舜 的独立作文贴

john_332UID: 2741978

Newspapers and magazines are the best way of learning about a foreign country.

No wonder newspaper and magazines are the window for the aliens to know a country,by broswing today's newspaper
we can easily get an idea about the latest acchievements and current status in main aspect of this nation, like
economy,politics,science...etc. Due to the swift transaction in information through mass media like newspaper which
updated everyday. it definitely is a shortcut for a foreign people to get to know a country,what's more,the magazines
which commonly regarded as a dynamic source to access the newest critics and fresh fashion infromation in every field,
also serves as a major approach to keep up with the present trend. Just like the fast food, we can feed our "thrist" quickly
by reading a number of pages of newspaper or magazine and feel content with the brief views in most area in the new
country.

However, is it the best way of learning about a foreign country ? it varies depend on individuals because it is a complicated
and varity country,which section we need to know about decides what material and information we should source to help us
understand it. So my point is that in order to get a better prespective of a country, reading newspapers and magazines isn't
enough. Take the election of the presidency last year for example, we may got informed that Obama wins the campagin by
reading newspaper,but why could he beat the opponents and gain support from the majority is a simple question,and it
cannot be easily answered by just serval articles inside the newspapers, we may need consult the polical analyer, hit the
books in the library, watch the TV debate,or even listen to the candidacy speech on the spot. To summerize, there are a lot
of ways to learn about a foreign country and its culture, beside the indirect messages convered by newspaper and personal
expression on the magazines,I choose to get a practical experience in real life with certain knowledge about the history.
On the other hand, despite the fact the advanced technology offer us a powerful tool to access any information we need,one
can not exhust all the knowledge in every aspect about a country, thus the best way of learning about a foreign country is a method that not only study the micro situation in public society especially the human beings but also understand the marco conditions in main aspects as a whole. In addition, knowing the process of the development and evolution history  is far more important than results and latest acchievements.

duck2010UID: 2757376

楼主的文章写得很不错，语言功夫很好。
如果楼主是初来乍到，能写出这种水平，已经相当让人佩服了。
稍加时日，28+的托福作文十拿九稳。

给楼主的建议：先把你的文章复制到word里，把语法、拼写以及格式错误改正，亦即，去掉word编辑器检测出来的红线绿线。

加油！

john_332UID: 2741978

谢谢  确实很多拼写这种低级的错误，主要是以往背单词时不太去记拼写的关系。

  我会继续努力的，大家一起加油！

rjyuuUID: 2591508

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哇。。。例子很赞。。。当时想破脑袋也没想出来

我的Word不能自动纠错。。。不过想必GG要注意下拼写

结构上 开头+承让+主题 三段 没结尾！！再就是 那一大段拆成两小段就更标致了

主体段的主题句请提到段首
太养在深闺无人知啦

文字很不错^-^

john_332UID: 2741978

谢谢UU， 以后注意把主题句提到段首，比较符合英语文章的写作习惯。

   access应该可以做动词用，表示“接入，达到，进入...”， 的确拼写问题很严重，惭愧，我会用个本子专门把拼错的抄下来以改正这个毛病。

eejchenUID: 2225156

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mpromanusUID: 2565872

No wonder newspapers and magazines are the windows for the aliens? (If you're trying to use 'alien' to mean a 'foreigner', then know that this use is mostly only used by immigration authorities to mean a 'foreign-born citizen'. The word itself comes with a sense of being strange, unfamiliar, and incompatible, and probably isn't the best word you'd want to describe a 'foreigner' who's potentially interested to know another country.) to know a country. By browsing today's newspapers we can easily get an idea about the latest acchievements and current status in the main aspect of this nation, like in economy, politics, science...etc. Due to the swift transaction in information through mass media like newspapers, which are updated everyday (Not all mass media, and certainly not all newspapers are updated everyday, or only everyday.).(And, this is not a complete sentence.) it (This makes me suspect that you meant to use a comma after that '...everyday'. But still, even with that comma, this whole mess doesn't have a proper subject - WHAT is this 'it', anyway? There are four nouns in the 'due to' part, and which one is your 'it'? Don't assume that your readers will know where all your pronouns are pointing at just because you know where all your pronouns are pointing at.) definitely is a shortcut for a foreign people (I trust you to discover the error here yourself.) to get to know a country. What's more, the magazines, which are commonly regarded as a dynamic source to access the newest critics and fresh fashion infromation in every field, also serves as a major approach to keep up with the present trends. Just like the eating fast food, we can feed our "thrist" (For what?) quickly by reading a number of pages of a newspaper or a magazine, and feel content with the brief views in most areas in the new country. (This introduction is a tad long, if it's meant to be an introduction at all. It reads more like a developed argument for the topic, in TOEFL's terms of course. This opening is nice for a general-purpose essay or a newspaper column, but that's because the question is just a statement without any specific requirement on what you're expected to discuss. If the question is something like 'Do you agree with the following statement? xxx...' - which is very often what TOEFL essay questions are like in reality, btw - you then can't afford to spend this amount of energy on showing off your language without clearly stating your stand. It seems like you come from writing GRE essays so here's just a reminder to keep in mind: read your essay question carefully, follow its instructions and discuss what it wants you to discuss. TOEFL essay questions are generally more specific, and expected essays are more fixed in structure than GRE essays.)

