iSSUE 50， 看似简单我写得好纠结，求助哈？！~恩，绝对的有拍就回哈

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50"In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach."
At first glimpse, the speaker's statement seems to be sound, considering that this approach links the practical use with the professor's work in the university. However, further consideration reveals that this statement may lead to other problems that hinder the development of higher education.

Higher education refers to an educational level that follows the completion of the secondary education, such as high school and secondary school. Teaching , research, exacting applied work and social activities are involved in this phase of education. For most people, it is the first opportunity, may as well as the last one, to be schooled about their professional field, which will be a decisive factor of the students' future career. No doubt that the education of students should be the focus of the university or the college.

From the definition, it is very clear that vocational training is an essential part in this education level. It is generally believed that faculty who are responsible for such training, should have an insight into the precedent achievements as well as the current trend in their field. Therefore, this proves the value to send faculty to work outside. Since knowledge is being upgraded at such a fast speed,what the faculty teach and research may not catch up the developing pace. So being a member of the working force, he can sense the future of his discipline, check the practical value of his current research, compare the outcomes with the results in real world and revise what he will infuse to the young generation. This case is specially obvious in the management
school. Common sense tells us that the problems in a real company are more complex than the ones described in the textbooks. This is resulted from the variation of employees, the fast changing market situation and accidental events which can cause a chaos to the company. Without being part of this emergency, how can a professor educate his students to be prepared and cope with such cases? In a word, a teacher who has never been a leader is not eligible to teach others how to lead.

However, it may be too assertive to get the conclusion that we should sent all faculty to the companies outside, because the nature of some subjects determines that
there is no need to have a close connect with the society. Fundamental research subjects, such as mathmatics, physics , philosophy and so on, require the researchers to spend numerous time being alone, analyzing and thinking. Being in the working place can be no good to their researches and teaching methods, even does harm to it. To make matters worse, if we emphasis too much on the working experience, no wonder the faculty will lower their teaching performence, the most vital part in the role as an educator. This can be easily understood that everyone's energy is somewhat limited, so the part devoted to the par-time job can be never returned to the role in the university campuss. Thus our students become the victims of such phenonmenon. To an extreme degree, no one will care about the students' performs but concentrate on the tasks outside, which may provide these faculty more handsome salaries.

Given this fact that higher education can be regarded as a switching point of one's life, our faculty should realize their responsibility to every student. Admittedly, both teachers and students can benefit to this decision, we must be aware there exists a balance point. If overdone, it will contravene
the essence of education.

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因为5号就考了，还有很多东西要准备，所以这两天没有时间拍了，真的非常非常不好意思，但是我会在5号晚上好好拍你的文章，请一定一定原谅

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At first glimpse, the speaker's statement seems to be sound, considering that this approach links the practical use with the professor's work in the university. However, further consideration reveals that this statement may lead to other problems that hinder the development of higher education.

Higher education refers to an educational level that follows the completion of the secondary education, such as high school and secondary school. [a1] 这个介绍很多余，而且这个介绍和你要说明的问题也没有关系Teaching , research, exacting applied work and social activities are involved in this phase of education. For most people, it is the first opportunity, may as well as the last one, to be schooled about their professional field, which will be a decisive factor of the students' future career. No doubt that the education of students should be the focus of the university or the college.第一段介绍高等教育的重要性

From the definition, it is very clear that vocational training is an essential part in this education level. It is generally believed that faculty who are responsible for such training, should have an insight into the precedent achievements as well as the current trend in their field. Therefore, this proves the value to send faculty to work outside. Since knowledge is being upgraded at such a fast speed, what the faculty teach and research may not catch up the developing pace. So being a member of the working force, he can sense the future of his discipline, check the practical value of his current research, compare the outcomes with the results in real world and revise what he will infuse to the young generation. This case is specially obvious in the management
school. Common sense tells us that the problems in a real company are more complex than the ones described in the textbooks. This is resulted from the variation of employees, the fast changing market situation and accidental events which can cause a chaos to the company. Without being part of this emergency, how can a professor educate his students to be prepared and cope with such cases? In a word, a teacher who has never been a leader is not eligible to teach others how to lead.为了证明职业培训是高等教育的重要部分，用商科的教学和实践的关系来证明，但是作者没有吧用上课证明的结论推广到其他所有学科，所以最后的总结也只能说明商科老师。建议把例证深入分析，并且不要把结论说得如此绝对。

