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Issue43 to be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards

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To be an effective leader, must a public leader maintain the highest ethical and moral standards, as the speaker asserts? In a sense, I tend to concur with this statement. Although the speaker begs questions by overlooking the definition of the highest ethical and moral standards and unfairly gives them a second priority, a public leader with the highest ethical and moral standard makes a contribution to the stability and development of society.

When we turn to a public official, we find that the public leader with the highest ethical and moral standards influences a social development by insisting on and publicizing the highest ethical and moral standards. Consider certain prominent and effective leader who have contribute profoundly to a better society, Mahatma Gandhi, who lived ascetic and desired peace employed non-cooperation, non-violence and peaceful resistance as his weapon’s in the strangle against British and spread his views to the mass. In a short time, many people who were most fully under the influences of Gandhi responded to the call of him. A leader with the highest moral and ethical standard can save the country; by contrast, a leader without the highest moral and ethical standard will bring bad effects to the society. Yet even a cursory review of the private lives of past American Presidents reveals substantial evidence that Franklin Roosevelt, Dwight Eisenhower and John Kennedy had extramarital affairs, which would make a credibility gap between the mass and the government and destroy the social stabilization. In short, a public official with the highest ethical and moral standard will spread the standards and influences others; if not, a public official would do harm to the society.

I turn next to that a public official with the highest ethical and moral standard can stabilize the economy and society. Obviously, a public official with the highest ethical and moral conforms to laws and regulation; if not, it will be destructive to the economy and society. The financial crisis, for example, is caused by the executives’ illegal activities in the financial institution for a long time. If the executives are not profit-driven and conforms the regulations and laws, many economic losses can be withdrawn. An even more remarkable example is the embezzlement of funds. Due to the avarice, the public contempt for the very legal system which not only lead to their forfeiture of leadership but also enhance the wide gap between the rich and the poor which will destroy the stabilization of society. Therefore, a public official with the highest ethical and moral standard conforms the laws and regulations, which will make sense to the society.

Finally, the public official with the highest ethical and moral standard pushes the society to be more competitive and creative. A public official with the highest ethical and moral standards has the power to request others to follow the highest ethical and moral standards. For example, if a public official disapproves of experimenting on animals, he can request the professors or laboratory to experiment without animals when he examines their projects. Obviously, it is a higher standard to professor and it will push the professor to create new methods of experiment that will make the society more creative and competitive.

In sum, history informs us that effective leader requires adherence to high standards of public morality that will be advantage to the society.

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Issue43 to be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards

To be an effective leader, must a public leader maintain the highest ethical and moral standards, as the speaker asserts? In a sense, I tend to concur with this statement. Although the speaker begs questions by overlooking the definition of the highest ethical and moral standards and unfairly gives them a second priority, a public leader with the highest ethical and moral standard makes a contribution to the stability and development of society.
When we turn to a public official, we find that the public leader with the highest ethical and moral standards influences a social development by insisting on and publicizing the highest ethical and moral standards. Consider certain prominent and effective leader who have contribute profoundly to a better society, Mahatma Gandhi, who lived ascetic and desired peace employed non-cooperation, non-violence and peaceful resistance as his weapon’s in the strangle against British and spread his views to the mass. In a short time, many people who were most fully under the influences of Gandhi responded to the call of him. From him we can see a leader with the highest moral and ethical standard can save the country; by contrast, a leader without the highest moral and ethical standard will bring bad
negtive effects to the society. Yet even a cursory review of the private lives of past American Presidents reveals substantial evidence that Franklin Roosevelt, Dwight Eisenhower and John Kennedy had extramarital affairs, which would make a credibility gap between the mass and the government and destroy the social stabilization(貌似没有那么严重吧，即使严重，请说明他们如何摧毁社会稳定了，我觉得这些例子应该用于执政很好但是有绯闻的例子中去，然后说没有道德一样不行。). In short, a public official with the highest ethical and moral standard will spread the standards and influences others; if not, a public official would do harm to the society（这点需要选过例子）.
I turn next to that a public official with the highest ethical and moral standard can stabilize the economy and society. Obviously, a public official with the highest ethical and moral conforms to laws and regulation; if not, it will be destructive to the economy and society. The financial crisis, for example, is caused by the executives’ illegal activities in the financial institution for a long time. If the executives are not profit-driven and conforms the regulations and laws, many economic losses can be withdrawn. An even more remarkable example is the embezzlement of funds. Due to the avarice, the public contempt for the very legal system which not only lead to their forfeiture of leadership but also enhance the wide gap between the rich and the poor which will destroy the stabilization of society. Therefore, a public official with the highest ethical and moral standard conforms the laws and regulations, which will make sense to the society.
Finally, the public official with the highest ethical and moral standard pushes the society to be more competitive and creative. A public official with the highest ethical and moral standards has the power to request others to follow the highest ethical and moral standards.（原来LZ是想叫的动别人做事啊，还不如直接说领导人会更有号召力。这些废话不要了） For example, if a public official disapproves of experimenting on animals, he can request the professors or laboratory to experiment without animals when he examines their projects.
（这个和道德有什么关系，即使有你没有说出来。）Obviously,（没有感觉很明显。感觉逻辑上有欠缺。） it is a higher standard to professor and it will push the professor to create new methods of experiment that will make the society more creative and competitive.
In sum, history（这里这个词出的很突兀，没有提示） informs us that effective leader requires adherence to high standards of public morality that will be advantage to the society.

