ISSUE168,求拍。。。

cliffyqUID: 2798053

TOPIC: ISSUE168 - "Critical judgmentof work in any given field has little value unless it comes from someone who isan expert in that field."

The statement is too absolute to be true. Actually,I think in most fields, on the contrary, critical judgment from experts in different fields or even non-experts is important. First of all, this kind of critic is often helpful. An expert from different academic background usually thinks in a different way and looks from a different perspective, their critique is often inspiring and may provide a new approach to the issue. In the field of art, while an artist or critic may look from a professional eye, a non-expert may only tell if it look good or sounds good to him, and often those ordinary people’s intuitive feedbacks are more important to an artist than a rational analysis from an artcritic.

In some cases, critic judgment from experts in other fields is even crucial. Just as is widely acknowledged, genetic scientist nowadays must listen to the critique from experts in fields of ethics and law to prevent moral crisis that may cause by the abuse of clone technology.

Sometimes, critic judgment from another area is also important for the development of a subject. For example, if wethink of mathematicians as people who providing tools, then physicians arethose who providing demand to apply these tools.A physician's demmand of acertain kind of mathematical tool and feedback of it propels a certain branchof mathematics to develop and thrive. When Newton first invented the method ofcalculus, it was a simple idea, some physicians found it handy to solve acertain type of problems, but for another problem, calculus may not be thatuseful, sometimes they may found some flaw in Newton’s theory, and their critical judgment made the mathematicians work to improve calculus, thus mathematical analysis was gradually developed as a prosperous branch of mathematics.

Furthermore,not only the judgment itself,but also the attitude towards those judgment is important. Respect and tolerance towards opinions from experts in different field and non-experts isessential to create a free academic atmosphere.If we all agree the statementthat critiques from other areas are useless,one may unfairly deny a critique simply by claiming that the critique maker is ignorant of the certain subjuct,and people will be generally discouraged to make critical judgments orcritical thinking, which is harmful to academic freedom, the foudation of any subject.

While such kind of critical judgment is generally valuable, we should beware of biased attacks,especially from those in power.In China,the authority once criticized social scientist Malthus'theory,for it contradicted the ideology of that time, as a result the study of that theory actually ceased, and some scientists in that field were even persecuted because of their research.In this case,this kind of biased judgment severely damaged the academic freedom and independence.

To sum up,we should appreciate the critical judgment from experts in other fields or non-experts ,for it is usually valuable and contributes to a free academic atmosphere, meanwhile, we have to beware of some biased judgment from those in power that interferes academic independence and damage academic freedom.

cliffyqUID: 2798053

自沙。。明天就要考了，希望有人帮我改改呀~~~~

wangguangyaUID: 2784661

TOPIC: ISSUE168 - "Critical judgment of work in any given field has little value unless it comes from someone who is an expert in that field."
（我对题目中关键词的理解：任何领域，包括艺术、科技、宗教、社会、心理等等；critical judgement，是那些critic们按照一定的（主观的或者客观）标准给的，会受他们自身立场、知识背景、社会环境、个人喜好的限制，会给评价对象带来或好或坏的影响；value,要看对谁而言，政府要评价谁，多半是为了维护统治，艺术家可能是出于个人经验，普通人能以直觉为标准，就是看爽不爽；expert，专家的评价，一般来说都很有价值，但有时对社会和作品本身都不一定客观，比如A嫉妒B，A就可能诋毁B，沈括和苏东坡，或者A不理解B，就评价低，像同时代人对梵高的评价，非专家的评价也不一定没价值，比如“皇帝新装“中的小孩，说出了“真理”。

这道题的背景和关键就是：如何看待“外界的评价”
总体来说，你的issue抓住了重点，但是挖掘的不是太深刻，例子不多；语言还是挺好的；还有就是把issue发到坛子里之前要在word里把spelling mistakes 给remove 掉
The statement is too absolute(extreme , or better ?) to be true. Actually, I think in(as for ) most fields, on the contrary, critical judgment from experts in different fields(sphere 领域，用词可多样化) or even non-experts is important.
（这里就可以分段了吧） First of all（信号词）, this kind of critic is often helpful. An expert from different academic background usually thinks in a different way and looks from a (cancel the a) different perspective(perspective is an uncountable non),（；） their critique is often inspiring and may provide a new approach to the issue. In the field of art, while（把他它放在后半句） an artist or critic may look from a professional eye, a non-expert may only tell if it look good or sounds good to him, and often those ordinary people’s intuitive feedbacks are more important to an artist than a rational analysis from an art critic.
黑体句是topic sentence，这例子是不错，但是development is no respectively thorough.主要是句子太长，用词重复致使表意不清。
In some cases, critic judgment from experts in other fields is even crucial. Just as is widely acknowledged, genetic scientist nowadays must listen to the critique from experts in fields of ethics and law to prevent moral crisis that may be caused by the abuse of clone technology.
（这个例子很好，但是可以放在下一段，因为本段意思和下一段的一样）
Sometimes, critic judgment from another area is also important for the development of a subject. For example, if we think of mathematicians as people who providing tools, then physicians are those who provides demand to apply these tools. A physician's demand of a certain kind of mathematical tool and feedback of it propels a certain branch of mathematics to develop and thrive. When Newton first invented the method of calculus, it was a simple idea, some physicians found it handy to solve a certain type of problems, but for another kinds of problems, calculus may not be that useful; sometimes they may found some flaws in Newton’s theory, and their critical judgment made the mathematicians work to improve calculus, thus mathematical analysis was gradually developed as a prosperous branch of mathematics.

