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3.31 （07.11.11）
Advertisements make products seem better than they are.


Concerning my previous experience, I agree with the assertion that advertisements make products seem better than they are. Reasons can be illustrated as follow.

To begin with, advertisements emphasize the favorable information and fail to take into account the adverse message. The ultimate target of advertisements is to attract more consumers to buy their products and reap high profits. Consequently, the advertiser will suffer a loss Granted that their advertisements reveal the drawback of the products. Taking the solar car for example, its advertisements concentrate on energy conservation and environmental protection, which of course fascinate the consumer mostly. Unfortunately, such information as life span and power of machine, which is less competitive compare to other cars, will never be involved in the advertisements.

In addition, it’s generally accepted that advertisements always exaggerate the effect of the products for the sake of distinguishing themselves. The televisions of nowadays are filled with advertisements that overrate their product's real effect. The man who has a mouth of bright teeth in a toothpaste advertisement, for instance, maybe never uses this type of toothpaste at all. Moreover, I used to taking a kind of medicine, whose advertisement tells me that it works well for ninety percent of people, to give up smoking, only to find I am among those ten percent. In other words, the effect of the product in the advertisements seems much better than actually they are.

Finally, advertisement is infused with a spirit of the product brand, hence people who exposure in the circumstance of advertisement are influenced conscious and unconscious. Think about the case that when you are buying a car, you certainly choose Benz or BMW as in your mind these cars symbolize social status and success. What's more, advertisements let people buy those items they don't really need. The junk food such as fried chicken in KFC do no good for kids' fitness, but the advertisement never fail to fascinate kids, who in turn believe that these food are perfect and deserve for tasting.

Accordingly, due to analyze and reasons mentioned above, which sometimes intertwine to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive than any one of them, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that advertisements make products seem better than they are.

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4.1 （09.3.7）
It’s better to use own knowledge andexperience to solve question or ask other people for advice.

In nowadays and age, when facing withdilemma, people may handle by themselves while others may ask for advice, asfar as my experience and knowledge are concerned, the former one coincide withmine and a number of points may contribute to my viewpoint.

Admittedly, asking other people for advicemakes you address the question efficiently, and it's true that the advice fromthose people who are familiar with the situation you are facing with helps youa lot. However, there are considerable drawbacks lie in the process of askingfor advice, such as the fact that inappropriate advice impede your progress andthat asking for advice always bother others while enormous people around us donot want to be interrupted.

The reason why I prefer to use ownknowledge and experience to solve problem has to do with the spirit ofself-dependence. it's not exaggerating to say that individual without abilityof self-reliance is just like flowers without sunshine, it's self-dependencethat convert a raw man into socialize adult. Accordingly, those who used toasking for advice are likely to form a character of relying on others. Takingmyself as an example, when I was a child, each time I faced with a puzzle, myparents encouraged and guided me to think out ways of myself to handle it. whengrowing into an adult, I solve the problem in my life depend on myself, incontrast, my cousin who take parents' advice to deal with everything stilldepend on his parents up to now.

Another reason that account for mypreference links to the fact that it's more likely to be success to use one'sown knowledge and experience to deal with problem than ask others for advice.It’s not hard to imagine that when you deal with the problem by yourself, thesense of achievement will be gained and you will be more confident. Thinkingabout Bill Gates, granted that he ask others for advice when he drop out fromthe Harvard University to establish a business, the majority people wouldobject him. Given Bill Gates take others advice, we will never heard of such aperson, let alone the Microsoft Company.

Consequently, due to analysis and reasonsmentioned above, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that it's better tosolve question based on own knowledge and experience rather than ask otherpeople for advice.

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4.4Do you agree or disagree the statement that scientists should be responsible for the negative impacts of their discoveries?

Concerning the absoluteness of the assertion, I disagree with the statement that scientists should be responsible for the negative impacts of their discoveries. Reasons can be illustrated as follow.

