factors, such as honesty,persistence,probity and so forth ,which are inculcated by parents and no less important than socialization. History is fraughted with  examples in point.one is/for example, the famous scientist--Albert Einstein,who was often derided and tanciturn? during his childhood,made a ineffaceable contribution to modern physician owed to his unsatiable appetite for knowledge which stemed from his inner faith rather than socialization.An even more remarkable modern example was mahatma ganhdi's profound contribution sprang primarily from his persistent conviction rooted deeply in his heart.赞
Regarding the theme that how to cultivate next generation for the future development of society,empirical evidences convince us that the way we raise children is in generally proper and effective,though flaws in some small aspects.With the increasing globlization/globalization and the significant improvment in telecommunication,children have more universal access to society.Not only can they learn to negotiate and cooperate by communicate/communicating with their peers in the school ,but also come to know things happening in the remote corners all over the world through Internet.Further more,the last 30 years wittnessed/witnessed a better and more harmonious society which are more sensitive to ,and respectful of ,the rights of women, of homosexuel,different culture as well as human rights.Further more,the healthy trend of society is the outcome of devotion of several generations who were thought incompetent for the responsibility of sustaining development of society when they were children.In short ,the speaker's claim that we have not yet learned how to raise children to bring about a better society flies in face of the empirical evidence discussed above.
To conclusion, on the one hand,the speaker ignores other factors,such as honesty,persistence,probity and so forth,which are no less important than socialization in influencing the destiny of society.On the other hand,no extant evidence forces us to lose confidence
to our education,since the whole society is progressing healthily to more tolerant,respectful and civilized one.


1.单词拼写错误还是有一些的，要注意啊
2.一些句子加了从句长起来以后结构就有点乱了，不是很容易看清楚
3.思路上大家大体都是这个思路。套用3.12大连的评价，个别地方句子的逻辑不是很清晰，所以看起来不会那么流畅，我也和你一样的毛病。。。

个人意见，如有想法，一起讨论

LaoZZZZZUID: 2747300

130 ---How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society
提纲：
1.作为社会的未来，孩子如何能很好的融入社会，如何更好发挥自己的才能，最终为社会的进步贡献力量。一直是社会的热点。不可否认，社会化的过程，一方面可以提高孩子认知社会的能力，可以告诉他们社会需要什么样的人才，进入社会时他们至少具备哪些技能或只是，另一方面，通过与他人的接触从而提高他们的交流能力和合作意识。从这个角度来看，孩子的社会化程度对这一过程有一定的影响。
2.但是，要使社会更加和谐，美好，只注重孩子的社会化问题是远远不够的，许多其他因素并不比社会化次要，比如个人的品格，技能知识，还有高尚的道德。历史上，许多伟人都证明了这点，比如，爱因斯坦，虽然从小被嘲笑，而且不善言语，但是他对知识无止尽的追求，造就了他的一生，为社会做出了巨大的贡献。另一个具有代表意义的例子就是甘地，他为社会做出的巨大贡献大多数应该归功于他内心的宗教信仰和高尚的道德。
3.谈到如何培养那些能更好建设社会的下一代的问题，现状没有论题说的那么严重。随着全球化的加剧以及通信设条件的极大提高，了解社会的途径更加便捷和多样化，对于孩子也是一样的，孩子不仅可以在学校通过与同伴的交往，培养合作能力和表达自我的能力，也可以通过互联网了解社会。而纵观这30年的社会的变化，各个地域之间，各个国家之间的合作日益加深，而这些都是一代一代孩子长大后的贡献，所以没有理由怀疑我们培养孩子的方式。

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When it comes to the issue of relationship between educating children and the future of society. The speaker claims that the destiny of society actually depends on how children are socialized，and that we have not been qualified for this job. The statement ,while having merits in several aspects ,in fact have overstated the severity of the status quo in educating next generation.
As the master of society's future, the issue is becoming vogue ,which concerns the way to enable children to adopt themselves to society ,hence to better exert their potential talents and finally ultimately to contribute society as a whole. Undeniably, the process of socialization not only enhance their recognition to society and tell what ability should be acquired before stepping into society, but also improve their conciousness of cooperating and communicating by supplying sufficient opportunities for them to interact with socialized people. To this extent, I fundamentally agree that socialization is an important factor influencing the extent to which an individual will ultimately contribute to society.

Notwithstanding, the speaker fails to take into account some other crucial factors, such as honesty, persistence, probity and so forth ,which are inculcated by parents and no less important than socialization. History is fraught with  examples in point. for example, the famous scientist--Albert Einstein, who was often derided and taciturn during his childhood, made a ineffaceable contribution to modern physician owed to his unsatiable appetite for knowledge which stemed from his inner faith rather than socialization. An even more remarkable modern example was mahatma ganhdi's profound contribution sprang primarily from his persistent conviction rooted deeply in his heart.赞

Regarding the theme that how to cultivate next generation for the future development of society, empirical evidences convince us that the way we raise children is in generally proper and effective,though flaws in some small aspects.With the increasing globalization and the significant improvement  in telecommunication, children have more universal access to society.Not only can they learn to negotiate and cooperate by communicating with their peers in the school ,but also come to know things happening in the remote corners all over the world through Internet. Further more, the last 30 years witnessed a better and more harmonious society which are more sensitive to ,and respectful of ,the rights of women, of homosexuel, different culture as well as human rights. Further more ,the healthy trend of society is the outcome of devotion of several generations who were thought incompetent for the responsibility of sustaining development of society when they were children. In short ,the speaker's claim that we have not yet learned how to raise children to bring about a better society flies in face of the empirical evidence discussed above.
To conclusion, on the one hand, the speaker ignores other factors, such as honesty, persistence, probity and so forth, which are no less important than socialization in influencing the destiny of society.On the other hand,no extant evidence forces us to lose confidence to our education,since the whole society is progressing healthily to more tolerant, respectful and civilized one.