Issue168,求拍～！

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TOPIC: ISSUE168 - "Critical judgment of work in any given field has little value unless it comes from someone who is an expert in that field."

Critical judgment, a subjective method to evaluate others' work, could present a varied view for artists, political, and scientists. However, whether the critic is worthy is not only dependent on whether one is professional, but also on whether one's work needs to follow others' advices.

First of all, there exist cases that opinions from all aspects, no matter whether they have a deep understanding or not, are valuable. In politics, voices from the common people present what they really need and want, thereby contributing to the establishment and improvement of policies. Further, politics are supposed to listen to various ideas and argument, so that they could conduct the most efficient and effective policies. Also, the jury in the court acts as a role to provide critical judgments about cases, representative what ordinary people feel about the laws and the sentences. After all, with a wide range of advices, one tends to think more critically and determines more scientifically.

Except those cases, in the areas that originality matters and others' suggestions are of little help, even the critic of experts is not that valuable. In such situations, Critical judgment from the professional seldom serves as a means to inspire one. Nor to mention the critics hardly understand what one attempt to express. For example, paintings, composing and essays are the expression of one's emotions and senses. Even learning what other artists and critics might evaluate the work, one cannot easily change the style and forms of his or her work. Only a long period of practice and life experience help improve the quality of one's work. Therefore, if one creates works that based on his or her feelings, there is little that critical judgments, even professional ones, can provide.

Finally, in the realms where professional guidance are necessary for further improvement, such as physics, chemical and mathematics, opinions from experts would avert one taking the wrong way and spending too much time on worthless parts. Scholars and researchers in such areas more or less experienced what newcomers are going through. They also establish a thorough and comprehensive view of the fields they devoted in. Undoubtedly, their judgments upon others’ work are objective and worthwhile. In this sense, cherishing experts' judgment is necessary in natural science and the like.

In summary, in natural science, newcomers should take critical judgments from the experts seriously in order to achieve his or her goal quickly; while in the fields where more focus is on originality, opinions even from the professional are not so helpful. And there are also some fields where all of the critiques are useful for one to make wise decisions.

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Critical judgment, a subjective method to evaluate others' work, could present a varied view for artists, political, and scientists. However, whether the critic is worthy is not only dependent(直接用depends吧？) on whether one is professional, but also on whether one's work needs to follow others' advices.
First of all, there exist cases that opinions from all aspects, no matter whether they have a deep understanding or not, are valuable. In politics, voices from the common people present what they really need and want, thereby contributing to the establishment and improvement of policies. Further, politics are supposed to listen to various ideas and argument, so that they could conduct the most efficient and effective policies. Also, the jury in the court acts as a role to provide critical judgments about cases, representative what ordinary people feel about the laws and the sentences. After all, with a wide range of advices, one tends to think more critically and determines more scientifically.（这段是说critical judgment不论是不是专家都有用）
Except those cases（用except的意思是，除了上面提到的就是这段提到的，那第三段往哪里放呢？）, in the areas that originality matters and others' suggestions are of little help, even the critic of experts is not that valuable. In such situations, Critical judgment from the professional seldom serves as a means to inspire one. Nor to mention the critics hardly understand what one attempt to express. For example, paintings, composing and essays are the expression of one's emotions and senses. Even learning what other artists and critics might evaluate the work, one cannot easily change the style and forms of his or her work. Only a long period of practice and life experience help improve the quality of one's work. Therefore, if one creates works that based on his or her feelings, there is（用which是不是好点？） little that critical judgments, even professional ones, can provide.（这段是说即使是专家也没用）
Finally, in the realms where professional guidance are necessary for further improvement, such as physics, chemical and mathematics, opinions from experts would avert one taking the wrong way and spending too much time on worthless parts. Scholars and researchers in such areas more or less experienced what newcomers are going through. They also establish a thorough and comprehensive view of the fields they devoted in. Undoubtedly, their judgments upon others’ work are objective and worthwhile. In this sense, cherishing experts' judgment is necessary in natural science and the like. （这段是说专家有用）
In summary, in natural science, newcomers should take critical judgments from the experts seriously in order to achieve his or her goal quickly; while in the fields where more focus is（去掉focus more） on originality, opinions even from the professional are not so helpful. And there are also some fields where all of the critiques are useful for one to make wise decisions.
第一，先说好处，语言流畅，每个段落的观点都能够得到比较有效的支撑。语言方面我就没怎么改，语法细节问题还是需要注意下的。
第二，为什么你的结尾把你的整个BODY发展的顺序打乱了呢？是不是因为你也看出你的正文中存在的这个缺点，我把每一段的意思概括出来，你应该可以看到三个部分互相独立，没有流畅的发展关系，而在结尾里，就顺了很多。先说专家critical judgment确实在很多领域是有用的，再说也有很多领域不只是专家的有用，最后是还有一种情况是大家都没用。这样发展起来也对应了题目，先是回应再是进一步提出反对观点，这样一来思路是不是清晰了很多？而不是头一句脚一句，一会有用一会没用，连自己也绕晕掉了，对不对？
第三，开头用了一个not only but also我觉得说的有些模糊，你用了很多whether,那么到底什么是“是”，什么是“否”呢？其实前面两个whether加在一起可以理解为，judgment是不是有用取决于这个人是不是专家，那么其实是肯定了题目的观点，专家才有用，那么，在正文中提到的不是专家也有用的观点又是从何而来呢？不如开头就直接写，专家和大众都有价值，只是要case by case 探讨，然后说，还有一些领域他们都没价值。你觉得呢？