However, is it the best way of learning about a foreign country ? it varies depending on individuals because it is a complicated and varity? country (Do the two 'it's here refer to the same thing? If not, you're in big trouble of getting your ideas across.). Which section we need to know about decides what material and information we should source to help us understand it. So my point is that in order to get a better prespective of a country, reading newspapers and magazines isn't enough (The question is NOT about whether newspapers and magazines are ENOUGH. It's about whether they are the BEST way. Of course, you can infer that since they are not enough, they are not the best, but you can't leave the argument at being 'enough'.). Take the election of the presidency (Of the United States, I assume?) last year (President Obama assumed office in 2009, but the election was in 2008, which would be the year before the last now.) for example. we may get informed that Obama wins the campaign by reading newspapers (FYI: at the first glance, there's an interesting ambiguity here: do we get informed by reading newspapers, or did Obama win the campaign by reading newspapers? Of course, clever readers will use their common sense to eliminate the latter, but the thought of Obama winning by reading newspapers did make me chuckle.),but why could he could beat the opponents and gain support from the majority is a simple question (Personal comment: if this is a simple question to you, then what might be a hard question by your standards?), and it cannot be easily answered by just several articles inside the newspapers, we may need consult the a political analyzer (The spelling isn't the problem here. The problem is that this person should be called a 'political analyst'.), hit the books in the a library, watch the TV debates, or even listen to the candidacy speech on the spot. To summerize, there are a lot of ways to learn about a foreign country and its culture, besides the indirect messages convered by newspapers and personal expressions on the magazines. (Again, you're still at the 'enough' point. Yes, there are various other ways to learn about a country, and the question itself never restricts you on talking about that. But whether a particular way is the best has little to do with the fact that there are various other ways. It's more about how this particular way COMPARES against others. You had a glimpse of this comparison when you said that newspaper articles can't cover certain questions that other mediums can cover, but by the time you start to summerize, you're back to the point about 'enough' - which is the right thing to do, though, just that you did it on a point that's off the question..) I choose to get a practical experience in real life with certain knowledge about the history (Of what? And where did you elaborate about 'history' in the paragraph, anyway?).

On the other hand, despite the fact the advanced technologies offer us a powerful tool to access any information we need, one cannot exhaust all the knowledge in every aspect about a country, thus the best way of learning about a foreign country is a method that not only studies the micro situations in the country's? public society, especially the human beings, but also understands the marco conditions in main aspects as a whole (Yeah, very big, but empty. What kind of situations and conditions are considered 'micro' or 'macro', anyway? Your readers are likely not experts in sociology. Without solid explanations, such general jargons do not add much meaning to your discussion.). In addition, knowing the process of the development and evolution history is far more important than results and latest acchievements (Are you assuming that 'newspapers and magazines' contain nothing about 'process of development and evolution history', and are all about 'results and latest achievements'? That's such a degrading stereotype. Do you ever read magazines like TIME? XD).

(The essay seems to trail off unfinished. There's no concrete and overall resolution. Plus, the question is not really asking you WHAT the best way is.)

