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weaselUID: 2739489

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youngstoneUID: 2670818

这篇写得实在是烂。这篇试着限时了，75分钟才勉勉强强写完，而且第一次限时感觉太差了，字数没有保障不说，就是感觉车轱辘话来会说，表达及其单调，还迫不得已用了些中式英语，有些地方基本就是单纯的罗列观点了，基本没有语言方面的修饰。我自己把拼写啊语法什么的改了，其他的我自己知道不好但还说不太出来，所以这次改我的人要稍微辛苦一下了，我先谢谢啦~~

Every society has its own style. We can learn some people by the way people look, dress, and act but there are some people that are not what they look like. We can learn a society by its people’s attitude and interest but other factor should also be taken into account to learn a society completely and deeply.

Most people are just what they look like because people’s behavior can easily reflect their characteristics. Firstly, if a person’s eyes shine firmly, he must be a man with great perseverance. In contrast, we can not imagine a person with dim eyesight can be vigorous. Secondly, we can judge whether a person is rich by his dressing because rich people care much about their clothes. Besides, religions can be easily told when looking at people’s dressing. Thirdly, the walking pace of a person reflects his pace in life. A person who often walks fast must be a person who is living an efficient life. In the same way, people may be living a comfortable life with a slow walking pace.

However, sometimes we can not judge a person by his appearance. There are some people who want to show something different or just put themselves in a special way for a certain purpose. For example, a poor man may want to pretend that his living conditions are not so poor to his father-in-law in the future. So he may just dress luxuriously, just acting as if he is the single son of a millionaire. Another example is that many white-collars always wear a suit all day long because they are required to do that. We can hardly know what their real personality is if a lot of people dress almost the same.

In addition, what we should keep in mind is that people’ appearance is just one factor to judge a society’s ideas and values. It is neither the only one nor the most important. Besides people’s ideas, there are some other crucial factors. Firstly, the economic standard of a society can decide the ideas and values of it. One of the main reasons is that people will consider other things after ensuring a fundamental living standard. If most people in a society are living under the average level, they will hardly consider other things because the basic needs are not met. Secondly, the conditions of the whole environment, such as the buildings of a society are also indicators of the ideas and values of a certain society. Thirdly, the laws and the education systems can reveal the ideas and values of the society as well.

In conclusion, the appearance and behavior of people in a society can almost reflect people’s attitude and interest but there are some exceptions. And we can almost learn the ideas and values of our society by people’s attitude but other factors can not be neglected.

钱钱去米国UID: 2761990

People’s attitudes and interests can be shown through their dress,actions and eyes in most case.but I suspect that whether it can realy effectively reveal a society’s ideas and values merely by observing the appearance and behavior of its people.

To begin with ,I consent to statement that people look, dress and act reveals their attitude and interests in most case.People are hard to hide their real feelings or intentions through their eyes and neither can people cheat themselves absolutely,especially on physical desires.for instance, when people eat delicious food,they will feel happy and pleased which can be seem from their actions.If some one is a gourmet,his behavior can also show it,that he may be strict in cooking and food choosing.what’s more,the dress can also show one’s attitude and interest.some people maybe austere,and they may like clothes in simple style.while some thriftless people may prefer luxurious clothes.the attitude towards clothes usually show the attitude towards one’s life.

However, in some case ,people’s dress,actions and look fails to reveal their nature.one may change his dress style in order to join a group and act as he is congenial whith others.an commen example is people who take part in the recruitment,all the candidates dress very formal when meet recruiters.In order to please the interwers the candidates may change their dress styles. and people may behavior cold when they meet strangers,while being warmhearted when stay with friends and family numbers.another example that can prove it is the famous.these people often act different in public and in private.a film star may hate childern in private,but he can act as love childern very much in public.