Admittedly, as a respected group, scientists gain reputation due to their discoveries and inventions and they will never fail to fascinating peoples. Much of the discoveries facilitate the progress of modern society, nevertheless, there are indeed considerable in number of discoveries do not favor to human's lives, should the scientists be responsible for this? I think it's better to view this question in different aspects than answer it directly.

To begin with, from the perspective of science, scientists should not responsible for the negative influence of their discoveries. As an old saying goes "a coin has two sides", the discoveries and truth which scientists bring to human's eyes followed by reverse effect. However, the ultimate target of scientists' discoveries is to create happiness lives for the entire human beings, they never been intend to damage humans. Moreover, most of the negative applications of their discoveries were produced by people other than scientists themselves. The plane invented by scientists, for example, was intend to enhance human's transport efficiency, but can we say it's the scientists' fault when it was used to kill people in a war? Correspondingly, should we complain the scientists who invent computer when our children were addicted to playing games? Apparently the answer is not.

From the viewpoint of society, scientists should spend no effort to minimize the bad impacts of their discoveries. Scientists should enjoy the award brought by their discoveries as well as take the responsibility of eliminate the potential damage. Think about plastic bag, it generates white pollution, which is of course harm for the environment. Measures should be taken by the scientists to invent kind of items which are environmental friendly to substitute the plastic bag. All the scientists should view Einstein, the man who discovers the relativity theory regret for its potential damage to human later on, as an example. Accordingly, scientists should take their social responsibilities.

Consequently, based on thorough analysis and reasons mentioned above, which sometime intertwine to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive than any one of them, we should not simply say that scientists should be responsible for the negative impacts of their discoveries.
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4.4Do you agree or disagree the statement that scientists should be responsible for the negative impacts of their discoveries?
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Concerning the absoluteness of the assertion, I disagree with the statement that scientists should be responsible for the negative impacts of their discoveries. Reasons can be illustrated as follow.
Admittedly, as a respected group, scientists gain reputation due to their discoveries and inventions and they will never fail to fascinating peoples. Much 该用MANY of the discoveries facilitate the progress of modern society, nevertheless, there are indeed considerable in number of discoveries do not favor to human's lives, should the scientists be responsible for this? I think it's better to view this question in different aspects than answer it directly. directly 最好换一下，因为从其他方便回答也是要直接回答的。9 H1 ^) M' z  G' ]( w

To begin with, from the perspective of science, scientists should not responsible for the negative influence of their discoveries. As an old saying goes "a coin has two sides", the discoveries and truth which scientists bring to human's eyes are followed by reverse effect. However, the ultimate target of scientists' discoveries is to create happiness lives for the entire human beings, they never been intend to damage humans. Moreover, most of the negative applications of their discoveries were produced by people other than scientists themselves. The plane invented by scientists, for example, was intend to enhance human's transport efficiency, but can we say it's the scientists' fault when it was used to kill people in a war? Correspondingly, should we complain the scientists who invent computer when our children were addicted to playing games? Apparently the answer is not. no
the viewpoint of society, scientists should spend no effort to minimize the bad impacts of their discoveries. Scientists should enjoy the award brought by their discoveries as well as take the responsibility of eliminateing the potential damage. Think about plastic bag, it generates white pollution, which is of course harm for the environment. Measures should be taken by the scientists to invent kind of items which are environmental friendly to substitute the plastic bag. All the scientists should view Einstein, the man who discovers the relativity theory regret for its potential damage to human later on, as an example. Accordingly, scientists should take their social responsibilities.
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Consequently, based on thorough analysis and reasons mentioned above, which sometime intertwine to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive than any one of them, we should not simply say that scientists should be responsible for the negative impacts of their discoveries.

我注意到你的副词用得很多，比如correspondingly accordingly, 这些词很新颖，但是前后句子间的关系并不完全符合这些词所应当形成的关系。所以还是要查查副词意思的。
另外结构不是特别清晰。

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4.5 (08.1.13)
Students at university or in college should choose the most difficult classes even if they cannot get top grades (marks) in them.

Concerning the absoluteness of the assertion, i disagree with the statement that students at university or college should choose the most difficult classes even if they cannot get top grades in them.