总结：

这位童鞋你是考了G再来考T的吧。。=.=

语言很好很强大，但是还是会犯很基础的语法错误，比如动词的第三人称单数。拼字什么的就不说了。。

最主要的是逻辑方面，题目没什么具体要求，文章就自然开始发散，这没问题，问题是一发散就不回来了。这个题目是一个比较性质的题目，但在你的文章中几乎看不到比较，顺着‘这个不是最好的那么最好的应该是什么’这个方向一路高歌猛进，可是问题没问你最好的是什么啊。。=.= 如果问题没有要求，发散也可以，但必须先说明你为什么需要发散再来发散，但是托福的作文题一般都对内容格式限制得很多，所以，还是拿真题练习比较好。。

john_332UID: 2741978

非常感谢Romanus的修改，终于第一次体会到那种恍然大悟的感觉。

   我会再次认真的反思这篇文章所反映出来的问题，并在后面的写作中加以
   改正，特别是注意以下几个方面，1  逻辑思路上紧扣中心主题   2  减少
  句中语法错误   3  To be more specific.

  之前没有考过G，独立作文也是刚开始写，后来我研究了论坛中的一些帖子，
  并看了很多大牛改的作文，渐渐对“什么样的文章才是合格的T作文”有了
  清晰的认识，保证下次交给你改的作文能有一个大的飞跃。

  再次感谢Romanus的批改！！

john_332UID: 2741978

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A teacher who is a serious and strict person is more effective in teaching than a teacher who is a tumor and easygoing person.

What makes a effective class ? a well-equipped classroom,the diligent students,or a wisdom teacher ? The way I see it, a serious and strict teacher is the key to an efficient class.This belief based on the fact that as a leader in the whole class,teacher should steer the class to follow the course schedule closely and achieve the goal in one class.Prior to a course, a plan will always be deliberately written down and carried out accordingly during the class.So the efficiency lies on whether the majority of the class has followed up and to what extent did a class achieved its final purpose.Without doubt, a strict way has outweigh a easygoing style to become a prime approaches to make a class more effective.
I've always remembered my first English teacher--Miss Li, who is an experienced English teacher,her class is very strict and goes in a fast-paced style with personal way,there are a lot of disciplines and rules to ,besides,her occasional questions was a special feature annoyed by some students. The pressure probably make the whole class feel uncomfortable, but it do improving the efficiency of teaching,because the students are concentrate and focused.  

Needless to say, an humour and easygoing person will be more welcome by the public in entertainment circle,workplace,or a family. But when it comes to the academic teaching and learning,a strict person is needed to keep the class on the right track,especially on those science subjects like maths,physicals,biology...etc.Someone argues that a lively class is more effective because it will attract the students' attention and inspire the creative ideas.No one likes anxiety and nervous caused by seriousness in class,however, I have to say if the funny elements or humors teaching styles introduced for the purpose of fun,it would obviously results in distraction or off topic discussions thus ruined the outcome of a class.In addition,the time in class is limit and precious,the teacher should take the responsibility to make it in better use rather than waste it. So if a teacher want his or her class to be effective, a serious attitude and strict principles must be a wise choice.

Teaching is not entertaining, and the classroom is not a playground,I agree that a serious and strict person could generate pressure that make students nervous, but just like success need hard work and investiments,in the long run, we will grateful for the things we learned about and benifit a lot from it in the future.

john_332UID: 2741978

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should live one city or in one country all their life instead of moving to live in different places.

Thanks to the invention of fast vehicles and advanced development in transportation, people who live in nowadays has enjoyed the most convenient of travelling than ever before. It was so easy for people to moving from one place to another that more and more people tend to moving if they start to feel bored about their routine life and want to get rid of the meaningless work. Just like the old saying goes a roller stone gathers no muss,doubtlessly, a large number of people still hold the opinion that people should live in one city or in one country all their life, not just because a stable life will benefit the whole family to work,play and study, the advantages from familiarity that will help us greatly in solving problems. Yet, my point of view is that people should moving to live in different places.

One of the best thing about moving to different places is the brand new life ahead waiting for you.Everyone has the right to choose how to live and enjoy his or her life in a way they wanted. By moving to a new place we'll have the opportunity to learn a completely different culture and open one's horizon in the process. It may spend some time to get used to the food,weather or language where we live, but it is worthy for us because the experiences enriched our life with more knowledges,more beautiful things which we can not obtain from only one place. In most cases, the moving involved with a purpose of improvement in living standards, just like most people moving from under-developed place to a developed place looking for a better living conditions, they will have better opportunity in career, their children will receive higher education,their parents will enjoy advanced medical care system as well. So the moving always create a new and better living condition for the entire family.