When turns to the a society's ideas and values,I donot think these can competely be found out by observing the appearance and behavior of its people.certainly,the people’s behavior and appearance can reveal a sepect of the social life and can show the custom and tradition at the same time.but only by these can not understand a country or a nation exhaustively.In a society,except for the mainstream culture,there are some subculture,which only a few people consent them.if one who want to observes the appearance and behavior of its people in order to comprehend the whole society,he may looks these subculture owned by a few people in this society as the maistream the society.for example,homosexual love is a subculture in many society,but we can not conclude that Homosexual love is a part of our social value.

To sum up,this statement amounts to an un fair generalization.People’s attitudes and interests sometimes may be dissemble for necessary,the way one look, dress,and act will also change for necessary.it is hard to find out people’s attitudes and interests from their actions,dress,and eyes always.And it is also difficult to grasp a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people.when individual can not respond for all of the people living in this society.

sola-nanaUID: 2744594

People are now living in such arapid-growing society with rich substances of a wild scope that they could nothelp dressing themselves up and do whatever they like in reflection of theirattitudes and interests, definitely in majority. While, the ideas and values ofa society could not be recognized only through the appearance and behavior ofits people as appearance and behavior are just superficial and could not givean inner sight of deeper levels.

Firstly, colorful as our society is, peoplewould like to show their personalities in the way of looking, dressing andacting. Such is a multivariated society that some of us may appear in imitationof one of his favored famous stars. Their dressing, speaking mode and even theway of looking at others are the same with their hero. That is their attitudesand interests of life: imitation and losing in themselves. Disoriented while inmost cases, it is the tradition and background conditions that form thedifferences in people’s appearance and behavior. There is a telling examplethat in China, most of the children in traditional families do not like fashioneddress in the leading of fashion like sleeveless and miniskirt. While,youngsters from upper side of America or western Europe are always the tider offashion as their open-minded tradition and ample finical support from theirrich family.

Admittedly, the ideas and values of asociety could be told by the appearance and behavior of its people to someextent. In United States, material comfort is one of the values shared by itsmembers with so many Americans pursuing such a kind of life. While one couldnot get a fully understanding of the society only through the superficial appearancesas all the appearance could be feint. It is through the direct way how one looks,dresses and acts that we could get to know him or her preliminarily. As we wereoften told when we were kids that we should always be aware of how we behave,what we say, and remember to be neatly. Especially in aristocracy, children aretrained to be gentle and elegant at such a young age that he or she wouldalways behave in the way that aristocrat does. People are always pretending tolet their appearance and behavior which are reflections of what kind of personthey are or which class they are in be more pleasant.

Albeit the appearances are the trulyreflection of people’s heart and soul of the society, could we really tell theideas and values, the inner qualities of the society , only through superficialanalysis with people’s appearance and behavior? Definitely, it’s not enough. “Values and ideas are related to the norms of aculture. Norms are rules for behavior in specific situations, while valuesidentify what should be judged as good or evil. Different cultures reflectdifferent values. ”Culture needs innerobservation like” knowledge, belief, and behavior that depends upon thecapacity for symbolic thought and social learning”to get a fully understanding. And that kind of symbolic thought and sociallearning is not what we could get through observing the appearance and behaviorof the people.

On balance, it is too simple-minded for thespeaker to have the idea that one can tell social ideas and values only throughobserving the appearance and behavior of its people. If things go that simple, whatis the use for studying sociology and anthropology?

哎...结尾挤不出来了...

youngstoneUID: 2670818

哈哈，好多次都是改钱钱~
People’s attitudes and interests can be shown through their dress,actions and eyes in most cases.but I suspect that whether it can realy effectively reveal a society’s ideas and values merely by observing the appearance and behavior of its people(这句语病，前后主语不一致了）.
To begin with ,I consent to the statement that people look, dress and act reveals（多个动词，语法错误） their attitude and interests in most cases.People are hard to hide their real feelings or intentions through their eyes and neither can people cheat themselves absolutely,especially on physical desires.for instance, when people eat delicious food,they will feel happy and pleased which can be seemn from their actions.If some(one了，不能用some了） one is a gourmet,his behavior can also show it,that he may be strict in cooking and food choosing.what’s more,the dress can also show one’s attitude and interest.some people maybe austere,and they may like clothes in a simple style.while some thriftless people may prefer luxurious clothes.the attitude towards clothes usually show the attitude towards one’s life.

