【Big Fish】3月2日argument237-By Edwardlzk

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT237 - The following appeared as part of an article in a local Beauville newspaper.

"According to a government report, last year the city of Dillton reduced its corporate tax rate by 15 percent; at the same time, it began offering relocation grants and favorable rates on city utilities to any company that would relocate to Dillton. Within 18 months, two manufacturing companies moved to Dillton, where they employ a total of 300 people. Therefore, the fastest way for Beauville to stimulate economic development and hence reduce unemployment is to provide tax incentives and other financial inducements that encourage private companies to relocate here."
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TIME: 00:40:00
DATE: 2010-3-2 15:27:44

In the article of local Breauville newspaper, the author aims to convince us that Breauville should promote the tax incentives in order to stimulate economic development and thus reduce unemployment. To support his/her recommendation, a similar and successful example of the city Dillton is attached to the article. The recommendation seems advisable, however, after scrutinizing it, several critical flaws can be found to undermine the lines of reasoning when the author tries to prove it.

In the first place, the author unfairly attribute the heating economics and reducing unemployment to these new incentives that taken place in the city of Dillton. There should be many factors that may influence the economics and the job market such as some certain holidays and the construction of a new airport, the corporate tax is not the only nor demanding factor that will not firmly decide how the development of economics would be. The author demonstrate that two companies have moved into the city after these incentives take effect aiming to certify that the new principle works perfectively, nevertheless, he is not succeed in doing so. The two companies do not certainly means a raise in number, it may be more years before, so from my consideration, no compares no judgments. Although it is really a boom in the number of companies, the evidence cited in the article also shows that 300 people is employed, which can not be a tremendous improvement in certain big city as New York. Unless these possibilities are proved unreasonable, it is still vague for us to convince the assumption.

Secondly, the author commits the fallacy of false analogy. In the article, he/she believes that Breauville city can be compared with Dillton in all aspects while no substantial evidence is given in the article. As discussed above, many factors will influence the effect of these incentives, maybe the problems lay in Breauville are not the high tax but the environment, the level of education, and so forth. Without taking these factors into consideration, the conclusion is unreliable.

Finally, no evidence shows that Breauville city is suffered in a glooming economics and low employment. Even so, the author fails to consider the cost of such incentives is affordable and acceptable, or may it exist a better solution to the problems that will provide a win-win situation. After such consideration, we can conclude that the suggestion can be advisable and suitable to Breauville.

In sum, the recommendation rests on certain unreliable assumptions that render it unconvincing as it stands. To rectify these flaws, the author should provide more evidence to illustrate why the experience of Dillton can apply to Breaucille city and whether exist other alternatives that may also result in the improvements with lower cost.

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In the article of local Breauville newspaper, the author aims to convince us that Breauville should promote the tax incentives in order to stimulate economic development and thus reduce unemployment. To support his/her recommendation, a similar and successful example of the city Dillton is attached to the article. The recommendation seems advisable, however, after scrutinizing it, several critical flaws can be found to undermine the lines of reasoning （第一次见到这个用法，是在范文里看到过的么？）when the author tries to prove it.

In the first place, the author unfairly attribute the heating economics and reducing unemployment to these new incentives that taken place in the city of Dillton. There should be many factors that may influence the economics and the job market such as some certain holidays and the construction of a new airport, the corporate tax is not the only nor demanding factor that will not firmly decide how the development of economics would be. The author demonstrate that two companies have moved into the city after these incentives take effect aiming to certify that the new principle works perfectively, nevertheless, he is not succeed in doing so. The two companies do not certainly means a raise in number, it may be more years before, so from my consideration, no compares no judgments. Although it is really a boom in the number of companies, the evidence cited in the article also shows that 300 people is employed, which can not be a tremendous improvement in certain big city as New York. Unless these possibilities are proved unreasonable, it is still vague for us to convince the assumption.
（本段包括两条：1，Dillton的经验并不能说明城市的经济发展只依赖于税收优惠和财政支持，而是还有其它因素。
      2，两家公司的到来和300人的就业并不是一个有意义的数据。
我想说的是，关于第一条，你在论证的时候说的是“D市的经济发展和就业增加是可能由其它原因上升的”并且举出了一些其它因素。 那么，你先就承认了，它的经济和就业形式都在往好的方向发展。那么第二条又说，它的发展实际上不是有意义的发展。这样会不会有点不太合理呢。 我觉得，第一条如果换成认证“那两家公司的到来以及随之而来的300人就业，其原因，并不是只有税收和财政政策，而是还有其它因素，Such as ````"   更好，   第二条再说，其实就算承认他们有是由于政策原因来，2家公司和300人的就业也说明不了什么问题。   你觉得呢？）

Secondly, the author commits the fallacy of false analogy（好句子）. In the article, he/she believes that Breauville city can be compared with Dillton in all aspects while no substantial evidence is given in the article. As discussed above, many factors will influence the effect of these incentives, maybe the problems lay in Breauville are not the high tax but the environment, the level of education, and so forth. Without taking these factors into consideration, the conclusion is unreliable.      （good)

Finally, no evidence shows that Breauville city is suffered in a glooming economics and low employment. Even so, the author fails to consider the cost of such incentives is affordable and acceptable, or may it exist a better solution to the problems that will provide a win-win situation(句型不错）. After such consideration, we can conclude that the suggestion can be advisable and suitable to Breauville. （如果可以的话，这段还可以展开。也是一个不错的点）

In sum, the recommendation rests on certain unreliable assumptions that render it unconvincing as it stands. To rectify these flaws, the author should provide more evidence to illustrate why the experience of Dillton can apply to Breaucille city and whether exist other alternatives that may also result in the improvements with lower cost.


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