ISSUE212 - "If a goal is worthy 有拍必回

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ISSUE212 - "If a goal is worthy, then any means taken to attain it is justifiable."
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提纲：it is hard to define the concept of "worthy", which is crucial throughout the issue.
1.          1.  goals which make all the humans convenient and better off can be cited as "worthy".
2.           2.cases not only diminish the profit of the majority but also transcend the range of ethics. That is merely so-called "worthy for individuals".
3.          3.although some goals seem worthy indeed, what we should keep in mind is that we could only take wise measures after thorough consideration of all the involved factors


A goal is usually what people trying to attain even across their lifetime. Is it reasonable to take any means aiming at achieving a worthwhile goal, as the speaker contends? Common sense tells us that if a goal is worthy, we should spare no efforts to fulfill that. However, after close scrutiny of the statement, in my opinion, it is hard to define the concept of "worthy", which is crucial throughout the issue.


Dating back to the brilliant history of human civilization, acknowledged worthy goal is the one which has a positive influence on the whole society and benefits the people in majority. To fulfill our goal of creating a better life, mechanization, automatization and intellectualization have greatly vitalized our civilization. As for agriculture, mechanization, the use of tractors for instance, has made it a relatively easy work, and release the workforce to more needed places. Also in the realm of manufacturing, automatization has economized the limited material and workers therefore diminished the disbursement enormously; intellectualization, which is the vista of the future, makes the manufacturing actually a production of the robots or computers. No one could tell what would be bound to take place in the future. With the deciphering of DNA chromosome and the development of biochemistry, intelligent machines are no pure fictions. Actually, having realized goals to make innumerable technology innovations, people are freed from burdensome work and promote productivity greatly. As what have shown above, goals which make all the humans convenient and better off can be cited as "worthy".


Admittedly, plenty of goals are worth taking whatever means to attain, but surely not all the goals are that worthy. Certain goals, which merely benefit the minorities or even go against ethics, cannot properly be defined as "worthy", therefore we should not take inappropriate means achieving the goals. To make it short, facing a crucial examination, which determines your graduation, your promotion or even your whole life, we cannot justify the means of fabrication or cheating to fulfill the goal saying that it is worthy for yourself. What's more, human cloning, which is not a problem in science but a matter of ethics, has caused crucial problems involving the confusion of identification for example. Can you imagine a "person" looks exactly the same of yourself? All these cases not only diminish the profit of the majority but also transcend the range of ethics. That is merely so-called "worthy for individuals".


Furthermore, although some goals seem worthy indeed, what we should keep in mind is that we could only take wise measures after thorough consideration of all the involved factors. Briefly speaking, it doesn't mean that whatever means are appropriate. In the realm of business, stricken by the economic recession, all the countries all trying their best to revitalize the economy of their own, but principles should not be made by leaders to reject commodities from abroad in order to protect inner trade. Also we cannot close all the factories which have polluted the environment. If so, that will be a disaster for the development. Another apt illustration involves the realm of politics. Is it proper for certain candidate to make commitment to all the voters’ need to win the election? Absolutely not, to commit the goal which you are capable of attaining, then it is truly worthy for the people in majorities.


In conclusion, goals which are profitable to the majorities or even the whole world can be precisely defined as "worthy". Only under careful analysis of its worthiness and costs in fulfilling the goal, can we ultimately cite it as justifiable and take efforts to accomplish it.

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ISSUE212 - "If a goal is worthy, then any means taken to attain it is justifiable."

提纲：It is hard to define the concept of "worthy", which is crucial throughout the issue. (我个人认为这道题目重点是后面那一句，也就是讨论justifiable，这个worthy的定义问题作为一个分论点是可以的，但是作为一个主旨，恐怕不妥。)
1.  Goals which make all the humans convenient and better off can be cited as "worthy".
2. Cases not only diminish the profit of the majority but also transcend the range of ethics. That is
merely so-called "worthy for individuals".
3. Although some goals seem worthy indeed, what we should keep in mind is that we could only take wise measures after thorough consideration of all the involved factors（3个提纲里我没有看到任何justifiable的影子。）

A goal is usually what people trying to attain even across their lifetime/ across their lifetime. Is it reasonable to take any means aiming at achieving a worthwhile goal, as the speaker contends? Common sense tells us that if a goal is worthy, we should spare no efforts to fulfill that. However, (你这里转折貌似有点问题，前面说每个人都应该追求自己的目标，后面怎么变成了目标定义的不正确了？)after close scrutiny of the statement, in my opinion, it is hard to define the concept of "worthy", which is crucial throughout the issue.