However, in some cases ,people’s dress,actions and look fails to reveal their nature.one may change his dress style in order to join a group and act as he is congenial whith others.an commen example is people who take part in the recruitment,all the candidates dress very formally when meet recruiters.In order to please the interwers the candidates may change their dress styles. and people may behavior cold when they meet strangers,while being warmhearted when stay with friends and family numbers.another example that can prove it is the famous.these people often act different in public and in private.a film star may hate childern in private,but he can act as (直接后面接不知道对不对）love childern very much in public.

When turns to the a society's ideas and values,I donot think these can competely be found out by observing the appearance and behavior of its people.certainly,the people’s behavior and appearance can reveal a sepect(an aspect) of the social life and can show the custom and tradition at the same time.but only by these we can not understand a country or a nation exhaustively(感觉这个词用得不合适）.In a society,except for the mainstream culture,there are some subculture,which only a few people consent them.if one who want to observes the appearance and behavior of its people in order to comprehend the whole society,he may looks these subculture owned by a few people in this society as the maistream the society.for example,homosexual love is a subculture in many society,but we can not conclude that Homosexual love is a part of our social value.

To sum up,this statement amounts to an un fair generalization.People’s attitudes and interests sometimes may be dissemble for necessary,the way one look, dress,and act will also change for necessary.it is hard to find out people’s attitudes and interests from their actions,dress,and eyes always.And it is also difficult to grasp a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people.when individual can not respond for all of the people living in this society.

你的思路和我的思路是一样的，所以我看着思维上挺顺畅。钱钱的问题还是拼写和语法啊！写完之后最好放在word里一下吧！语法啊单复数什么的就都能改掉了

ROse_MaryUID: 2790464

This is the world full of diversity, which is composed by the people with various individualities. Often at the first sight, we would have no idea about the people’s attitudes and interests, but from the way people look, dress and act could we find some clues. Artists are usually dressed colorfully, while the professors in universities normally. The thoughts and ideas in our hearts more often than not lead us to what we want and how we behave. One little “Thank you.” naturally reveals the moral culture of someone’s soul.

The units consist of the entirety. Let’s have a look at the whole world. The western people’s dressing up and wearing is confident, and they always wear what they like, no matter what it is or whether the clothes fit the figure. However, eastern people quite care about the conservativeness and others’ look, like India and China, we can seldom find girls wearing sun-top on the streets (the number is increasing these year). The apparent contrast is because western world tends to be more open and free, in which the people holds the value of freedom and individualism, while the people in eastern world are comparatively more conservative and loyal.

Whereas can we easily say that a society’s ideas and values could be judged by observing the appearance and behavior of its people? As the old saying goes, “One shouldn't judge a book by its cover.” No one’s value could be told only by observing the appearance and how they look and dress, and what is more important is to pay attention to the behavior of the people. How the people act depends on what they are thinking and what their values lying on, but the appearance only reflect the attitude or interest. For example, a billionaire may tends to wear cheap clothes, which is considered as his appearance, but he has been doing charity for a long time, which is his behavior. From his appearance, we may even regard him as a normal worker. From his behavior, we can conclude that he is a man who owns a lot of money, otherwise he couldn’t contribute so much. On the other hand, in some cases, for the object reasons, people cannot wear what they like, such as the uniform regulation by the company, and at this time, it will be inadequate to judge one of the members by the appearance because the people in this company are almost in the same dressing. As long as we care about the behavior more and not to spend all our effort and money on the appearance, our value will definitely be realized by others.

