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发表于 2010-4-6 21:51:18 |显示全部楼层
4.6 (08.2.2)/ Q* b+ ?: T1 j1 v; T
Most people prefer having other people make decisions for them rather than making decisions by themselves。

In our modern society we have to face many things need us to determinate. When you asked whether most people prefer having other people make decisions for them rather than making decisions by themselves, a vast of people believe that asking other people to make decisions for them definitely is a better chose than making decision by themselves, but other people claim the best way to make decision must be determinate decision by themselves. As far as I am concerned people absolutely favor having others make decisions for them.

The majority of people prefer ask other people to determinate their choice because everybody obtain limited experience and knowledge to make decisions. It is too inadequate to make a good decision in a lot of occasions. Fortunately, people realize their friends, teachers and relatives can help them making a better decision. I can cite a typical instance that I wanted to travel in Beijing last year. Hence I felt obliged to collect enough materials to make my travel plan. And then I surf on Internet all the day to determinate which hotel is suitable, and how to arrange my schedule. Although I tried my best to do research on information I collected, I still could not make a good decision. Suddenly I recalled I have a friend who had been to Beijing several times. Thus I asked him to help me make decision about travel. He helped me choose the hotel and travel routes in a few minutes, and finally I acquired a wonderful travel for his rational decisions. This case proves we can have better effects when we ask other people help as make decision especially in some field we do not familiar with but other people expert in. Therefore most people would rather opt having other people make decision for them.

Sometimes we cannot make decision for ourselves for we do not have ability to make decision. It offers a good instance of some children have to enter school in very young age. They do not have capability to judge which school is fit to them. On consequently they ought to ask their parents to make decision instead of themselves. Another example is some people are unconscious for disasters. Doctors need them make decision for surgical operations. In this case our parents or relative have to make decision for us for that reason we lose ability to choose.

From what has discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that most people prefer having other people make decisions for them rather than making decisions by themselves.

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发表于 2010-4-7 09:00:49 |显示全部楼层
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发表于 2010-4-7 16:56:36 |显示全部楼层
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发表于 2010-4-7 21:24:23 |显示全部楼层
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The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide

Travel become a popular activity in our daily life, a vast of people consider travel is most important entertainment in whole year. When asked whether the best way to travel is in a group led by tour guide, some people would believe it is a safe and effect way, but other people claim the better way is travel alongly. As far as I am concerned, the most wonderful way for travel must be travel along rather than travel in a group led by a tour guide.

I prefer travel lonely, because It offers me more freedom. Travel in a group means your travel plan had been arranged before. Everybody in the group have to sightseeing same place. However, it is impossible that everybody interested in same place, there must be parts of tourists get disappointing for they visited the boring place. You lose some significant freedom in travel when you travel in a group. On contrary this problem would never happen in individual travel. When you are not in a group you can opt all the place you favored. Hence I like individual travel much better.

What is more, when you lead by a guide your travel would be influenced by strict schedule. You have to get up, set up, go back on time. This kind of schedule makes me crazy. I can cite a typical instance that once I travel to Beijing. Tour guide asked us must get up on five o’clock. I felt tired in that day and then I loosed the spirit to visited Great Wall, Summer palace and other important place. My whole tripe was disturbed by insufficient sleep. If I travel along in that time, I could get up when I sleep enough, and I can achieve a totally different prefect travel. Thus I really opposite travel in a group led by a guide.

Travel in a group would get such terrible troubles for me. From what I discussed above, I could safely draw the conclusion that the best way to travel is not in a group led by guide, but travel single.

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发表于 2010-4-7 22:36:19 |显示全部楼层
楼主你好

感谢你对拙作的修改

我现在想,把selfishness 改成egoism,第三段似乎会好一些 你意下如何?

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发表于 2010-4-8 21:31:12 |显示全部楼层
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Free your ambitious mind and learn the art of dying.

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发表于 2010-4-9 20:40:10 |显示全部楼层
Universities should give every member of the team the same grade when the team finishes a project.

Students work in a team become more and more popular nowadays. When asked about whether universities should give every member of team the same grade when team finishes a project, a vast of people would believe it is a good way to judge contributions of students precisely, but other people claim team work absolutely ought to be remarked in a group grade. As far as I am concerned, universities would better offer same grade to a team when they finishes a project.

A group of people should gain the same remark, because the important reason that asking a team of students to finish a project is educate them what is team work. And team work means every member in team finish their own special work, cooperate with each other and achieve a final outcome. Universities cultivate their conscious of they represent the group but not themselves. In the other word universities want students comprehend they are doing a team work. If we try to divide their achievement, the meaning of team work would be loosed. They still represent themselves just in a different way. Their team spirit cannot be formed. They would not learned the meaning of team work.

We cannot give different grade for every member in team for the reason that it is too different to judge a member’s achievement in a group. When a team set up they become a entire group. Their works cohere with each other you cannot divide them. Sometimes a member of team gets a problem, some other people will help she or he solve the problem. In some cases, several people discuss a plan which makes a meaningful contribution to project. Furthermore a majority of decision have to be voted in team, thus everybody has responsibility to the outcome. How can universities ensure who do much work than others or who is essential in a group.

From all the discussion above I can safely draw a conclusion that universities should give every member in team same grade when they finish a project.

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发表于 2010-4-10 21:13:34 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 forrestlut 于 2010-4-10 21:15 编辑

Universities should give every member of the team the same grade when the team finishes a project.

Students workin a team become more and more popular nowadays. When asked aboutwhether universities should give every member of team the same gradewhen team finishes a project, a vast of people would believe it is agood way to judge contributions of students precisely 什么是good way??前面可用的是whether哦, but other peopleclaim team work absolutely ought to be remarked in a group grade. Asfar as I am concerned, universities would better offer same grade to ateam 应该是team里的每一个member:every members of a team  when they finishes a project./ B, [% b# B: }

A group of people should gain the same remark, because the importantreason is that asking a team of students to finish a project is educate用词推敲一下:可以用make sb knowthem what is a team work. And team work means every member in team finishtheir own special work, cooperating with each other and achieving a finaloutcome简单句不能有多个宾语,要做处理或变成从句. Universities cultivate their conscious of they represent thegroup but not themselves. In the other word universities want studentscomprehend they are doing a team work. If we try to divide theirachievements获得成就?这个词是用来表示个人所得到的,这里应该是贡献 contributions, the meaning of team work would be loosed. They stillrepresent themselves just in a different way. Their team spirit cannotbe formed. They would not learned the meaning of team work.
可以看出你能够自觉的排除中文的干扰,虽然还有一些问题,加油!
希望加强用词推敲。

We cannot give different grade for every member in a team for the reasonthat it is too different to judge a member’s achievement应该是贡献
in a group.When a team set up they become a entire group 这里你用反了,实际上team是比group更“团队”的. Their works cohere witheach other you cannot divide them. Sometimes a member of team gets aproblem, some other people will help she or he solve the problem. Insome cases, several people discuss a plan which makes a meaningfulcontribution to project. Furthermore a majority of decision have to bevoted in team, thus everybody has responsibility to the outcome. Howcan universities ensure who do much work 用contributions好些 than others or who isessential in a group.. W. V4 [/ f5 O  B0 T

From allthe discussion above I can safely draw a conclusion that universitiesshould give every member in team same grade when they finish a project.

by '普‘
(1) 优点语言朴实,不用模板,这是值得赞赏的!
(2) 不足:用词要多推敲,用能受汉语影响
(3) 建议用强势一点的主题句点名你每段的论点,这可以弥补你遣词造句不精确的弱势。

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