issue144 新手第一次写作 有拍必回~~同求评价~

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TOPIC: ISSUE144 - "It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."

*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.
WORDS: 721          TIME: unlimited          DATE: 2010-3-5 12:13:31



Is it merely artists that give society something of lasting value? The speaker claims so. I agree with the speaker insofar as the artists contribute directly to creating art and hence act the most important role in giving the society something of lasting value. However, in my opinion, critics are also indispensable in the process as they can help discover and popularize the art.

Obviously, Inspired by their own imagination and creativity,
artists originate many forms of art which carry great value to our society. Trough history, we can see numerous successful artists whose works are of enduring value and have been appreciated and highly praised by many generations. Among them, we see Leonardo da Vinci, who left us fascinating paintings such as MonaLisa and The Last Supper; we see Chopin, who gave us compositions of a fantastic romantic style; and we also see Mark Twain, who created the novel Adventures of Huckleberry Finn and was lauded as the " greatest American humorist of his age ". No one can ever deny their contributions in presenting the society something of lasting value.



So what about critics' work? I concede that critics' work is not that creative and is always indirect to produce value. Moreover, sometimes critics may even make narrow comments on a new form of art and thus impede the development of the art. When pop music first came to China, many Chinese critics held the opinion that the style of pop music was so contrary to the style of traditional Chinese music that it may jeopardize the aesthetic of Chinese people. Being affected by the critics' comments, many Chinese people of that time refused to accept this new music style. Though later proved to be wrong, the critics' negative opinion do impede the prosperity of pop music in China for a long time.



However, as far as I am concerned, in most cases critics' works are positive to develop a good art and are almost indispensable as they help people better understand a certain art and make the art prevailing. For example, we common people sometimes find it difficult to understand some artists' works such as the paintings of Van Gogh. Without critics' help, one may be confused by the meaning of the paintings such as Sunflowers. For another example, attributed to Cao Xueqin who earned the reputation of " China's Shakespeare ", Dream of the Red Chamber is a masterpiece of Chinese vernacular literature and one of China's Four Great Classic Novels. Cao wrote his master piece hundreds of years ago in Qing Dynasty. As the book contained contents that revealed the darkness of feudalism, it was an official banned book at that time and the value of that book has long been neglected by Chinese people. Fortunately, when it comes to the 19th century, more and more Chinese critics found the great value of the book and aroused people's attention to it. Now the study of that book has developed into a discipline named Redlogy and people all over the world appreciate the lasting value of it. If its
value was not discovered by critics, the ignorance of the master piece would maintain for long or even forever.



Moreover, critics can improve the work of artists, too. Before artists establish their reputation, their valuable works may also be ignored by most of us. Critics can discover the potential value of certain works and draw people's attention towards them thus encourage the artists to do better with enthusiasm. To give an example, one need to look no further than Jin Yong, who is an excellent fiction writer in China. Creating a new genre of Chinese literature called WuXia, he has a wide spread following in Chinese-speaking areas. His first works were published on Ming Pao( a Chinese newspaper ) and caused little attention by the masses. However, some critics spoke highly of his creativity and appreciated the attracting plots of his works. Inspired by the comments of critics, Jin went further in the new genre and created many better frictions in the following years. Eventually, his works earned him high prises and his frictions are now treasured by most Chinese people.



In sum, while artists originate art of lasting value, critics' work should not be ignored as they contribute to discovering the value of the art, making the art more understandable and improving artists' work.

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starshaneUID: 2616355

TOPIC: ISSUE144 - "It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."