In spite of the drawbacks caused by moving, like instability and inconvenience can be overcome by an energetic and enthusiastic heart, we should be confident in ourselves in conquering difficulties and also ready for next challenge so that
we will have an in-depth understanding in both life itself and ourselves.Thus further made our life more wonderful and meaningful, not one can gain a such a complex prospective on life by live in one country all his or her life.  

The variety of culture and social pattern provide us numerous life style for living,since we have much options available and ability to travel, I definitely agree that people,especially the youngsters, to be brave enough to take action,take responsibility for the future and pursuit dreams,it will be the valuable experience for one to cherish in his or her entire life.

mpromanusUID: 2565872

9# john_332

What makes a effective class? a well-equipped classroom, the diligent students, or a wise teacher ? The way I see it, a serious and strict teacher is the key to an efficient class.This belief is based on the fact that as a leader in the whole class, the teacher should steer the class to follow the course schedule closely, and achieve the goal (What 'goal'? Remember, if you use 'the', your noun to be specific, such as 'this goal', or 'the goal to transfer knowledge', something like that, but you can't stop at 'the goal'.) in one class. Prior to a course, a plan will always be deliberately written down and carried out accordingly during the class. So the efficiency lies on whether the majority of the class has followed up and to what extent did a class achieved its final purpose. Without doubt, the strict way has outweighed the easygoing style to become a prime approaches to make a class more effective.

I've always remembered my first English teacher--Miss Li, who is an experienced English teacher. Her class is very strict and goes in a fast-paced style with personal way?; there are a lot of disciplines and rules to ('to' what?); besides, her occasional questions were a special feature that annoyed by some students (A word on sentence construction: you can't simply pile sentences together using commas and hope they'll make a good long sentence. The English language has much stricter rules about sentence formation than the Chinese language does, so please be cautious about writing long sentences.). The pressure probably make the whole class feel uncomfortable, but it does improve the efficiency of teaching, because the students are concentrating and focused.

Needless to say, an humourous and easygoing person will be more welcome by the public in the entertainment circle (That's a direct translation of 娱乐圈, isn't it? =.=), workplace, or a family. But when it comes to the academic teaching and learning, a strict person is needed to keep the class on the right track, especially on those science subjects like maths, physicals, biology...etc. Someone argues that a lively class is more effective because it will attract the students' attention and inspire the creative ideas. No one likes anxiety and nervousness caused by seriousness in class, however, I have to say if the funny ('funny' is not the same as 'humorous', but I'll believe that you're using the word 'funny' with a purpose here.) elements or humorous teaching styles are introduced for the purpose of fun, it (What?) would obviously results in distraction or off-topic discussions, thus ruining the outcome of a class. In addition, the time in class is limited and precious. The teacher should take the responsibility to make it in better use of it rather than to waste it. So if a teacher wants his or her class to be effective, a serious attitude and strict principles must be a wise choice.

Teaching is not entertaining, and the classroom is not a playground. I agree that a serious and strict person could generate pressure that makes students nervous, but just like success needs hard work and investiments, in the long run, we will be grateful for the things we learned about and benifit a lot from it in the future. (This conclusion doesn't seem to be directly related to the question about teaching effectiveness. Of course, one can try to infer that by 'the things we learned about', you're alluding to a teacher's teaching, but a conclusion paragraph needs to be clearer and more specific, and should not introduce this kind of guessing. This is to avoid confusing readers with apparently different points from your primary arguments.)

总结：

总体来说语言的使用不错，需要注意一下拼字和句读，还有长句的句法。另外就是标点符号后面要加空格，这跟内容无关，标点符号本身很小，所以如果不用空格来帮助标记它们的位置，读起来眼睛会很吃力。

主要的问题我觉得是你的论点不很明显。通篇内容的确是很扣题地在讲严格的老师的好处，但是你的分段并没有看出每段内容上有什么明显的区别，分段的语句中也没有很明显的表示说我这一段要讲什么点。这不是说作文一定要鞍前马后地列明论点，托福作文对格式并没有特别严格的要求，但这种流水写法的主要问题是会让你全篇感觉就说了一个主要点，就是严格的老师能让学生更有注意力，所以教学效果好。其余的点不是位置上不明显，就是说起来意思也相差不远。所以在论述的格式清晰上还是最好注意一下。

cp19880313UID: 2643174

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should live one city or in one country all their life instead of moving to live in different places.
Thanks to the invention of fast vehicles and advanced development in transportation, people who live in nowadays has enjoyed the most convenient of travelling than ever before. It was so easy for people to moving from one place to another that more and more people tend to moving if they start to feel bored about their routine life and want to get rid of the meaningless work. Just like the old saying goes a roller stone gathers no muss,doubtlessly, a large number of people still hold the opinion that people should live in one city or in one country all their life, not just because a stable life will benefit the whole family to work,play and study, the advantages from familiarity that will help us greatly in solving problems. Yet, my point of view is that people should moving to live in different places.感觉这句话的转折有点突然。

