[big fish]-3月4日-issue51-by dgxy08

dgxy08UID: 2599486

TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
WORDS: 300
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010-3-4 21:48:52

Education has been a hot topic today, when more and more adults concern on the education of their children. Some accede that interest is the best teacher for our student, while others claim that standard education should be built.
After careful consideration, I disagree the assertion advocated by the author that the best way to supply students education is to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.

First of all, when we consider the meaning of education, we learn that education is a process by which human transmits their knowledge, skill and values. In order to complete the task of transmitting knowledge, skill and values, education should aim at moral and faultless.

Admittedly, interest would encourage children to find new problems and then search the results, through which new knowledge will be discovered. It is wildly known that Faraday who majored in chemistry when he in college became the famous electrical professor after he found that his interest is on electrical area. It is the interests that guided Faraday obtain the success on academic.

However, in order to kick the goal of education we have to supply children lots of fundment knowledge which will contribute to the their development.
We should provide their with moral knowledge that some may think it will not contribute to the development of academic. Take edision for example, we all know that he is a famous inventor and successful bussiniman. However, because of greed of money , he did not support the alternating current which turn to be the best way to transmit power, even if he know that fact.

In sum, I believe moral and faculties are necessary. It is entirely possible that
some one still disagree with my argument. Nevertheless,more and more people will accept my view after reading my argument.

jjooyyUID: 2704028

Education has been a hot topic today, when more and more（可替换为an increasingly number of） adults concern on the education of their children. Some accede that interest is the best teacher for our(这里用our 是不是太突然了) student, while others claim that standard education should be built.

After careful consideration, I disagree the assertion advocated by the author that the best way to supply students education is to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.

First of all, when we consider the meaning of education, we learn that education is a process by which human transmits their knowledge, skills and values. In order to complete the task of transmitting knowledge, skill and values, education should aim at moral and faultless（faultless和moral不是很好的并列关系）.

Admittedly, interest would encourage children to find new problems and then search the results, through which new knowledge will be discovered. It is wildly known that Faraday who majored in chemistry when he in college became the famous electrical professor after he found that his interest is on electrical area. （语法似乎不错，总觉得中间应该断句）It is the interests that guided Faraday obtain the success on academic.

However, in order to kick the goal of education we have to supply children lots of fundment knowledge which will contribute to the their development.
We should provide their（them） with moral knowledge that some may think it will not contribute to the development of academic. Take edision（Edison） for example, we all know that he is a famous inventor and successful bussiniman(businessman). However, because of greed of money , he did not support the alternating current which turn (out) to be the best way to transmit power, even if he know that fact.

In sum, I believe moral and faculties（faculties or faultless?） are necessary. （有点偏主题）It is entirely possible that
some one still disagree with my argument. Nevertheless,more and more people will accept my view after reading my argument.（这两句是不是没必要？）

先声明，这是我第一次改别人作文，有什么不对的，咱们可以讨论讨论
感觉文章有些偏题了，moral and faultless education 以及interests 都没有明确显示 是不是individual education, 没有扣题吧。。。

弱弱的说一句，300词 可以的话 多凑点字啊。。。
红字为好词好句 蓝字为建议