Admittedly, each individual has the right of choice, and college student can choose any class they want as long as they meet with the scores associate with graduation. Based on personal experience, life style and emotional concern, some of the college students choose the most difficult class. In their opinion, these classes are more challenge and thus enhance the opportunities to outdo themselves. However, the drawback of choosing the difficult classes is apparent and thus not recommended.

The first reason why i disagree with the assertion has to do with the students' characteristic. There are all sorts of students in the college; some of them maybe like challenge while others maybe not. The former one maybe should prefer the difficult classes, in contrast, the later one is not recommended to choose. My friend Lucy, for example, who is a shy girl, once chooses the physics as a result of other classes are full of students. Apparently, the course is so difficult for her that she fail in the final exam even though she studies hard enough. That is to say, whether the students should choose the difficult class or not links to their character.

Another reason account for my preference associate with students' interests, which is the criteria in choosing classes. Namely, the college students should choose those courses that fit for their interests rather than based on whether these classes are difficult or not. The interest play a vital part in the process of choosing courses that no one can ignore its influence. For instance, i am interesting in history, so i choose class link to history. However, the course of economy in my college are famous as difficult, i won't choose it because i am not interesting in it.

Consequently, due to the thorough analysis and reasons mentioned above, we can safely arrive at the conclusion that college students are not recommended to choose those most difficult courses.

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4.5 (08.1.13)
Students at university or in college should choose the most difficult classes even if they cannot get top grades (marks) in them.

Concerning the absoluteness of the assertion (这么高端的词汇), i disagree with the statement that students at university or college should choose the most difficult classes even if they cannot get top grades in them.

Admittedly, each individual has the right of choice, and college student can choose any class they want as long as(这个句型用得很不错哦) they meet with the scores associate with graduation. Based on personal experience, life style and emotional concern, some of the college students choose the most difficult class. In their opinion, these classes are more challenge and thus enhance the opportunities to outdo(这个词很新颖哦) themselves. However, the drawback of choosing the difficult classes is apparent and thus not recommended.

我感觉你上面这段其实就应该是第一段应该完成的任务，单独列出来这么一段
似乎没有必要，整合为一段，然后第二段就开始列论点就OK了，当然，如果你坚持自己的风格也可以了。

The first reason why i disagree with the assertion has to do with the students' characteristic. There are all sorts of students in the college; some of them maybe like challenge while others maybe not. The former one maybe should prefer the difficult classes, in contrast, the later one is not recommended to choose. My friend Lucy, for example, who is a shy girl, once chooses (应该用过去时吧)the physics as a result of other classes are full of students. Apparently, the course is so difficult for her that she fail(过去时态) in the final exam even though she studies hard enough.(前面这里有点感觉不对劲，因为就我理解的英文思维，如果你用enough，那么结果应该是成功，或者是达到的，可以自己理解一下，我们常说study hard enough to meet/achieve/get...) That is to say, whether the students should choose the difficult class or not links to(这里用links不太合适，建议用depends on更稳妥) their character.

Another reason account for my preference associate with (前面用了reason,后面又用associate with不太好，explicitly state your opinion would be better.)students' interests, which is the criteria in choosing classes. Namely, the college students should choose those courses that fit for their interests rather than based on whether these classes are difficult or not. The interest play a vital part in the process of choosing courses that no one can ignore its influence. For instance, i am interesting in history, so i choose class link to (这个地方用associate 吧) history. However, the course of economy in my college are famous as (renowned for 或者 well acknowledged 更好)difficult, i won't choose it because i am not interesting in it.

如果选择的是反面的论点的话，上一段好像论述“为什么不”的部分好像并不多，而是侧重在“该怎么办”的描述上。

Consequently, due to the thorough analysis and reasons mentioned above, we can safely arrive at the conclusion that college students are not recommended to choose those most difficult courses.

整体文章很流畅，写作功底扎实，尤其是开头两段写的比较精彩，其他都没什么了，这个题写反面也相对较难，呵呵。

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