几个关于Argu的结尾问题

kay8815UID: 2668603

1.写作文的时候是不是要注意替换？有时候是在用的很多，没有那么多给我替换怎么办呢？
2.A的结尾，要不要把如何让论述合理的理由都讲出来？例如

（In conclusion, the author's conclusion is unwarranted and hasty. To solidify it, the author should make a plausible research on the employment condition of the two colleges. In addition, the author should provide evidences to show that business courses and job counselors does play an essential role in helping students to find jobs. Without the information mentioned above, I would suspend my judgment on this reliability of this argument.）红色和绿色的部分分别是俩理由，也就是我反驳的点。需要这样写么？还是简单的几句话笼统讲讲结尾？
谢谢指教

adcolorsUID: 2256933

不敢指教，探讨一下，if I were u, I would rephrase like this:

To conclude ( to avoid use" conclusion" twice), first the author may need to provide detail information on ** and ** about the employment condition of the two colleges; second he need to prove business courses and job counselors do play an essential role in helping students to find jobs, to make the argument strong and solid.

感想：为了显得干脆简练，也为了节省时间，如果写结尾，就清晰指出需要提升之处，不用再做综合笼统的总结。

kay8815UID: 2668603

恩 谢谢楼上的 学习了~