ISSUE221 倒数3天求指教 by pluka

plukaUID: 2721764

TOPIC: ISSUE211 - "Any decision-whether made by government, by a corporation, or by an individual person-must take into account future conditions more than present conditions."
WORDS: 593          TIME: 00:45:00          DATE: 2010-2-27 10:34:53
模考 随机限时 拼写让人泪目。。。
Which makes a wise judgement, the concentration on today or consideration for tomorrow? As to me, both is indispensible（indispensable是A不是I！） for a decision that benefit not only present but in a long run.

The reason why people must concern for the present is visible to naked eyes. People live in today, and for the purpose of subsistance（subsistence是E不是A！）, they should care for the urgent demands and problems that loom around. There are extreme situations when the present determines all. For example, Haiti, the country who suffered from unprecedented seriously earthquake earlier this year, has been dedicating all its attentions and resources to the settlement of pressing problems that are relavent（relevant先E后A！） to the survival of the nation immediately. Under the auspice of the international community, Haiti government spares no effort to fight against the nature disaster and provide shelters, access to food and waters, remedis（remedies拼写！） for disease and so forth. It is unlikely that at the moment they can save extra energy for anticipanted future conditions, such as the education equality, the health care or the industrial pollution, for they know that if they cannot survive the today, there is no tomorrow. When the pressing problem emerges, governments are justified to focus most of their attention on the matter of life and death.

In other time, when the present has been secured, however, the emphasis on future is not only desirable but also necessary. Sure enought（enough拼写！）, it is in today that we live. Nevertheless, the expectation and effort for tomorrow engage people to anticipate the possible happenings and strive for the better. For one thing, despite of the stability and security obtained currently, there may lie insidious dangers that hide behind. Minor and negligible can the flaw seems at the first stage, it may grow to a conspiucous（conspicuous拼写！） menace gradually. Years ago, when some economic experts pointed out the potential risk behind the booming economy, seldom someone take it seriously. Concentarting（concentrating拼写！） solely on the immediate gain, they looked at the direct surroundings and decided out of current conditions. It then becomes too late when the tiny wave, which could have been peacified（pacified有A无E！） if being handled in time, accumulated to be maelstorms（maelstroms RO顺序！） that flooded around, leaving the world the disastruous（disastrous拼写！） crisis. Ignoring the possible future, people may ignore the destructive factors and spawn the evil. 

For another, considerations for future conditions secure the attainment of today. Be it for government, a cooperation, or an individual, truly effective and sustainable success lies in the comprehensive understanding and sensible judgement that entails the present situation and expected prospect. Haiti government, though being urged by the exigent status quo to neglect the future for the moment, can never ignore the anticipated problem if they are to achive（achieve拼写！） a long-term and  healthy development. The continuing prosperity of cooperations, too, necessitates the plan in the long run. Were it not for the sensitivity for the future of the market and the coming opportunities, hardly can a company adapt to the changeable market, let alone prosper. For individuals, frequently advisable decisions are made out of the careful weigh between the current need and the anticipated future. To earn a decent future, for example, a man may insist to study, the fruition of which may be far and requires the strenous（strenuous拼写！） work, even when he is still struggling on the poverty line. Aiming at the continuous flourish and the ultimate achievement, the consideration for future serves as indispensible（indispensable拼写！） part.

While people are justified to emphasize the immediate need. The consideration for future is necessary to protect the sucess（success拼写！） and to secure a sustainable development.

因为快考了却还有大把东西没准备，所以考前恐怕不能回拍。但保证考后（3月3日）立刻回! 嗯那时候回拍的好处就是俺会拍得更仔细~可以留链指定拍哪篇，或到时我找一篇回拍。谢谢捧场~

qisaimanUID: 2703629

first： Present in first paragraph is an adj rather than an adv.  
the topic stresses " future condition more than current condition "
while in the third paragraph, the finanical crisis is like a consequence rather than a condition.