One of the best thing about moving to different places is the brand new life ahead waiting for you.Everyone has the right to choose how to live and enjoy his or her life in a way they wanted. By moving to a new place we'll have the opportunity to learn a completely different culture and open one's horizon in the process. It may spend some time to get used to the food,weather or language where we live, but it is worthy for us because the experiences enriched our life with more knowledges,more beautiful things which we can not obtain from only one place. In most cases, the moving involved with a purpose of improvement in living standards, just like most people moving from under-developed place to a developed place looking for a better living conditions, they will have a better opportunity in career, their children will receive higher education,their parents will enjoy advanced medical care system as well. So the moving always create a new and better living condition for the entire family.

In spite of the drawbacks caused by moving, like instability and inconvenience can be overcome by an energetic and enthusiastic heart, we should be confident in ourselves in conquering difficulties and also ready for next challenge so that
we will have an in-depth understanding in both life itself and ourselves.Thus further made our life more wonderful and meaningful, not one can gain a such a complex prospective on life by live in one country all his or her life.  

The variety of culture and social pattern provide us numerous life style for living,since we have much options available and ability to travel, I definitely agree that people,especially the youngsters, to be brave enough to take action,take responsibility for the future and pursuit dreams,it will be the valuable experience for one to cherish in his or her entire life.最后一段写得真好，有总结有延伸。

感觉这篇文章写得不错，但是内容我认为不够丰富，你中间的两段论述仿佛都只是在论证一个观点， 我认为你可以从不同方面来支持你的论点，如经济，健康，生活，分开来说的话可能会更好一些，当然，这些只是我的个人意见了。

john_332UID: 2741978

University students should be required to take basic science classes even if they are not part of the field of the study。

Along with the rapidly development in our modern society, requirements for a competent employee in workplace are also changing and getting higher. University, that served for the function to provide qualified graduates for society, should establish or adjust its classes to meet the needs from current society. So I fully convinced that basic science classes should be required in the university.

It is indisputable that basic science is related with our daily life closely. In order to live a healthy and quality life, not to mention people have to follow some general knowledge in science to take control of their daily life easily, certain complicated techniques must be learned for a long time to apply high technology facilities for particular purpose. For example, we have to obey some physical rules to use the electricity in our apartment in a proper way, moreover, when we try to use computer or operate an advanced machine for certain purpose, more knowledge would involved and sometimes combined with specific operating skills. What's more, even though the university students should focus on their major courses, they should never confine themselves on it, learning several basic science in other fields can not only enrich students' campus life and enlarge their horizon,but also benefit the students' career or later life in the long run.

Some basic science classes may seems irrelevant to the field of the study, yet ignore them completely would cause a limit in further study, just like biology, when a research or study goes deeper in this area, it would involves knowledge from other science,like chemistry,mathematics,psychology...etc. And of course those who has comprehensive knowledege would stand more change to surpass others. So for the college students, the basic knowledge is necessary and beneficial even though it is not part of the field of the study.

Last but not least, it's such a complicated world, to some extend, every subject has connect with each other, either directly or indirectly. If the students have an opportunity to get to know more about the science, it may subconsciously form a intelligent mind thus helps them to understand the extensive links inside. I think a successful person in a particular field should always be absorb other informations related and visionary in predicting the future growth in that field. I am now working as an international salesperon, I chose economics as my major , but mastering the economics only is far from enough, I have to learn a new language to communicate with my cilents, study the industry knowledge to get familiar with the products I'm about to sell, and maybe take psychology courses to know how to quote a price and negotiate with customers. The relationship between individual class may not seems so obvious in studying, but it does somehow has profound meaning in a student's future career when knowledge comes into pratical use.

To summarize, I hold the opinion that the basic science classes are indispensable in university,because it has far-reaching influence in the students and benefit them on both further study and later career.

