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发表于 2010-6-8 10:27:05 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
69. "Government should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and development"



I strongly agree with the assertion that government should place fewer restrictions on science research and development, which are critical to the progress of society and human beings as a whole .My points of view toward this contention are listed as follows.

As we review history, we can see how profoundly science has fashioned our lives. In agriculture, with the introduction of mechanization, and various technologies to promote the production of produce, the burdens of the struggle for survival were lessened. In industry, with Industry Evolution and technology innovations, such as steam engine and assembly line manufacturing, workers are freed from much burdensome labor. Besides, tele-communication tools such as the mobile phone, fax and Internet, which have increasingly replaced written records, have become the major means of communication. It is the Internet that we can make our works more effective and convenient by surfing Internet and getting the latest information as well as taking part in on-line chatting room. Therefore, without the development and research in science, our society cannot be on current stage.

It is known to all that all disciplines are interrelated.
The natural science should pay attention to studying more social sciences and similarly it is of great importance for the social sciences to emphasize the consequence of natural science. Only by absorbing the merits of each side, can they make original breakthrough. For instance, in the 17th century, Newton found the law of refraction which let people understood the nature of light forming, and then it inspired the start of Impressionism in art. Moreover, all subjects in natural science or social science are interrelated as well. For instance, without the knowledge of mathematics, chemists cannot make any advancement in chemistry and physicists cannot launch the satellites into the universe, let alone that we now enjoy the convenience and comfort of communication and live TV.

If government put too much restriction on scientific research and development, then there would be no progress in those fields and our society would be still. Some may argue that at least some fields should be restricted by government, not the all. As discussed above, however, all science, they are interrelated and are indispensible for each other's development and creativity. The government should encourage scientists to create more knowledge actively and give more freedom to all science, instead of restricting them.

In sum, all sciences are collaborative and interrelated, which are the original sources to promote the quality of our lives and push the history to move forward. Therefore, there should be fewer restrictions on scientific research and development from government.
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发表于 2010-6-8 11:34:59 |只看该作者
如果要我打分,我会打3.5-4左右。模板的痕迹比较严重。
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匿名用户 发表于 2010-6-8 11:42:18
喜欢用模板的人大概是没有发现,模板的字句一般来说相对地道华丽一点,而你们自己写的字句通常chinglish一点,表意有时也不够清晰。这两种字句之间的差距越大,你的分数也就越低。

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喜欢用模板的人大概是没有发现,模板的字句一般来说相对地道华丽一点,而你们自己写的字句通常chinglish一点,表意有时也不够清晰。这两种字句之间的差距越大,你的分数也就越低。
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喜欢用模板的人大概是没有发现,模板的字句一般来说相对地道华丽一点,而你们自己写的字句通常chinglish一点,表意有时也不够清晰。这两种字句之间的差距越大,你的分数也就越低。
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我都懒的说出你是谁了。。。。。话说AW这种东西,我觉得提建议+打分就行了,一字一句帮别人修改是不可能的。对他自己也未必好。
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本帖最后由 江雪 于 2010-6-8 12:07 编辑

一般AW作文都是结对互改或是在修改铺里修改。

大概是结构、语言、逻辑这几部分。

很少直接评分。

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2)考生在考场上抽到什么题目、发挥得如何都会影响分数。

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一般AW作文都是结对互改或是在修改铺里修改。

大概是结构、语言、逻辑这几部分。

很少直接评分。

不评分的原因是:

1)可能不够客观;
2)考生在考场上抽到什么题目、发挥得如何都会影响分数。
江雪 发表于 2010-6-8 12:06


so ga......离我考G已经好久了
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发现你作文一篇:lol
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刚删了。。。。避免留下证据。。。。。
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发表于 2010-6-9 14:58:35 |只看该作者
:D ,谢谢了!不过我没有用模板,都是我自己写的。难道结构化的开头和结尾也属于模板范畴吗? 2# alexanderhe

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