prettywraithUID: 197049

Which makes a wise judgement, the concentration on today or consideration for tomorrow? As to me, both is indispensible（indispensable是A不是I！） for a decision that benefit not only present but in a long run.（起始端简单明了，但是最后一句话“benefit not only present but in a long run”是修饰谁的，修饰decision翻译不同而且单复数不对。修饰both好像多余。你考虑一下，可能我理解有误。）

The reason why people must concern for the present is visible to naked eyes. People live in today, and for the purpose of subsistance（subsistence是E不是A！）, they should care for the urgent demands and problems that loom around. There are extreme situations when the present determines all. For example, Haiti, the country who suffered from unprecedented seriously earthquake earlier this year, has been dedicating all its attentions and resources to the settlement of pressing problems （这里是不是因该是the settlement with pressing problems）that are relavent（relevant先E后A！） to the survival of the nation immediately. Under the auspice of the international community, Haiti government spares no effort to fight against the nature disaster and provide shelters, access to food and waters, remedis（remedies拼写！） for disease and so forth. It is unlikely that at the moment they can save extra energy for anticipanted future conditions（anticipated future conditions这里是想说期望未来因该是anticipating。。。如果是有希望的未来？调整一下用词，感觉这么说不太通顺）, such as the education equality, the health care or the industrial pollution, for they know that if they cannot survive the today, there is no tomorrow. When the pressing problem emerges, governments are justified to focus most of their attention on the matter of life and death.

In other time, when the present has been secured, however, the emphasis on future is not only desirable but also necessary. Sure enought（enough拼写！）, it is in today that we live. Nevertheless, the expectation and effort for tomorrow engage people to （因该是engage in doing...吧）anticipate the possible happenings and strive for the better. For one thing, despite of （despite是介词后面不接of，或者是该为in despite of）the stability and security obtained currently, there may lie insidious dangers that hide behind. Minor and negligible can the flaw seems at the first stage（这句话是倒装？）, it may grow to a conspiucous（conspicuous拼写！） menace gradually. Years ago, when some economic experts（economists ？？） pointed out the potential risk behind the booming economy, seldom someone take it seriously. Concentarting（concentrating拼写！） solely on the immediate gain, they looked at the direct surroundings and decided out of current conditions. It then becomes too late when the tiny wave, which could have been peacified（pacified有A无E！） if being handled in time, accumulated to be maelstorms（maelstroms RO顺序！） that flooded around, leaving the world the disastruous（disastrous拼写！） crisis. Ignoring the possible future, people may ignore the destructive factors and spawn the evil.

For another, considerations for future conditions secure the attainment of today. Be it for government, a cooperation, or an individual, truly effective and sustainable success lies in the comprehensive understanding and sensible judgement that entails the present situation and expected prospect. Haiti government, though being urged by the exigent status quo to neglect the future for the moment, can never ignore the anticipated problem if they are to achive（achieve拼写！） a long-term and  healthy development. The continuing prosperity of cooperations, too, （too好像一般用在肯定句尾？？）necessitates the plan in the long run. Were it not for the sensitivity for the future of the market and the coming opportunities, hardly can a company adapt to the changeable market, let alone prosper. For individuals, frequently advisable decisions are made out of the careful weigh between the current need and the anticipated future. To earn a decent future, for example, a man may insist to study, the fruition of which may be far and requires the strenous（strenuous拼写！） work, even when he is still struggling on the poverty line. Aiming at the continuous flourish and the ultimate achievement, the consideration for future serves as indispensible（indispensable拼写！） part.

While people are justified to emphasize the immediate need. The consideration for future is necessary to protect the sucess（success拼写！） and to secure a sustainable development.

整体文章没什么大问题，主要有个疑问，你的观点应该是现在和未来一样重要，但是通过你的例子发现有些时候现在重要些，有些时候未来更重要，你第三段意思大概是考虑在保证目前安全的情况下尽可能考虑未来的情况，这个和前面感觉是否有点跳跃，是否需要一个好的过渡？
主要是学习，限时随机能写到这种程度比较强啊。小螃蟹加油！

考完试有空帮忙改一篇argument吧，https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1063395-1-1.html
多谢！