However, it may be too assertive to get the conclusion that we should sent all faculty to the companies outside, because the nature of some subjects determines that there is no need to have a close connect with the society. Fundamental research subjects, such as mathmatics, physics , philosophy and so on, require the researchers to spend numerous time being alone, analyzing and thinking. Being in the working place can be no good to their researches and teaching methods, even does harm to it. To make matters worse, if we emphasis too much on the working experience, no wonder the（those） faculty will lower their teaching performance, the most vital part in the role as an educator. This can be easily understood that everyone's energy is somewhat limited, so the part devoted to the par-time job can be never returned to the role in the university campuss. Thus our students become the victims of such phenonmenon. To an extreme degree, no one will care about the students' performs but concentrate on the tasks outside, which may provide these faculty more handsome salaries(这是毫无逻辑的假设).最好在段首加入此段的主题句。你这段讲的是在基础学科不需要社会经验，但是和前一段是矛盾的，因为你前段的主题是职业培训师高等教育的重要部分。这是在自相矛盾，建议你最好把上一段的主题进行限制

Given this fact that higher education can be regarded as a switching point of one's life, our faculty should realize their responsibility to every student. Admittedly, both teachers and students can benefit to this decision, we must be aware there exists（is） a balance point. If overdone, it will contravene the essence of education.主旨：找平衡你的观点很好，具体问题具体分析不能一概而论,不过要是讨论再深入一些就更好了。另外，论证过程有点混乱，有点自相矛盾，有些地方又过于绝对。另外，我把你不当的用词和句子HIGHLIGHT了。 此致，水平有限，欢迎回拍！https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1066428-1-1.html（ISSUE48）

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2# nannan6474
要淡定哦~祝你高频 祝你阅卷人心情好~

nannan6474UID: 2612196

50"In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach."
At first glimpse, the speaker's statement seems to be sound, considering that this approach links the practical use with the professor's work in the university. However, further consideration reveals that this statement may lead to other problems that hinder the development of higher education.

Higher education refers to an educational level that follows the completion of the secondary education, such as high school and secondary school. Teaching, research, exacting applied work and social activities are involved in this phase of education. For most people, it is the first opportunity, may as well as the last one, to be schooled about their professional field, which will be a decisive factor of the students' future career. No doubt that the education of students should be the focus of the university or the college.这段和主题关系好像不到，跑题了，而且还没例子

From the definition, it is very clear that vocational training is an essential part in this education level. It is generally believed that faculty who are responsible for such training, should have an insight into the precedent achievements as well as the current trend in their field. Therefore, this proves the value to send faculty to work outside. Since knowledge is being upgraded at such a fast speed,what the faculty teach and research may not catch up the developing pace. So being a member of the working force, he can sense the future of his discipline, check the practical value of his current research, compare the outcomes with the results in real world and revise what he will infuse to the young generation. This case is specially obvious in the management school. Common sense tells us that the problems in a real company are more complex than the ones described in the textbooks. This is resulted from the variation of employees, the fast changing market situation and accidental events which can cause a chaos to the company. Without being part of this emergency, how can a professor educate his students to be prepared and cope with such cases? In a word, a teacher who has never been a leader is not eligible to teach others how to lead.
好像还是没例子，很空洞啊
However, it may be too assertive to get the conclusion that we should sent all faculty to the companies outside, because the nature of some subjects determines that there is no need to have a close connect with the society. Fundamental research subjects, such as mathmatics（mathematics）, physics , philosophy and so on, require the researchers to spend numerous time being alone, analyzing and thinking. Being in the working place can be no good to their researches and teaching methods, even does harm to it. To make matters worse, if we emphasis too much on the working experience, no wonder the faculty will lower their teaching performance, the most vital part in the role as an educator. This can be easily understood that everyone's energy is somewhat limited, so the part devoted to the par-time job can be never returned to the role in the university campus. Thus our students become the victims of such phenonmenon. To an extreme degree, no one will care about the students' performs but concentrate on the tasks outside, which may provide these faculty more handsome salaries.
其实我个人认为你这段可以拆开两段写，第二段就可以删去了
Given this fact that higher education can be regarded as a switching point of one's life, our faculty should realize their responsibility to every student. Admittedly, both teachers and students can benefit to this decision, we must be aware there exists a balance point. If overdone, it will contravene
the essence of education.
论述得还是比较详细的，但是就是不够具体，还有，我晚了拍你的作文了，不好意思