[big fish]-3月2日-Argument273-by dgxy08

dgxy08UID: 2599486

The following appeared as part of an article in a local Beauville newspaper.

"According to a government report, last year the city of Dillton reduced its corporate tax rate by 15 percent;at the same time, it began offering relocation grants and favorable rates on city utilities to any company that would relocate to Dillton. Within 18 months, two manufacturing companies moved to Dillton, where they employ a total of 300 people. Therefore, the fastest way for Beauville to stimulate economic development and hence reduce unemployment is to provide tax incentives and other financial inducements that encourage private companies to relocate here."

The article assumes that Providing tax incentives and other financial inducements that encourage private companies to relocate Beauville can contribute to the economic development of Beauville. To bolster it, the author cites the example of Dillton who reduced its corporate tax rate and offer relocation grants and favorable rates on city utilities. Besides, the author also points out that two manufacturing companies relocate there. However, careful examnation of this evidence reveals that it lends little reliable to support the argument.

First of all, the author unfairly claims that two manufacturing companies moved to Dillton duo to the measures Dillton has taken. Nevertheless, there is no evidence to justify the fact that it is the measures which Dillton has taken that result in the relocation of the two manufacturing companies.It is entirely possible that in oder to reduce the trasportion cost of their products the two companies decided to relocate there. Without elinmating this possiblity, the author's argument can be rejected out of hand.

Secondly, it is possible that the police taken by Beauville would not suffice to ensure similar results in Dillon elsewhere results from other factors such as different economic enveroment between two cities,that might have contribute to the reloction of two companies. Given this scenario, the author's conclusion cannnot be taken seriously.

Thirdly, in conluding that to develop the economy of Beauville providing tax incentives and other financial inducements is a fastes way, the author asserts that the measures are nesscary and sufficient for this. However, the author provides no valid evidence to substantiate either assumpion. Lacking evidence, it is just as that developing the tourism industry would be equally or more sufficient.

In sum, the argument is indefensible as it stands. To better surppot the argument the athour should supply more information bout the development of Dillten. Also useful would be any inf

wowoyuweiweiUID: 2754055

The article assumes that Providing tax incentives and other financial inducements that（can） encourage private companies to relocate （in）Beauville can（去掉） contribute（-ing） to the economic development of Beauville（略有重复）. To bolster it, the author cites the example of Dillton who（which） reduced its corporate tax rate and offer relocation grants and favorable rates on city utilities. Besides, the author also points out that two manufacturing companies relocate there. However, careful examnation of this evidence reveals that it lends little reliable to support the argument.

First of all, the author unfairly claims that two manufacturing companies moved to Dillton duo（due） to the measures Dillton has taken. Nevertheless, there is no evidence to justify the fact that it is the measures which Dillton has taken that result in the relocation of the two manufacturing companies. It is entirely possible that in oder（order） to reduce the trasportion(transportation) cost of their products the two companies decided to relocate there.（其他原因，比如市场，资源等等，都可以说说） Without elinmating（considering） this possiblity（possibility）, the author's argument can be rejected out of hand.

Secondly, it is possible that the police taken by Beauville would not suffice to ensure similar results in Dillon elsewhere results from other factors such as different economic enveroment （environment）between （the） two cities, that might have contribute to the reloction（relocation） of two companies. Given this scenario, the author's conclusion cannot be taken seriously.（具体是什么可以说说）

Thirdly, in concluding that to develop the economy of Beauville providing tax incentives and other financial inducements is a fastest way, the author asserts that the measures are necesscary and sufficient for this. However, the author provides no valid evidence to substantiate either assumption. Lacking evidence, it is just as that developing the tourism industry would be equally or more sufficient.（这个想法好）

In sum, the argument is indefensible as it stands. To better support the argument the author should supply more information bout (about?) the development of Dillten. Also useful would be any inf (多练习练习就能写完了，加油)

很抱歉，最近很忙，没能及时拍文。
整体来说不错，问题找得很准。
小建议：拼写什么的要注意，ets还是会根据这些小细节而扣分的。每一段可以说的具体些， 这样字数也能上去，而且说的更完整。
加油