馋MEUID: 2761685

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写的挺好的，也很长，整体感觉很好
Along with the rapidly development in our modern society, requirements for a competent employee in workplace are also changing and getting higher. University, that（要用which吧） served for the function to provide qualified graduates for society, should establish or adjust its classes to meet the needs from current society.（借鉴一下） So I fully convinced that basic science classes should be required in the university.: X8 C3 l5 F6 R& i

5 a' H& _2 ^: s5 ^It is indisputable that basic science is related with（to吧） our daily life closely. In order to live a healthy and quality life, not to mention people have to follow some general knowledge in science to take control of their daily life easily, certain complicated techniques must be learned for a long time to apply high technology facilities for particular purpose. （这个句子很好）For example, we have to obey some physical rules to use the electricity in our apartment in a proper way, moreover, when we try to use computer or operate an advanced machine for certain purpose, more knowledge would involved and sometimes combined with specific operating skills. What's more, even though the university students should focus on their major courses, they should never confine themselves on it, learning several basic science in other fields can not only enrich students' campus life and enlarge their horizon,but also benefit the students' career or later life in the long run.' G  ym4 E+ Q
第一段的举例挺好的
( s) P+ t; q2 l+ h7 {- v: O( SSome basic science classes may seems irrelevant to the field of the study, yet ignore them completely would cause a limit in further study, just like biology, when a research or study goes deeper in this area, it would involves knowledge from other science,like chemistry,mathematics,psychology...etc. And of course those who has comprehensive knowledege would stand more change to surpass others. So for the college students, the basic knowledge is necessary and beneficial even though it is not part of the field of the study.（个人之见，第二段的中心不是很明确，是说ignore them 不好还是说他们在job market上less competitive啊）
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& y2 W) ?9 V- QLast but not least, it's such a complicated world, to some extend, every subject has connect with each other, either directly or indirectly. If the students have an opportunity to get to know more about the science, it may subconsciously form a intelligent mind thus helps them to understand the extensive links inside. I think a successful person in a particular field should always be absorb （有点奇怪啊，要不改成be able to?）other informations related and visionary in predicting the future growth in that field. I am now working as an international salesperon, I chose economics as my major , but mastering the economics only is far from enough, I have to learn a new language to communicate with my cilents, study the industry knowledge to get familiar with the products I'm about to sell, and maybe take psychology courses to know how to quote a price and negotiate with customers. The relationship between individual class may not seems so obvious in studying, but it does somehow has profound meaning in a student's future career when knowledge comes into pratical use. （我觉得你自己工作的这个例子跟大学生要学science的关系不大 啊，不过看得出你语言功底不错，借鉴 ）
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3 C% |" E4 u1 e, S8 ?To summarize, I hold the opinion that the basic science classes are indispensable in university,because it has far-reaching influence in the students and benefit them on both further study and later career.

john_332UID: 2741978

To solve problems present and future is it necessary to understand the past.

  No matter how advanced our society is, I think we shall never underestimate the importance of past. As remarkable progress have been made by human nowadays, the problems we encountered everyday are also more complicated and tough than ever before, thus people tend to believe that there is no need to understand the past when solving present or future problems. However, the history has taught us that people who didn't understand the past has paid heavy price.

First of all, the past has internally related with present or future. The present problem will somehow has certain relation with the past,  that's why we always have to look back in past for the reason and find the correct solution to solve present problem. A living example of this is global warming, which is the most concerned environment problem confronting the entire human being. The ever-worsening situation caused by the mass destruction in forest and reckless carbon releasing over the last decades. To understand what the cause of problem would lead us to the coordinate solution, although it is impossible for us to change the past to avoid the existing problem, we will be warned and learned and start to take action and make change right away. Moreover, we'll gain the past experience and prevent the future problems which would likely happen again.

Some one would argue that the problems we encountered at present are completely different and innovated. Yet, in the process of solving present problems, the experience and knowledge from past practice would be our priority concern to  form a feasible and constructive plan. Just like in the field of education and medical development, the most likely solution for a new problem would always comes from an expert who has a lot of experience, and the suggestions from person who understands the past better would be more constructive and effective, why ? Because after years of accumulation and study of the achievements, the comprehensive knowledge embedded could inspire us to create a new solution to a new problem. If there is absolutely no past experience or information we can base on, we'll hardly find a proper solution, or even, make it worse.

From what has been discussed above, it is necessary to understand the past in solving either present or future problems, not just because we can grab the clue inside and follow the basic rules accordingly, but also because the understanding of past will lead us to a more cost-effective solution to the present and prepare in advance for the future problems.