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Issue130
The speaker claims that children’s socialization determines the destiny of society and we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society. I tend to disagree with this statement in three respects. First, what is the definition of the socialization and “we” in the statement? Second, children’s socialization is one factor influences the destiny of society. Third, the statement that we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society lacks of evidence.

Turning first to society’s destiny depends on how children are socialized which is a complex issue one that is fraught with the problem of defining socialization. Basically, socialization is a general term for the many different ways and processes by which children come to be able to function as members of their social community. It is in part a process of learning and in part a process of being taught, but modern views of socialization also stress the active role of children in making sense of their social world, and constructing their own ways of being part of their social group. Therefore, children who are well socialized benefit the society; vice versa, the children without well socialization may become an anti-society. Another aspect we should pay close attention to is that what is the definition of “we” in the statement. The “we” may stand for parents, teachers or community. If the “we” stands for parents, it is detrimental to educate children only by parents which make the children lack of communicating with other. Children should go to school, go out in the world to learn to communicate with others. Therefore, the statement is very vague.

Moreover, socialization is only one aspect influencing the realm to determine the destiny of society. In addressing this issue it is helpful to consider in turn two distinct factors: environment and individual character. The environment, which is not conducive to human development, can destruct a country. Loulan, for instance, which was prosperous country on account of the Silk Road, declined gradually due to the adverse circumstance. Moreover, socialization is not the most significant factors influencing the realm to which an individual will ultimately contribute to a better society. Consider certain remarkable figures who have contributed profoundly to a better society. Einstein Albert’s contribution sprang primarily from diligence, which had more to do with parental influence than with socialization. Abraham Lincoln, whose lost the election eight times, failed in business two times, once got the schizophrenia, and had been elected President of the United States at last, his contribution was primarily the result of the persistence of his inner convictions.

Consider next the speaker’s claim that we have not yet learned how to raise children who can better society. If we define a “better” society that the way in which societies have treated women, ethnic, minorities, animals, and the environment have continually evolved and society’s attitudes toward artistic expression, literature, and scientific and intellectual inquiry are also in a continual state of evolution, then the children of the most recent half-century are creating a better society. The most recent quarter-century has paid more attention to assure the lives of the low-income people by providing health insurance and enact minimum wage. We are becoming more sensitive to, and respectful of the right of women, homosexuals, teenagers, various ethnical and racial groups, and mentally- and physically- challenged people. We are aware profoundly of the problem of environmental harm our behavior cause. On the whole, the speaker’s second claim flies in the face of empirical evidence as I see it.
On balance, I disagree with the speaker’s broad assertion that how children are socialized determines the society’s destiny. Identically, our society is steadily evolving into a more civilized, respectful and tolerant one. In sum, I disagree with both aspects of the speaker.

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The speaker claims that children’s socialization determines the destiny of society and we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society. I tend to disagree with this statement in three respects. First, what is the definition of the socialization and “we” in the statement?(这个应该不算是你对原文的反驳吧，算是你解释了一下题目) Second, children’s socialization is only one of the factors that influence the destiny of society. Third, the statement that we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society lacks of evidence.

Turning first to society’s destiny depends on how children are socialized which is a complex issue one that is fraught with the problem of defining socialization. Basically, socialization is a general term for the many different ways and processes by which children come to be able to function as members of their social community. It is in part a process of learning and in part a process of being taught, but modern views of socialization also stress the active role of children in making sense of their social world, and constructing their own ways of being part of their social group. Therefore, children who are well socialized benefit the society; vice versa, the children without well socialization may become an anti-society. (你这里不是给出了社会化的定义吗？而且还有正评价，感觉你这样有点儿前后矛盾)Another aspect we should pay close attention to is that what is the definition of “we” in the statement. The “we” may stand for parents, teachers or community. If the “we” stands for parents, it is detrimental to educate children only by parents which make the children lack of communicating with other. Children should go to school, go out in the world to learn to communicate with others. Therefore, the statement is very vague.

Moreover, socialization is only one aspect influencing the realm to determine the destiny of society. The environment, which is not conducive to human development, can destruct a country（这个观点很好呀）. Loulan, for instance, which was prosperous country on account of the Silk Road, declined gradually due to the adverse circumstance（可以加一句，although plenty of brilliant people emerged in this historical phase,这样显得个人对社会发展没那么重要）. Moreover, socialization is not the most significant factors influencing the realm to which an individual will ultimately contribute to a better society. Consider certain remarkable figures who have contributed profoundly to a better society. Einstein Albert’s contribution sprang primarily from diligence, which had more to do with parental influence than with socialization. Abraham Lincoln, whose lost the election eight times, failed in business two times, once got the schizophrenia, and had been elected President of the United States at last, his contribution was primarily the result of the persistence of his inner convictions.

Consider next the speaker’s claim that we have not yet learned how to raise children who can better society. If we define a “better” society that the way in which societies have treated women, ethnic, minorities, animals, and the environment have continually evolved and society’s attitudes toward artistic expression, literature, and scientific and intellectual inquiry are also in a continual state of evolution, then the children of the most recent half-century are creating a better society. The most recent quarter-century has paid more attention to assure the lives of the low-income people by providing health insurance and enact minimum wage. We are becoming more sensitive to, and respectful of the right of women, homosexuals, teenagers, various ethnical and racial groups, and mentally- and physically- challenged people. We are aware profoundly of the problem of environmental harm our behavior cause（可以在多写一句这些发展真是跟我们更好的教育了儿童有关）. On the whole, the speaker’s second claim flies in the face of empirical evidence as I see it.
On balance, I disagree with the speaker’s broad assertion that how children are socialized determines the society’s destiny. Identically, our society is steadily evolving into a more civilized, respectful and tolerant one. In sum, I disagree with both aspects of the speaker.（好像有点儿重复）

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