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本帖最后由 梦想在路上 于 2010-5-25 18:09 编辑
According to the statement, the speaker claims that all faculty should spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach, for the purpose of improving the quality of instruction at the college and university level. Although it has some merit from a normative standpoint, in my view, it has certain negative influences and is not suitable for all professions.
To begin with, the speaker’s assertion that some applied academic fields can enhance the quality of instruction to some extent, by required teachers engaging in working outside the academic world, for two respects. On the one hand, the engagement of working outside the academic world can spur faculty to developing and innovating in their professions. Consider, for example, the field of sewage treatment technology. Professors involving in daily operation of local sewage treatment plant can more easily discover problems and focus on researching more effective and economic treatment processor. On the other hand, teachers can design contents of courses combined with actual needs of society, helping students better prepared for future careers in their professional fields, such as computer science, business and management, biological engineering and the like.
However, I cannot totally agree with the speaker’s assertion because it seems to ignore several passive influences of spending time working outside the academic world. First, apparently, outside tasks are so time and energy consuming that teachers are surely distracted from normal teaching and researching works and lead to the deterioration of the instruction’s quality instead. A telling example of this involves that professors majored in computer science in my university. They would like to pay more attention on projects of companies with rich rewards rather than students in classes, which directly causing the lesser competition of those students compared with others. Secondly, spending too much time working outside the professional academic fields may obstruct the perspective of these realms, as the frontmost theories and technologies are not in the realm of producing but in the realm of researching. Only those mature researching results can be applied in manufacturing industries.
Finally, and perhaps the most important, the speaker unfairly suggests that all professions are suitable for participating outside tasks. Nonetheless it is unnecessarily to compel certain professors, for instance, majored in the realms of fundamental or purely theoretical subjects, to engage in outside works. For some fundamental subjects,such as mathematics, physics, chemistry and so on, with the purpose of gaining results of academic researching rather than application and preparing students better logical capabilities, cannot effectively benefit from outside engagements on the enhancements of no matter professors themselves or the instructional qualities. For some purely theoretical subjects,such as literature, astronomy, physiology, history and linguistics, it is hardly to find suitable outside areas for their practices because of irrelevant to actual living and production. Therefore, it is too arbitrary for the speaker to claim that all teachers should engage in such extra outside works relevant to their professions.
In sum, I concede that the practices in relevant professions have advantages for certain kinds of academic areas. However, in a sense the speaker overrates the importance of such practices and overlooks several negative effects and general applicability. And from what have been discussed above, we may safely reach the conclusion that the speaker should encourage faculty to participate in outside professional tasks in the terms of actual needs.
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According to the statement, the speaker claims that all faculty should spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach for the purpose of improving the quality of instruction at the college and university level. Although it has some merit from a normative standpoint, in my view, it has certain negative influences and is not suitable for all professions.
To begin with, the speaker’s assertion that the quality of instruction of some applied academic fields, to some extent, can be enhanced by requiring faculty to be engaged in working outside the academic world, for two respects. On the one hand, the engagement of working outside the academic world can spur faculty to develop and innovate in their professions. Consider, for example, the field of sewage treatment technology. Professors involving in daily operation of local sewage treatment plant can more easily discover problems and focus on researching more effective and economic treatment processor. On the other hand, teachers can design contents of courses combined with actual needs of society, helping students better prepared for future careers in their professional fields, such as computer science, business and management, biological engineering and the like. Those courses can not only enhance the students’ interests of learning, but also cultivate their abilities of linking theoretic knowledge and actual application.
However, I cannot totally agree with the speaker’s assertion because it seems to ignore several passive influences of spending time working outside the academic world. Firstly, apparently, outside tasks are so time-consuming and energy-consuming that teachers are surely distracted from normal teaching and researching works, which mightily lead to the deterioration of the instruction’s quality instead. A telling example of this involves that professors majored in computer science in my university. They would like to pay more attention on projects of companies with rich rewards rather than students in classes, which directly cause the lesser competitive power of those students compared with others. Secondly, spending too much time working outside the professional academic fields may obstruct the perspective of these realms, as the frontmost theories and technologies are not in the realm of producing but in the realm of researching. Only those mature researching results can be applied in manufacturing industries.
Finally, and perhaps the most important, the speaker unfairly suggests that all professions are suitable for participating outside tasks. Nonetheless it is unnecessarily to compel certain professors, for instance, majored in the realms of fundamental or purely theoretical subjects, to engage in outside works. For some fundamental subjects,such as mathematics, physics, chemistry and so on, with the purpose of gaining results of academic researching rather than application and preparing students better logical capabilities, cannot effectively benefit from outside engagements on the enhancements of no matter professors themselves or the instructional qualities. For some purely theoretical subjects,such as literature, astronomy, physiology, history and linguistics, it is hardly to find suitable outside areas for their practices because those subjects are most irrelevant to actual living and production. Therefore, it is too arbitrary for the speaker to claim that all teachers should engage in such extra outside works relevant to their professions.
