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发表于 2010-6-15 18:15:49 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
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老师是否应该表达自己的政治立场:
Teachers should not make their social or political view known to students, do you agree or not, explain why.(09.03.27)

Most people are lucky enough to receive education. People are educated by wiser ones, which is what we call teachers. As a consequence, the knowledge people gained from teachers is the basement of our intellegence. When people are in primary stage education, teachers are playing a necessary role to make them form their own ideology systerm. So the social or political view which teachers hold my have huge influence on students, which is not fair. Because students may easily believe in everything the teacher says due to their un-mature logic.
Teachers surly burden the responsibility to educate and teach students knowledges. However, a distinct difference cannot be ignored, which is teachers are on duty to guide students to think, not to instill knowledge by forcibly. Of course, teachers’ social and political view should not be expressed to students. Most sudents haven’t been equiped with critical thoughts, and which is the very reason they should receive education. The disparity between a prominent educator and mediocre educator is whether their students reach the goal to think independently and criticaly. So teachers should avoid the probility of influence student’s opinions, and social and political view usually delegates a person’s view towards the world and life, which should be unique for every person is different.
No absolute ture or false exists in the world, everything is comparative right and wrong. When it comes to social and social opinions, distinct views will surly present. Teachers should never take the advantage of their senior positions to deprive students from the right to think independently and chose their own standpoint.
Teachers ought to assist students to think, other than impart what they know to students derectly. So that a knowledge system organises, which is the spinal cord of education.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
It is better to spend money on traveling and vacation than to save money for the future?(09.03.14)

In nowadays, in the majority people’s eyes, working means money, money means happy. With money, people are more confident in fufilling their goals and dreams. However, a divergence appears on how to spend the money they earned. Vacations or conserving for the future of an emergency.

An eaual importance of the function of money is sometimes ignored by people- relaxation. Hard working is indispensable in people’s daily routine life as it is, to this very point, how to relax ourselves is a vital part in the working efficiency. Hence, though spending money on travling and vacation, people are relived from tight workload in a short time span, then refueld before they retart their work. Tothe identical point, people are educated and widen their horizons from the beautiful scenery and various experience from the vacation. Life is short, we have limited time to appreciate the beaty of nature. We posses the ability of enjoying the aesthetics presented by natural surroundings, so why not just take advantages of our instinctive intelligence.


People are desperate for all kinds of substance to lead a well life. Clothes, foods, educations, medical services and so on. So at this circumstance, most people are still chose to conserve money, caused by the uncertain feelings of future. However, people However, are we sometimes too anxious about the coming days? It is ture that incidents may happen to every person in every method, but a recent research also shows that the probability of accident is low. We can totally manage it by purchasing certain insurance. What’s more, money is also unsafe which we reserve. The same research also shows money will face depreciate due to the inflation. People are often regret not having spent money.

We are able to make money, we are certainly able to enjoy ourselves with the money we earned. Then we are stimulated to work harder and more effeciency, which contribute to the development in whaterever personal meaning or social aspect.

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我等级还不够,上传不了word。。。咋办。。。。? 4# hjhjhj1984

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我等级还不够,上传不了word。。。咋办。。。。? 4# hjhjhj1984
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Nothing in the world can take the place of Persistence. Persistence and determination alone are omnipotent.
不要去等待幸运的降临,在你可以努力的每一分钟都做出最大的努力,你才能真正把握自己的命运。在等待中焦虑的人最后获得的永远是失望。

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发表于 2010-7-1 22:36:47 |只看该作者
本帖最后由 ilovelss 于 2010-7-1 22:46 编辑

Making choice and decision is ubiquitous in our daily life. We all think it carefully to ensure that we have made the right choice. Someone may fall into a dilemma on how to make decisions. After considering all aspects, the merits of making decisions by ourselves outweigh by others. Some important points will be stated below.

We are familiar that there cannot be two identical leaves in world, which means every situation is distinct. As a result, the problem and difficult circumstance we confront will not be totally understood by others, even our most intimidate friends. Hence, if we rely on others to make a decision for ourselves, the solution may not be the optimization. People are mental animals, we cannot avoid being subjective, some personal feelings and views will certainly be reflected on the decisions or the choice. So comprehensive as it is that the decisions made by others, thinking gaps still exist all the time. We, who know the situation most clearly, should be the deciders other than passive receivers on making our decisions.

