【Big Fish】3月8日Argument203-By Bruce

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    The auther of the argument explained that the small, noprofit hospital in the town of Saluda provided better treatment that the large, for-profit hospitals by indicating the comparison bewteen those two hospias about their convalescence period, cure rate, exployees numbers and complaints.

    The longer recovery period in large hospital may not indicate the a poor efficiency of the hospitals but may be the more serious illness of the patients their. Therefore, the auther's reason is not quite cogent to convince us in this point.
As for the cure rate, it is obvious that larger, for-profit hospitals attract more patients, especiall thos who are suffering serious sickness. Thereby, the cure rate cannot be as high as those in small hospitals where most of the patients there are just got a cold.

    The auther also cite the number of employees per patient to convince. However, it is still not quite convincing becuase he neglect the quality of them. Large and pro-profit hospitals can provide higher salary for their employees, thereby attracting more excellent docters and increase their ability to cure the patients. Instead, no mater how many doctors are there in the small hospitals, some of them maybe inept and do no contribution to their hospitals.

    Becuase larger hospitals always locate the downtwon, where the government is more tolerant for the patients to grumble and the policies there is more open for the public to understand the exact number of complains. It is possible that there are more underground complains in small hospitals.

    To sum up, because of the auther's neglection about the type of illness, the capability of the personnel and the environment of the hospital locate, the concludsion of the auther that larger hospitals is not as effective as samll one is doubtable.


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1# cloudwind-gre
楼主，应该看看范文，在开头中少一一句你不同意作者观点的话，其次，段落过度，没有连接词。建议看看范文。多看几篇就知道Argument 怎么写了