In sum, I concede that the practices in relevant professions have advantages for certain kinds of academic areas. However, in a sense the speaker overrates the importance of such practices and overlooks several negative effects and general applicability. And from what have been discussed above, we may safely reach the conclusion that the speaker should encourage faculty to participate in outside professional tasks in the terms of actual needs.
谢谢agnes,很辛苦啊,这么晚还帮我改,改的很仔细啊!很受用的~\(≧▽≦)/~
你的第一个问题:那个表达方式我是从其他地方看来的
第二个我是想表达:最后,同时也是最重要的
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非常非常感谢creative大牛的细致修改,受益匪浅!
你的评语,真是让我受宠若惊。我想我会把它当做是对我的鼓励,因为我自己知道花了多久才憋出来这些个句子,又花了多久查字典修改,居然还有那么多低级语法错误,简直汗颜。我知道自己还有很长一段路要走,我会继续努力,一步一步,总有一天触及属于我的那片天。
According to the statement, the speaker claims that all faculty should spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach, for the purpose of improving the quality of instruction at the college and university level. Although it has some merit from a normative standpoint, in my view, it has certain negative influences and is not suitable for all professions.
To begin with, the speaker’s assertion that some applied academic fields can enhance the quality of instruction to some extent, by requiring teachers to engage in working outside the academic world, for two respects. On the one hand, the engagement of working outside the academic world can spur faculty to developing and innovating in their professions. Consider, for example, the field of sewage treatment technology. Professors involving [involved] in daily operation of local sewage treatment plant can more easily discover problems and focus on researching more effective and economic treatment processes. On the other hand, teachers can design the contents of their courses combined [combining] with actual needs of society, helping students better prepared for future careers in their professional fields, such as computer science, business and management, biological engineering and the like. Those courses can not only enhance the students’ interests of learning, but also cultivate their abilities of linking theoretic knowledge and actual application.
//请教creative大牛,比较了你帮我指出的这两处错,很晕很糊涂。到底虾米情况下应该用ed,虾米时候用ing的呀?⊙﹏⊙b汗
However, I cannot totally agree with the speaker’s assertion because it seems to ignore several passive influences of spending time working outside the academic world. First, apparently, outside tasks are so all consuming that the teachers are surely distracted from normal teaching and researching works and lead [leads]
【不知道为什么这么改?改成[, which leads]是否更合适?】to the deterioration of the instruction’s quality instead. A telling example of this involves that professors majored in computer science in my university. They would like to pay more attention on projects supported by commercial companies with rich rewards rather than students in classes, which directly causing the weaker competitiveness of their
students compared with that of others. Secondly, spending too much time working outside the professional academic fields may obstruct the perspective of these realms, as the forefronts of theories and technologies are not in the realm of producing but in the realm of researching. Only those mature researching results can be applied in manufacturing industries.
Finally, and perhaps the most significantly, the speaker unfairly suggests that all professions are suitable for participating outside tasks. Nonetheless it is unnecessarily to compel certain professors, for instance, majored in the realms of fundamental or purely theoretical subjects, to engage in outside works. For some fundamental subjects,such as mathematics, physics, chemistry and so on, with the purpose of gaining results of academic researching rather than application and training students’ better intelligence as well as capacities for logical, rational and analytic thought, such outside engagements cannot effectively benefit neither professors themselves nor the instructional qualities at all. For some purely theoretical subjects,such as literature, astronomy, physiology, history and linguistics, it is hard to find suitable outside areas for their practices on account of irrelevant to actual lives and productions. Therefore, it is too arbitrary for the speaker to claim that all teachers should engage in such extra outside works that are relevant to their professions.
In sum, I concede that the practices in relevant professions have advantages for certain kinds of academic areas. However, in a sense the speaker overrates the importance of such practices and overlooks several negative effects and general feasibilities. And from what have been discussed above, we may safely reach the conclusion that the speaker should encourage faculty [faculties] to participate in outside professional tasks in the terms of actual circumstances.
//关于faculty有点疑问,查了下 faculty属于复数类集体名词,题目中就直接用了“all faculty”,但是它也有复数形式faculties,难道两种都可以?糊涂了,望指教。
P.S. 不lazy啊,lazy还帮人改作文,O(∩_∩)O~
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