语法没有什么问题了，我能力有限，找不出来了，我觉得LZ这里有点怪，第三段和第二段仔细看是不是有些重叠的地方。第二段最后提到了一个社会stable的问题，第三段又展开貌似是接在第二段后面呢，总之有点乱乱的。
第三段TS也有问题，能保证社会稳定必然不是有好的道德就可以的，国家实力很多很多都可以，但是LZ完全没有考虑进去，所以这个TS貌似本身就是错误的。道德和情操只能让有能力领导人变的完美，领导人没有好的道德和情操，能力再强都不行。
有些地方用词过于夸张了。
这里LZ可以分析下领导人的有道德为什么这么重要的问题，因为受到大众媒体的监视，所以做错了就会被媒体曝光。
LZ的分析不够深入，而且貌似有些观点不成立。总体上还是一篇好的文章。赞一个！！

本人一普通大众，不够聪明，如果有不当地方，请指出批评。谢谢。
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需要修改的文章在最后一楼，谢谢啦

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To be an effective leader, must a public leader maintain the highest ethical and moral standards, as the speaker asserts? In a sense, I tend to concur with（没见过这用法consent to?) this statement. Although the speaker begs questions（何意？）by overlooking the definition of the highest ethical and moral standards and unfairly gives them a second priority, a public leader with the highest ethical and moral standard makes a contribution to the stability and development of society.（私以为T力度不够。谁都可以makes a contribution，非要道德最高的？他们的contribution一定比没道德的大？请说清）

When we turn to a public official, we find that the public leader with the highest ethical and moral standards influences a social development by insisting on and publicizing the highest ethical and moral standards. Consider certain prominent and effective leader who have contribute profoundly to a better society, Mahatma Gandhi, who lived ascetic（改成副词） and desired（+for） peace employed（==这几个动词live desire employ到底是怎么个关系，谓语还是定语？结构不明确） non-cooperation, non-violence and peaceful resistance as his weapon’s in the strangle（struggle） against British and spread his views to the mass. In a short time, many people who were most fully under the influences of Gandhi responded to the call of him. （他们追随他一定是因为甘地的道德吗？这里阐释和强调不够）A leader with the highest moral and ethical standard can save the country; by contrast, a leader without the highest moral and ethical standard will bring bad effects to the society. Yet even a cursory review of the private lives of past American Presidents reveals substantial evidence that Franklin Roosevelt, Dwight Eisenhower and John Kennedy had extramarital affairs, which would make a credibility gap between the mass and the government and destroy the social stabilization.（这是事实吗？事实是，罗斯福新政稳定了社会，肯尼迪也被认为是好总统） In short, a public official with the highest ethical and moral standard will spread the standards and influences others; if not, a public official would do harm to the society.（用对比的手法论证，思路OK，但是例子说服力不够。）

I turn next to that a public official with the highest ethical and moral standard can stabilize the economy and society.（从TS看，此段与上段的区别是啥？貌似上段写影响已经包括了对经济政治啥的了啊，这个stabilize的概念是否有重复之嫌） Obviously, a public official with the highest ethical and moral conforms to laws and regulation; if not, it will be destructive to the economy and society. The financial crisis, for example, is caused by the executives’ illegal activities in the financial institution for a long time. If the executives are not profit-driven and conforms the regulations and laws, many economic losses can be withdrawn（换may be，别这么肯定）. An even more remarkable example is the embezzlement of funds. Due to the avarice, the public contempt for the very legal system which not only lead to their forfeiture of leadership but also enhance the wide gap between the rich and the poor which will destroy the stabilization of society. Therefore, a public official with the highest ethical and moral standard conforms the laws and regulations, which will make sense to the society.（从论证来看，此段优于上段。但因为觉得上段阐述的influence跟此段的stabilize有重复指出，觉得区分不甚清晰。）

Finally, the public official with the highest ethical and moral standard pushes the society to be more competitive and creative. A public official with the highest ethical and moral standards has the power to request others to follow the highest ethical and moral standards.（真的吗？恕我不能认可。领导人自己高标准不一定代表他能要求别人跟他做。除了法律规定，没人能强迫他人遵守严苛的道德准则） For example, if a public official disapproves of experimenting on animals, he can request the professors or laboratory to experiment without animals when he examines their projects. Obviously, it is a higher standard to professor and it will push the professor to create new methods of experiment that will make the society more creative and competitive.（这两个例子不当，恕直言，甚至显得过于简单和幼稚。前一个让我觉得有点以个人好恶决定政策的感觉，后一个则以偏概全：很多因素让人创新啊！此外，可以考虑一下“道德”这个概念是很主观的，各人理解不同，所以前一个例子中政治家觉得动物实验不道德，可能他人觉得这是很道德的：因为避免了人类的危险。）
In sum, history informs us that effective leader requires adherence to high standards of public morality that will be advantage to the society.
总体看，语言可以加强，结构和思路可以更清晰，例子得更切题才行。
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