*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.
WORDS: 721          TIME: unlimited          DATE: 2010-3-5 12:13:31



Is it merely artists that give society something of lasting value? The speaker claims so. I agree with the speaker insofar as the artists contribute directly to creating art and hence act the most important role in giving the society something of lasting value. However, in my opinion, critics are also indispensable in the process as they can help discover and popularize the art.
总的论点是“批评家在创造恒久价值的过程中是必不可少的，因为他们有助于发现和普及艺术”
Obviously, Inspired by their own imagination and creativity,
artists originate many forms of art which carry great value to our society. Trough history, we can see numerous successful artists whose works are of enduring value and have been appreciated and highly praised by many generations. Among them, we see Leonardo da Vinci, who left us fascinating paintings such as MonaLisa and The Last Supper; we see Chopin, who gave us compositions of a fantastic romantic style; and we also see Mark Twain, who created the novel Adventures of Huckleberry Finn and was lauded as the " greatest American humorist of his age ". No one can ever deny their contributions in presenting the society something of lasting value.
这里主要想说一下结构的问题，我个人认为在第二段出现如此大篇幅的“让步句”不是很合理，在实际考试中花费118个词（近1/3篇幅）做让步显得有点浪费。 我觉得解决方法是简化句子结构，比如说“we remember Leonardo and his Mona Lisa, we remember Chopin and his ……we remember ……”这样就简单带过大量例子。无非是要说明艺术家们贡献很大嘛。

So what about critics' work? I concede that critics' work is not that creative and is always indirect to produce value. Moreover, sometimes critics may even make narrow comments on a new form of art and thus impede the development of the art. When pop music first came to China, many Chinese critics held the opinion that the style of pop music was so contrary to the style of traditional Chinese music that it may jeopardize the aesthetic of Chinese people. Being affected by the critics' comments, many Chinese people of that time refused to accept this new music style. Though later proved to be wrong, the critics' negative opinion did impede the prosperity of pop music in China for a long time.
这第三段120多字居然还是让步，即在说批评家的反面，直到现在楼主都没有把观点正面摆出来，我觉得算是一个比较大的失误……而这一失误大概主要是由于没有限时造成的，容易天马行空写一堆，很久都切入不到主题……

However, as far as I am concerned, in most cases critics' works are positive to develop a good art and are almost indispensable as they help people better understand a certain art and make the art prevailing. For example, we common people sometimes find it difficult to understand some artists' works such as the paintings of Van Gogh. Without critics' help, one may be confused by the meaning of the paintings such as Sunflowers. 梵高的例子我也用了……不过是完全相反的论点……For another example, attributed to Cao Xueqin who earned the reputation of " China's Shakespeare ", Dream of the Red Chamber is a masterpiece of Chinese vernacular literature and one of China's Four Great Classic Novels. Cao wrote his master piece hundreds of years ago in Qing Dynasty. As the book contained contents that revealed the darkness of feudalism, it was an official banned book at that time and the value of that book has long been neglected by Chinese people. Fortunately, when it comes to the 19th century, more and more Chinese critics found the great value of the book and aroused people's attention to it. Now the study of that book has developed into a discipline named Redlogy and people all over the world appreciate the lasting value of it. If its value was not discovered by critics, the ignorance of the master piece would maintain for long or even forever.
我终于看到了第一个观点，就是“批评家”有助于帮助人们更好地理解作品。但这两个例子我觉得都可以作为反面论证用，即“当代的批评家往往fail to理解伟大的作品而导致作品被埋没多年”。

Moreover, critics can improve the work of artists, too. Before artists establish their reputation, their valuable works may also be ignored by most of us. Critics can discover the potential value of certain works and draw people's attention towards them， thus encourage the artists to do better with enthusiasm. To give an example, one need to look no further than Jin Yong, who is an excellent fiction writer in China. Creating a new genre of Chinese literature called Wu Xia,是不是可以用“swordsmen’s world”比较好理解…… he has a wide spread following readers? in Chinese-speaking areas. His first works were published on Ming Pao( a Chinese newspaper ) and caused little attention by the masses. However, some critics spoke highly of his creativity and appreciated the attracting plots of his works. Inspired by the comments of critics, Jin went further in the new genre and created many better frictions in the following years. Eventually, his works earned him high prises and his frictions are now treasured by most Chinese people.

In sum, while artists originate art of lasting value, critics' work should not be ignored as they contribute to discovering the value of the art, making the art more understandable and improving artists' work.
我看完最后一段发现你是不是有点偏题啊，题目是说“艺术家创造恒久价值”，你没有从根本上反驳这个观点啊，只是说批评家也有贡献，我觉得还不如写成赞成这个观点然后以“批评家的贡献”作为让步…………

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