issue11[big fish]-----by tc1220

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帮忙看看，有个例子一下子想不到。。。有建议吗？
11"All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems."

As entering the 21st century, special phenomenon may be perceived in our daily life that more and more parents send their children to the international school. They contend that the international school has an edge over indigenous school in terms of teachers, environment and culture. More importantly, international school satisfies the international standard, which has been considered one of the most trends in the modern society. Hence, the idea that building a global university support by nations has been proposed, which aims to solve the social problem in the world. From my perspective, it is meaningful and necessary to develop such a university.

To begin with, the global university would contribute to the solution of world’s social problems effectively. To illustrate, students in the global university come from different parts of the world with different social backgrounds and diverse cultures. Thus, studying in the global university could help student form the habit of global outlook in solving problems. Compared with the general university, students in the global university would consider more about the global social with less nationalism. For example, when the world’s finance crisis happened, it seems that every nation attempted to go out of its shadow as soon as possible for itself instead of going out with mutual help. Perhaps the global university could stand out and provide a better plan which has taken all nations into consideration with least recovery period. In addition, international drug transaction and terrorism are two of the most persistent social problems nowadays. Global university could act as a beacon that directs the settlement of these problems peacefully.
Since the global university is supported by all nations, the strategies proposed by it will be convincing and feasible with which we are capable of solving the world’s most persistent problems.

However, such a satifying university, on the other hand, reveals its difficulty in establishment. First of all, this global university is built on the basis of the supports of all nations. As we all known that the financial and political situations of nations varies dissimilarly and it looks an arduous project to sign a contract for all nations. It seems more impossible in some African countries where people suffered hunger, floods and diseases are willing to raise money to build an university. It is reported that 40 to 70% of the African population lives in slums, so how can they donate money for the so called global university.

Furthermore, enforcement may also encounter obstacles in solving the social problems. In a sense, the natural of human is greedy. Thereupon, every country hopes to obtain benefits from the global university. Specifically, they want this university to solve more problems for themselves and the egregious conflicts may occur among countries gradually which would make the global university hard to maintain.

Fortunately, many famous universities in the world are playing the role of global university such as Harvard, Stanford and Cambridge. By receiving excellent international students every year, they have cultivated massive talents with global perspectives. 找个 这样的人…

In conclusion, the global university supported by all nations would definitely provide approaches to tackle the world’s social problems, however, with difficulties in construction and enforcements. Maybe this global university could be built by some significant countries like G20 which aims to promote the development of world and benefit mankind.

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“Hence, the idea that building a global university support by nations has been proposed...."这句的语法上有点问题
“To illustrate, students in the global university come from different parts of the world ....”这句语法也有点问题
“ As we all known ”用的不对哦~
我觉得那个例子你可以举美国各任总统，因为他们大多数都是哈佛毕业的，而且身为美国总统，为世界事务所做的贡献也是很大的。
我觉得你的作文整体上来说还是不错的，我觉得比我写得好多了~O(∩_∩)O~你的行文很通顺，链接很好，感觉很舒服，但是我觉得有一点不好的就是在你的文章开头表明你自己的立场的时候，你是全部支持的，但是到了你的文章中间，感觉又说这所大学的建立有些问题，我感觉似乎有点偏离你的立场，如果把开头稍微改改，我觉得会更好~O(∩_∩)O~
加油~