I130，第一篇，请大家帮帮忙

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"How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."


Have we not still learned how to raise children, as a result, the development of society will become better? The speaker thinks so, but I do not agree with him in some aspects. It is seems that the children need
a surrounding to communicate and mix with the society, and to learn the culture of the world, even if it is necessary, the speaker asserts that we do not know how to cultivate the next generation to make society better is unconvinced.

On the one hand, I concede that unless child knows more about the world, the children can not mix with the society, and the society can not have a better future That is to say, someday the children will grow up and become one part of the society. Thus, what they do will influence the destiny of the society directly. For example, the responsibility for society How much this responsibility they have will determine the development Moreover, just like how to cross the road, what rules we should abide for. If we do not inform our next generation concerning that, they can not integrate into and communicate smoothly with the world. Just imagine, if a children do not know a culture of a city, just as religion, when he forbid the rule of the religion, which one can toe the mark, and what influence the child will take for the city, even could the city become a better one like we anticipate. In sum, children, as a part of the society , how much integrate into the world—socialization—will due to the world have a better future.

However, it is unaccepted that the second conclusion made by speaker; we do know how educate children. First of all, how to define the better society, it is perhaps the world has a peaceful future, the nature could have a circular development, or the all kinds of culture could be reserve and so on. Clearly, the entire hypothesis we proposed is what we anticipate all the time. For instance, china, a developing country, which national policy is sustainable development. And the basic education in china is always insisting in it. Hence, not only do we know how to make the world better, but we know how to educate the next generation all the time.

Finally, Cultivating our next generation is a comprehensive interaction.
That is to say, the “us” proposed by author should include the family, the school, and the medium and so on. While, so many ingredients in this interaction, we can not hastily say we could control. Let us think about, when such a process, a child growing up, it is so many information he or she would receive. Scholarship they learned from teachers make them eruditely, rite learned from family get them in the favor of others and so on. On account for all of this, we can not hastily say we can control this process to help bring about a better society.

To sum up, still, it is true that on some aspects how the children in current world are socialized determine the destiny of the world
While without considering the reason that the factors influence the education is divers, how to raise children who can help bring about a better society is not necessary.

29shalouUID: 2784805

非常感谢你的帮助，但是我不太理解那个development become better 的问题
然后最后那一个错误不是宾语从句吗？
谢谢 2# ypnxcat

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我猜啊，那个development became better的问题是不是因为development本身就含有better的意味，我查了韦大宝，基本上都是正面的描写，(ag.to make active or promote the growth of  (from韦氏 )）所以和better就重复了，也许二楼是这个意思吧。

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谢谢 4# xyq078322