Dating back to the brilliant history of human civilization, acknowledged worthy goal is the one which has a positive influence on the whole society and benefits the people in majority. To fulfill our goal of creating a better life, mechanization, automatization and intellectualization have greatly vitalized our civilization. As for agriculture, mechanization, the use of tractors for instance, has made it a relatively easy work, and release the workforce to more needed places. Also in the realm of manufacturing, automatization has economized the limited material and workers therefore diminished the disbursement enormously; intellectualization, which is the vista of the future, makes the manufacturing actually a production of the robots or computers. No one could tell what would be bound to take place in the future. With the deciphering of DNA chromosome and the development of biochemistry, intelligent machines are no pure fictions. Actually, having realized goals to make innumerable technology innovations, people are freed from burdensome work and promote productivity greatly. As what have shown above, goals which make all(第一句说是majority这里变成all了，这个可以argu你啊，) the humans convenient and better off can be cited as "worthy".（这里例子如何benefit人应该说清楚，你每个例子最后都应该说如何如何benefit人然后如何如何变的worthy了，否则例子很空洞。）

Admittedly, plenty of goals are worth taking whatever means to attain, but surely not all the goals are that worthy. Certain goals, which merely benefit the minorities or even go against ethics（违反ethics和造福minorities有递进关系吗？）, cannot properly be defined as "worthy", therefore we should not take inappropriate means achieving the goals. To make it short, facing a crucial examination, which determines your graduation, your promotion or even your whole life, we cannot justify（看到这个单词真不容易，） the means of fabrication or cheating to fulfill the goal saying that it is worthy for yourself. What's more, human cloning, which is not a problem in science but a matter of ethics, has caused crucial problems involving the confusion of identification for example. Can you imagine a "person" looks exactly the same of yourself?（因为不能忍和你长的一样的人，就违反了道德？这没有道理把，这个例子我也不知道怎么说清楚克隆和道德之间的关系，正在思考中。。。） All these cases not only diminish the profit of the majority but also transcend the range of ethics. That is merely so-called "worthy for individuals".

Furthermore, although some goals seem worthy indeed, what we should keep in mind is that we could only take wise measures（wise貌似也是抽象的词，你貌似也可以论证下wise，用wise解释worthy貌似把自己绕进去把，要不你就把wise定义下，） after thorough consideration of all the involved factors. Briefly speaking, it doesn't mean that whatever means are appropriate. In the realm of business, stricken by the economic recession, all the countries all trying their best to revitalize the economy of their own, but principles should not be made by leaders to reject commodities from abroad in order to protect inner trade. Also we cannot close all the factories which have polluted the environment. If so, that will be a disaster for the development. Another apt illustration involves the realm of politics. Is it proper for certain candidate to make commitment to all the voters’ need to win the election? Absolutely not, to commit the goal which you are capable of attaining, then it is truly worthy for the people in majorities.（这段后面2个例子可以引到justify层面上，就切题了。至少是这两个例子切题了）

In conclusion, goals which are profitable to the majorities or even the whole world can be precisely defined as "worthy". Only under careful analysis of its worthiness and costs in fulfilling the goal, can we ultimately cite it as justifiable（最后拉回来了，但是文章根本没有说这一点。）and take efforts to accomplish it.