When we are making choice and decisions, our brain is in highly active condition. The process we try to find a solution is also a process we learn how to think independently, which is critical to our logical cogitation. Dating back to the history, it is not hard to find that the famous people, such as Einstein, President Lincoln, stock expert Warren Buffett,which are differnt fields but possess the same ability- thinking independenly and making choice by themselves. We admire them not only for their itelligence but also their confidence, which lead them to success.

Someone may still on the opposite, for most people can afford to have their own adviser, so they still ignore the necessity to make choice by themselves. However, in come certain situations, we are not allowed to think deeply and carefully due to the time limitation. What would you do when your house is on fire? What would you do when you get lost in an strange place? What would you do when you are envolved in an emergency, car accidents for example. We have to face the problem, even it might never happen to you, but which do exist in widespread area. The ability to make a decision is critical for all of us.

That is not to say we have to be arbitrary. Other’s opinion is also helpful, we can take a comprehensive view on the situation. But we have to clarify what is priority and what is secondary. We can ask for advice but we have to think independently and make the decision by ourselve in end.
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发表于 2010-7-2 22:20:42 |只看该作者
你的作文我明天中午之前改好传给你哈,不好意思哦!!

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发表于 2010-7-3 20:24:21 |只看该作者
我对不起你,我电脑坏了,送去修了,最快明天能拿回来,
我今天还是不能把改的给你,对不起哈:dizzy:

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10# 闪闪硕硕 好的

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发表于 2010-7-4 15:45:22 |只看该作者
改好了,
看了你的作文我都开始崇拜你了,呵呵,不是说有个什么可以贴优秀作文的帖子吗
我问问,然后把你的贴上去,供大家瞻仰~~:loveliness:
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发表于 2010-7-4 16:07:33 |只看该作者
远还没到优秀啊~~~~!   我上次给一个人改,那个人说我是不是认真在写,要我重写再给他看。我明明是认真写的。。。哭。。。。 12# 闪闪硕硕

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本帖最后由 ilovelss 于 2010-7-8 22:53 编辑

Students would receive a better, effective education if they were required to attend classes for 11 months of a year.

We all have the right to receive formal educations, we treasure the value of knowledge which make us intelligent wisdom and sensible. Under no circumstances should we quit being educated. Of course, teachers are playing vital roles in our way to be educated. Then a diverge rised, someone hold the opinion that students should spend more time in schools so that they can learn better and more effective. Important as it is being taught in schools, prolong school time never means a more effective way of study.

Usually, three months’ time holidays exsit in one school year. During the time, students are free of school, they can do whatever they want. But some parents are worried their children would become idle and lazy that they would be bored of study. Indeed what they have worried is unnecessary. One important factor they have ignored, students are capable enough to take advantage of their time. Without routine school life, they are more active to arrange their spare time. For an instance, if a student is good at Month however he/she is bad at History, he could use his spare time on history study to upgrade his/her history score. And it has being proven that people could learn more effectively when they are a active leaner than being a passive receiver. And knowledge means seeking, we will never know the essence except we looking for the truth by ourselves.


Due to the time and room limitation, what students have learned in classes can't be totally understood because of lacking of enough practice. Thinking about chemistry and physics , the courses are so abstract. Without practise and experiments, students rely on mechanical memory. However, how can the remember stuffs be equal to knowledges? That’s the gist of holidays. Try to think about the scene, we can quickly be packed and start out for a trip, to learn natrual scenery. The plants and animals we have learned in biology class can be encountered during the trip. And the mountains and caves we seen are the best examples in our geology classes. Students are able to change their remember stuffs into knowledges because of using the spare time to experience by themselves, no lerning methods can be compared to that way.

