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gorbyUID: 2730851

51"Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
论点：作者的观点太过绝对。
学生的兴趣和个体的需求的确是使教育更有效的重要方面。当因为兴趣而学的时候，学生更更加主动，他是带着兴趣和疑问进行着每一步的。而针对个体需求的设计，学习之余让学生看到教育的实用性，也令学生更加有成就感。
影响教育有效性的因素有很多，个体需求和学生兴趣只是一个一个方面。教育是双方向的，外界来说，老师的授课方式，长辈的鼓励。而学生来说，个人的志向。这些因素都能起到很大的影响。

     Since children are the future of our world,education nowadays is becoming a big problem which draws more and more attention from all over the society.To make education be truly effective,the speaker asserts that the only way is to design education in the way meeting the individual needs and interests of each student.I agree with his statement insofar as the extent that individual needs and interests of each student do exert an influence on education while there are also other factors such as encouragement from parents and teachers' teaching style.
     Admittedly ,students' interests and individual needs do relate to the problem tightly that whether education is truly effective.Different from being compelled by teachers and parents,students are more eager to learn knowledge as a result of being interesting in it.Consider the situation that every step of education is designed to meet students' interest,so they are easily to be diligent and insist to come over different difficulties.Being curious about the origin of man,Darwin dropped out of the medical school and insist doing researches for years.This insistent student achieved his success finally which almost influenced everyone's mind in the world .And now there is even a city named with his name in Australia.As well as interest,individual needs of students also is an important factor.They may regard what they learn are useful if education is designed to meet individual needs.After solving an task related to themselves,they may be proud of themselves for this. It is the best courage for the children which will make them study with another problem.

     However,the speaker's assertion that design education in the way which meet individual needs and interests of each student is the only way to make education truly effective is poorly support by empirical evidence.Other factors also play key roles in effective education.Education is an interaction between teachers ,parents and students.Students is the key word for the reason that education is nothing without of them.To attract student's attention so the speaker suggests better education in that way while he or she ignored other factors such as  strong ambitions of some students.For example ,Martin Luther King study hard for his strong religious conviction but only for his interests or individual needs.On the other side,a teacher who has more patience and parents who are not  stingy in giving encouragements is much more help to the children's effective education.With her patient teacher Annie Sullivan's encouragement, Helen Keller succeed in making great accomplishment that even a person who have sound body can not achieve.

     To sum up, the speaker make his conclusion in a hurry and his suggestion needs to be improved.It is necessary for us to better education style to meet students' individual needs and personal interests.But we may also pay attention to other factors such as teachers' encouragement and student's ambitions which related to the children's education.

LaoZZZZZUID: 2747300

Since children are the future of our world, education nowadays is becoming a big problem which draws more and more attention from all over the society. To make education be \删 truly effective, the speaker asserts that the only way is to design education in the way meeting the individual needs and interests of each student.I agree with his statement insofar as the extent that individual needs and interests of each student do exert an influence on education while there are also other factors such as encouragement from parents and teachers' \删 teaching style.
     Admittedly ,students' interests and individual needs do \删 relates to the problem tightly that whether education is truly effective. Different from being compelled by teachers and parents, students are more eager to learn knowledge as a result of(不太地道) being interesting in it（driven by interests）. Consider the situation that every step of education is designed to meet students' interest,so they are easily to be diligent and insist to come over\overcome different difficulties. Being curious about the origin of man, Darwin dropped out of the medical school and insist (on) doing researches\research(do research是词组) for years. This insistent\resolute student achieved his success finally which almost influenced everyone's mind in the world .And now there is even a city named with his name in Australia. As well as interest, individual needs of students(有点啰嗦了) also is an important factor.They may regard what they learn are useful if education is designed to meet individual needs. After solving an task related to themselves, they may be proud of themselves for this. It is the best courage for the children which will make\courage them study with another problem.
     However, the speaker's assertion that design education in the way which meet individual needs and interests of each student is the only way to make education truly effective is poorly support by empirical evidence. Other factors also play key roles in effective education. Education is an interaction between teachers ,parents and students. Students is the key word for the reason that education is nothing without of them. To attract student's attention so the speaker suggests better education in that way while he or she ignored other factors such as  strong ambitions of some students （删）.For example ,Martin Luther King study hard for his strong religious conviction but only for his interests or individual needs. On the other side, a teacher who has more patience and parents who are not  stingy in giving encouragements is much more help to the children's effective education .With\Thanks to her patient teacher Annie Sullivan's encouragement, Helen Keller succeed in making great accomplishment that even a person who have sound body can not achieve.