The system of value is in the deepest part of everyone’s heart, and it has an great impact on every directions of our behavior. We should construct the right sense of value, then our individuality and spirit would be improve in the course of life.
我错了~55~这篇文章怎么这么纠结呢，感觉没话说~~

钱钱去米国UID: 2761990

改sola
People are now living in such arapid-growing society with rich substances of a wild scope that they could nothelp dressing themselves(them) up and do whatever they like in reflection of their attitudes and interests, definitely in majority. While, the ideas and values of a society could not be recognized only through the appearance and behavior ofits people as appearance and behavior are just superficial and could not givean inner sight of deeper levels.

Firstly, colorful as our society is, people would like to show their personalities in the way of looking, dressing and acting. Such is a multivariated society that some of us may appear in imitationof one of his favored famous stars. Their dressing, speaking mode and even theway of looking at others are the same with their hero. That is their attitudesand interests of life: imitation and losing in themselves(them). Disoriented while inmost cases, it is the tradition and background conditions that form thedifferences in people’s appearance and behavior. There is a telling examplethat in China, most of the children in traditional families do not like fashioneddress in the leading of fashion like sleeveless and miniskirt. While,youngsters from upper side of America or western Europe are always the tider offashion as their open-minded tradition and ample finical support from theirrich family.

Admittedly, the ideas and values of asociety could be told by the appearance and behavior of its people to someextent. In United States, material comfort is one of the values shared by itsmembers with so many Americans pursuing such a kind of life. While one couldnot get a fully understanding of the society only through the superficial appearancesas all the appearance could be feint. It is through the direct way how one looks,dresses and acts that we could get to know him or her preliminarily. As we wereoften told when we were kids that we should always be aware of how we behave,what we say, and remember to be neatly. Especially in aristocracy, children aretrained to be gentle and elegant at such a young age that he or she wouldalways behave(behaves) in the way that aristocrat does. People are always pretending tolet their appearance and behavior which are reflections of what kind of personthey are or which class they are in be more pleasant.
例子不错!
Albeit the appearances are the trulyreflection of people’s heart and soul of the society, could we really tell theideas and values, the inner qualities of the society , only through superficialanalysis with people’s appearance and behavior? Definitely, it’s not enough. “Values and ideas are related to the norms of aculture. Norms are rules for behavior in specific situations, while valuesidentify what should be judged as good or evil. Different cultures reflectdifferent values. Culture needs innerobservation like knowledge, belief, and behavior that depends upon the capacity for symbolic thought and social learning to get a fully understanding. And that kind of symbolic thought and sociallearning is not what we could get through observing the appearance and behaviorof the people.
这段讲的有点空泛.给个例子会好些。
On balance, it is too simple-minded for thespeaker to have the idea that one can tell social ideas and values only throughobserving the appearance and behavior of its people. If things go that simple, what is the use for studying sociology and anthropology?
总体不错,没有什么语法错误,用词也比较好,要是有更加深入的阐述会更好.

sola-nanaUID: 2744594

改rose

ROse_MaryUID: 2790464

Every society has its own style.这句话是说社会，下面一句马上说people有点急。 We can learn some people by the way people look, dress, and act but there are some people that are not what they look like. We can learn a society by its people’s attitude and interest but other factor should also be taken into account to learn a society completely and deeply.

Most people are just what they look like because people’s behavior can easily reflect their characteristics. Firstly, if a person’s eyes shine firmly, he must be 说一定会不会绝对了？a man with great perseverance. In contrast, we can not imagine a person with dim eyesight can be vigorous. Secondly, we can judge whether a person is rich by his dressing because rich people care much about their clothes. Besides, religions can be easily told when looking at people’s dressing. 真的吗？我觉得也就伊斯兰教比较容易分别把，但是基督教和天主教你能区别吗？Thirdly, the walking pace of a person reflects his pace in life. A person who often walks fast must be a person who is living an efficient life. In the same way, people may be living a comfortable life with a slow walking pace.感觉这一段，你有时候用must，有时候用may，我觉得用most probably比较好，就是“很有可能”。例子也有些牵强，走路快并不一定说明生活是efficient的，有可能只是这个人性子急而已。

However, sometimes we can not judge a person by his appearance. 这样说就和上面的must矛盾了，所以must还是改掉比较好。There are some people who want to show something different or just put themselves in a special way for a certain purpose. 展开论述感觉还不够，就急着例子了，有点模板化了For example, a poor man may want to pretend that his living conditions are not so poor to his father-in-law in the future. So he may just dress luxuriously, just acting as if he is the single son of a millionaire. Another example is that many white-collars always wear a suit all day long because they are required to do that. We can hardly know what their real personality is if a lot of people dress almost the same.