Further more, not only the judgment itself, but also the attitude towards those judgment is important(counts much\really matters\of great significance ). Respect and tolerance towards opinions from experts in different field and non-experts is essential to create a free academic atmosphere. If we all agree the statement that critiques from other areas are useless, one may unfairly deny a critique simply by claiming that the critique maker is ignorant of the certain subjuct, and people will be generally discouraged to make critical judgments or critical thinking, which is harmful to academic freedom, the foundation of any subject.

Admittedly,\true\to be true\ 诚然While such kind of critical judgment is generally valuable, we should beware of biased attacks, especially from those in power. In China, the authority once criticized condemn谴责指责 social scientists who are in favor of Malthus' theory, for it contradicted the ideology of that time;  as a result the study of that theory actually ceased, and some scientists in that field were even persecuted because of their research. In this case, this kind of biased judgment severely damaged the academic freedom and independence.

To sum up, we should appreciate the critical judgment from experts in other fields or non-experts ,for it is usually valuable and contributes to a free academic atmosphere, meanwhile, we have to beware of some biased judgment from those in power that interferes academic independence and damage academic freedom.
注意副词的连接作用，会使文章更连贯；不错了；
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cliffyqUID: 2798053

谢谢楼上的意见！很有帮助

wangguangyaUID: 2784661

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这位兄台，你要是有时间，也给俺拍一下，谢过了

issue159：  The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds .

提纲：
TS:不同意作者的观点
1、当要求精确和速度时，机器比人类更显优势
    例子：电脑，显微镜
2、在逻辑思维方面，机器也会超过人类
  例子：“深蓝|计算机战胜世界围棋冠军
3、但是，在情感方面，机器却远不如人类
论证：分析，人类有情感，对整个社会有益
例子：美国科幻片”Wallet"
conclusion：说人类比机器高等是不合理的

The speaker asserts that human mind must be superior to, under any circumstance, machines. If so, why we bother ourselves to invent, design and produce varieties of machine? I fundamentally hold a different view with the speaker. Everything has both advantages and disadvantages, especially by comparison with others; human mind and machine are also not exceptions. Thus, it is irrational to say absolutely one is superior to the other.

First, in some certain situations, particularly entailing high accuracy and efficiency, it is machine that shows considerable advantages over human mind. Computers can serve as a typical and compelling example to demonstrate this viewpoint. When coming to calculating speed, human mind can neither match modern computers. We can enjoy clear pictures, moving videos and pleasant music with computers furnished with multimedia but can guess what the scene may be like from what a person says or writes. Another persuasive instance is microscope, with whose help biologist can discover tinny creatures such as bacterial and virus, which can’t be seen directly by our eyes, and make further study about them. Obviously, in order to save the human being ourselves from the hard and boring work or increase the working efficiency, a large number of devices come into being. Those inventions, generally speaking, can provide efficiency and accuracy many times of that of human mind.


Second, with the development of science and technology, in analysis thinking, some specially designed machine can show a more outstanding work than human mind. In 2001, the Times published a piece of incredible news that a computer, which is named "Deeper -blue", won a cheese game and debated the former world champion. As we all know, analysis thinking is essential for playing cheese, and one must anticipate what the opponent will do in next several steps and, respectively, what measures should she take to fight against; therefore, calculating speed and close examination count much in the proceeding. High speed of calculating and program, which is based on several word champions’ playing track and instilled into the computer, guarantees the unbelievable success. This news indicates that machine, specially promoted and equipped with some certain corresponding function, can work a wonder and defeat a top expert or even a world champion, let alone ordinary people.

Admittedly, as to the emotion, it is hardly possible for machine to equal, at least currently, human mind. Human being will express their own feelings whenever they confront case that is exciting, inspiring, or disappointing. When making a decision to tackle some problems, human kind always take others’ reaction and the moral influence into account, which contributes much to lasting living as well as the unity and integrity of human kind as a whole. However, a solitary machine will hardly care so much. In a scientific imaginary film "Wallet", what the machinery captain can do nothing but obey the fixed instructions that lead to exploration of the space ship, regardless of all of the passengers’ wishes to go back earth. In short, as to emotions, machine can never match or be superior to human mind, let alone take place of.

Judging from what has been discussed above, we can safely come to the conclusion that compared with human mind, machine can work more accurately and efficiently; nonetheless, the drawback about machine that it take no possession of emotion and can't work without human mind's instruction cannot be denied. Hence, it is unreasonable to claim that human mind is always superior to machine.

自评：语法方面错误不多，但亮点少，没远达到GRE要求的水平；例子比较充足，对例子的展开分析还行，但算不上”有力“；这份response的优点就是：结构清晰，逻辑完整。