     To sum up, the speaker make his conclusion in a hurry and his suggestion needs to be improved.It is necessary for us to better education style to meet students' individual needs and personal interests. But we may\should also pay attention to other factors such as teachers' encouragement and student's ambitions which related to the children's education.

总体上逻辑是对的，但是最好中间加一段过渡注重学生自身特点和兴趣的坏处，然后再过渡到其他因素。
和3-12广州的一样，词汇和句式过于简单，希望多积累自己的漂亮词汇和句式，还有有些词不太地道。

prettywraithUID: 197049

   Since children are the future of our world, education nowadays is becoming a big problem which draws more and more attention from all over the society. To make education be truly effective, the speaker asserts that the only way is to design education in the way meeting the individual needs and interests of each student. I agree with his statement insofar as the extent that individual needs and interests of each student do exert an influence on education while there are also other factors such as encouragement from parents and teachers' teaching style.（主题句后半部分有些歧义，other factors 至少应该加上限定词）令外注意题目是说只有。。。。的时候教育才真正有效，这里并没有问你是否有其他因素影响教育，要谈的话，你也应该是从这些因素如何使教育更有效的角度来谈。

     Admittedly, students' interests and individual needs do relate to the problem tightly that whether education is truly effective. Different from being compelled by teachers and parents, students are more eager to learn knowledge as a result of being interesting in it. Consider（considering） the situation that every step of education is designed to meet students' interest, so they are easily to be diligent and insist to come over different difficulties. Being curious about the origin of man, Darwin dropped out of the medical school and insist（insisted） doing researches for years. This insistent student achieved his success finally which almost influenced everyone's mind in the world .And now there is even a city named with （named after）his name in Australia. As well as interest, individual needs of students also is an important factor. （as well as应放到中间吧？）They may regard what they learn are useful （这里是两个独立的从句么？）if education is designed to meet individual needs. After solving an task related to themselves, they may be proud of themselves for this. It is the best courage for the children which will make them study with another problem.

     However, the speaker's assertion that design education in the way which meet individual needs and interests of each student is the only way to make education truly effective is poorly support （supported）by empirical evidence（empirical evidence有的好像有点问题？另外这句有点歧义，有这些例子没有很好支持这个的观点的意思）. Other factors also play key roles in effective education. Education is an interaction between teachers , parents and students. Students is （are）the key word for the reason that education is nothing without of them. To attract student's attention so the speaker suggests better education in that way while he or she ignored other factors such as  strong ambitions of some students. For example ,Martin Luther King study hard for his strong religious conviction but only for his interests or individual needs. On the other side, a teacher who has more patience and parents who are not  stingy in giving encouragements is much more help to the children's effective education. With her patient teacher Annie Sullivan's encouragement, Helen Keller succeed in making great accomplishment that even a person who have sound body can not achieve.（开头内容和后面感觉有些脱节，后面只是强调鼓励的重要性，没扣题；详细讲我开头段的说明）

     To sum up, the speaker make（makes） his conclusion in a hurry and his suggestion needs to be improved. It is necessary for us to better education style to meet students' individual needs and personal interests. But we may also pay attention to other factors such as teachers' encouragement and student's ambitions which related to the children's education.

看到结尾段比较确认你写的有点偏题了。

另外文中语法注意一下尤其是主谓一致问题。

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