In addition, 又觉得这里话锋转的有点快~what we should keep in mind is that people’ appearance is just one factor to judge a society’s ideas and values. It is neither the only one nor the most important. 前两句可以并起来~Besides people’s ideas, there are some other crucial factors. Firstly, the economic standard of a society can decide the ideas and values of it. One of the main reasons is that people will consider other things after ensuring a fundamental living standard. If most people in a society are living under the average level, they will hardly consider other things because the basic needs are not met. Secondly, the conditions of the whole environment, such as the buildings of a society are also indicators of the ideas and values of a certain society. Thirdly, the laws and the education systems can reveal the ideas and values of the society as well.

In conclusion, the appearance and behavior of people in a society can almost reflect people’s attitude and interest but there are some exceptions. And we can almost learn the ideas and values of our society by people’s attitude but other factors can not be neglected.
呵呵~的确如你所说的那样，罗列观点和例子的现象比较严重。按照你的结构来看，中间三个观点是并列的，但事实上其实有主次之分的，我觉得你可以着重讲第二点，也可以讲第三点，但是现在看完全就是三段一样的重要，说society那段还有点带过的感觉，这就没有坐到分析题目的complexity，题里面社会应该是关键词吧！
我自己也写不好，也不知道自己分析的对不对，见笑了！~相互学习~O(∩_∩)O~

weaselUID: 2739489

On one hand, it is admittedly that theway people dress, look and behavior can reveal the social ideology and valuesystem to a large extent. According to our common sense that people who usuallywear sports clothes like to do sports, and people who usually wear professionalsuit like to socialize with colleagues and friends. We need to consider nofurther than French people who like to wear characteristically, obviously theirromance and cultural diversity are revealed from the dressing; it is the samewith women in Arabic countries whose hood on head represents their conservativeand reserved attitude in public.
We can also witness the characters ofsocial value and ideas through people’s behaviors in daily life, even the mostordinary one---greeting.
When friends meet in America, they willtreat their friends with tremendous enthusiasm, greet passionately, smilebrightly and even with a big hug; while in England, people tend to be moreconventional and reserved, they stand away from their friends with distance,greet indifferently, with few smile on face and keep sound low; they repelintimate body contact and emphasize the individual privacy.
On the other hand, we need to considerthe inaccuracy of the information told by people’s dressing and actions forthey would be influenced by the personal rights, freedom as well as theinfluence from public opinion on their behaviors. The extent of democracy andliberty of a society can considerably affect people’s daily talks, looks anddress. In autocratic or thought-dominated society,…… A strikingexample is America……..Another factor we need to consider is the influence ofmainstream power on some non-mainstream thought which is also a indispensiblepart of social ideology.

People’s look, dress and action, in thefinal analysis, is the ostensible phenomenon of a society, only by discoveringthe profound essence, the customs, value systems, ideology and so forth, can wetruly understand more deeper of a society. History is one of the bestperspectives to further discover. History helps tocultivate our own distinctive cultural and national identity which is just likea brand, once entitled, can never be got rid of. Only by studying the historicalreasons of the contradiction in territory, politics and religion, can weunderstand the reason of intensive and permanent conflict between Israel andPalestine; only by learning the arduous and rough history in America, can weunderstand the advocacy of freedom and equality in modern society; only bylearning the geographic conditions around China --- Himalaya mountains,plateaus, grasslands and oceans which lead to the isolation andself-satisfaction of Chinese for thousands of years, can we understand thepolicy of closing the door to outside world and the miserable fate to becolonized in modern history.