我觉得还是有点跑题，句子很好了，建议把重新思考下提纲。思想错了，什么都没有了。
如果有不对的地方，希望给出批评。


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习作在最后一楼，我修改的那个。辛苦啦！！谢谢！！

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我觉得主题有两方面worthy 和any，除了版主的提纲外我还想补充点：There is no saying a goal worthy to all the people and all the aspects, when we make every efforts to struggle for an aim, which is crucial to part of society, absolutely at the same time impaire the benefit of others. Achieving our goals while not harming other people or aspects of society requires certain limitation on our efforts and means toward the goal.

A goal is usually what people trying to attain even across their lifetime. Is it reasonable to take any means aiming at achieving a worthwhile goal, as the speaker contends? Common sense tells us that if a goal is worthy, we should spare no efforts to fulfill that. However, after close scrutiny of the statement, in my opinion, it is hard to define the concept of "worthy", which is crucial throughout the issue.


Dating back to the brilliant history of human civilization, acknowledged worthy goal is the one which has a positive influence on the whole society and benefits the people in majority. To fulfill our goal of creating a better life, mechanization, automatization and intellectualization have greatly vitalized our civilization. As for agriculture, mechanization, the use of tractors for instance, has made it a relatively easy work, and release the workforce to more needed places. Also in the realm of manufacturing, automatization has economized the limited material and workers therefore diminished the disbursement enormously; intellectualization, which is the vista of the future, makes the manufacturing actually a production of the robots or computers. No one could tell what would be bound to take place in the future. With the deciphering of DNA chromosome and the development of biochemistry, intelligent machines are no pure fictions. Actually, having realized goals to make innumerable technology innovations, people are freed from burdensome work and promote productivity greatly. As what have shown above, goals which make all the humans convenient and better off can be cited as "worthy".(版主的语言没的说，列举例子时能不能用大排比呢，我想应在例子后把 worthy goals再具体描述一下the so-called “worthy” goal is the one could emacipate us from tedious work, exempt us from dangerous oppcupations, survive us in tremendous disarters and spark us to achieve the ultimate goal of enjoying our lives.不知可不可以)


Admittedly, plenty of goals are worth taking whatever means to attain, but surely not all the goals are that worthy. Certain goals, which merely benefit the minorities or even go against ethics, cannot properly be defined as "worthy", therefore we should not take inappropriate means achieving the goals. To make it short, facing a crucial examination, which determines your graduation, your promotion or even your whole life, we cannot justify the means of fabrication or cheating to fulfill the goal saying that it is worthy for yourself. What's more, human cloning, which is not a problem in science but a matter of ethics, has caused crucial problems involving the confusion of identification for example. Can you imagine a "person" looks exactly the same of yourself? All these cases not only diminish the profit of the majority but also transcend the range of ethics. That is merely so-called "worthy for individuals".(这段没什么问题 不知是不是论证上篇幅还不够吧,我想可以再把那些例子抽象一下总结一番)


Furthermore, although some goals seem worthy indeed, what we should keep in mind is that we could only take wise measures after thorough consideration of all the involved factors. Briefly speaking, it doesn't mean that whatever means are appropriate. （这句话没看懂是：并不意味着任何方法都是合适的？应该是：并没有总是合适的方法）In the realm of business, stricken by the economic recession, all the countries all trying their best to revitalize the economy of their own, but principles should not be made by leaders to reject commodities from abroad in order to protect inner trade. Also we cannot close all the factories which have polluted the environment. If so, that will be a disaster for the development. Another apt illustration involves the realm of politics. Is it proper for certain candidate to make commitment to all the voters’ need to win the election? Absolutely not, to commit the goal which you are capable of attaining, then it is truly worthy for the people in majorities.（应该在例子后稍加评论吧）


In conclusion, goals which are profitable to the majorities or even the whole world can be precisely defined as "worthy". Only under careful analysis of its worthiness and costs in fulfilling the goal, can we ultimately cite it as justifiable and take efforts to accomplish it.
还是赞版主的语言，提纲的问题上一个同学也说到了。Justifiable的问题确实还可以发挥，比如什么功过是非要等后人评判之类的之类的，再把老毛或者Hitler的例子一举 当时人们认为justifiable 后来就变了， 性价比应该也挺高。
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