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1# beenused
Technologies, broadly defined the innovation of tools and machines, have long been considered as one of the determinants of social productivity ever since the Industry Revolution. Take a glance at this world village, there is no daunt that technologies has (have)greatly influence
(on ) our society by enormous aspects such as social customs, social construction and social system, however, technologies have not yet, also should never expand its influence on ethics. (这句话太好了~~学习一下)Our lives can do benefit from the convenience together come with technologies but never should our minds be controlled by that technologies.倒装句的恰当使用
Admittedly, Technologies have truly effect(effected) our social customs in so many ways, such as communication, entertainment, work, that hardly can we all list them up(这个定语从句好). Take communication as an example, two thousand years ago we use(过去式) horse to send our long distance (mainly in Euro and Asia) message which takes almost several days while often missing in the journey;(今昔对比)(时间的渐进) a hundred years, after the invention of telegraph, people can communicate throughout the boarder of nation and boundary in a few minutes; when time goes in the 21st century, the world run(单三加s) into Information Highway Age, you can connect anyone at anytime or anyplace just by turn(turning) on your computer and surf (surfing)the internet. The innovation of technologies in communication have brings the world a closer place, while the amusement of the citizens in the world village has also greatly changed. If kids in the Middle Age were asked about their part-time activities, properly the answer is prayer or farming, now kids in this modern age are attracted by computer games and society are making effort to help them abandon it, what seems to unbelievable image, however is the fact. I think that is the fascination of technologies, to make dreams come true, to make impossible into facts. So if technologies have such impact on our daily life, it surely determines our social custom.
The second to indicate is that ethics the summit of social class and(and是与什么并列的?前面好像不是一句话啊)
should be prevented from the influence of technologies for if ethics is determined by technologies we may in danger of losing our soul. Never has the quality of our lives been so comfort; never has our living materials been such abundant, however spiritual realm have dropped into hell, After the Industry Revolution, Human in this have changed, the industrialists tried everything to expand the workers’ working time with fewer money; the kings fight for colonies and take negroes in the Africa to America to cultivate the farm and mine gold; the terrorists attact the leaders at the same time (连词) injure the normal people. Anytime someone in someplace are (去掉) prepare(加s) his or her conspiracy, so leave(leaving) our ethics a free place without disturb(加ing) is pretty essential.(可以写的再详细些)
To sum up, due to the above mentioned analysis and reasons, which sometimes correlate with each other to generate an integrate whole and thus become more convincing than any single of them, we may be comfortable to say that technologies, without any daunt, is one of the determinants that construct our social custom, while ethics should never be polluted by its effect.
我觉得你写的文章,思路清晰有例证有对比
给我很大启发~谢谢你
希望你在考场也能如此发挥
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