Backing to the basic function of holidays, is for relaxation. During 4 consecutive month’ term in school, students really need to have a rest, which will help students to incrrease their learning efficiency in turn. Important as classes are, for it is the resource of knowledge we get. If the knowledge is detached from practice, the knowledge will surely be forgotten some day. So that is the significance of holidays, not only can students take a good rest, but also practise what they have learned in classes, then re-fuled and make preparations for next semester.
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本帖最后由 空空仔 于 2010-7-9 20:42 编辑

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Students would receive a better, effective education if they were required to attend classes for 11 months of a year.

We all have the right to receive formal educations, (and) we treasure the value of knowledge which make us intelligent wisdom (intelligently wise) and sensible. (独立的两句子间必须用连词连接)Under no circumstances should we quit being educated. Of course, teachers are playing vital roles in our way to be educated. Then a diverge (divergence) rise, someone hold the opinion that students should spend more time in schools so that they can learn better and more effective. Important as it is being taught in schools, prolong(prolonging) school time never means a more effective way of study.

Usually, three months’ time holidays (有点chingish… 3-month holidays就可以了) exsit in one school year. During the time, students are free of school, (and) they can do whatever they want. But some parents are worried their children would become soidle and lazy that they would be bored of study (不加so, 这句从句修饰什么?). Indeed what they have worried is unnecessary. One important factor they have ignored, students are capable enough to take advantage of their time. Without routine school life, they are more active to arrange their spare time. For an instance, if a student is good at Month= =math? however( but合适) he/she is bad at History, he could use his spare time on history study to upgrade his/her history score. And it has being proven that people could learn more effectively when they are a anactive leaner than being a passive receiver. And knowledge means seeking, (and) we will never know the essence except we looking (look) for the truth by ourselves.


Due to the time and room limitation, what students have learned in classes can't be totally understood because of lacking of (lackn.时,
搭配是lack of; v.时无需加介词) enough practice. Thinking about chemistryand physics, the courses are so abstract. (courses显然不能作出think这个动作吧) Without practice and experiments, students rely on mechanical memory. However, how can the remember stuffs ( 记的东西?rememberv.)be equal to knowledges (knowledge)? That’s the gist of holidays. Try to think about the scene, we can quickly be packed and start out for a trip, to learn natrual naturalscenery. The plants and animals we have learned in biology class can be encountered during the trip. And the mountains and caves we haveseen are the best examples in our geology classes. Students are able to change their remember stuffs into knowledges (knowledge) because of using the spare time to experience by themselves, no learning methods can be compared to that way.

Backing to the basic function of holidays, is for relaxation. (前半句是介词短语了,病句。。。)During 4 consecutive months’ term in school, students really need to have a rest, which will help students to increase their learning efficiency in turn. Important as classes are, for it is the resource of knowledge we get. If the knowledge is detached from practice, the knowledge will surely be forgotten some day. So that is the significance of holidays, not only can students take a good rest, but also practice what (that) they have learned in classes, then re-fuel and make preparations for next semester.

不好意思,今天有事改晚了。。。
仔细一些吧~否则考试时候写错多可惜
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We all have the right to receive formal educations, we treasure the value of knowledge which make(s) us intelligent wisdom and sensible. Under no circumstances should we quit being educated. Of course, teachers are playing vital roles in our way to be educated. Then a diverge rised, someone hold the opinion that students should spend more time in schools so that they can learn better and more effective. Important as it is being taught in schools, prolong school time never means a more effective way of study.' i, B

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Usually, three months’ time holidays exsit in one school year. During the time, students are free of school, they can do whatever they want. But some parents are worried their children would become idle and lazy that they would be bored of study. Indeed what they have worried is unnecessary. One important factor they have ignored, students are capable enough to take advantage of their time. Without routine school life, they are more active to arrange their spare time. For an instance, if a student is good at Month however he/she is bad at History, he could use his spare time on history study to upgrade his/her history score. And it has being proven that people could learn more effectively when they are a active leaner(s) than being a passive receiver(s). And knowledge means seeking, we will never know the essence except we looking for the truth by ourselves.
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Due to the time and room limitation, what students have learned in classes can't be totally understood because of lacking of enough practice. Thinking about chemistry and physics , the courses are so abstract. Without practise and experiments, students rely on mechanical memory. However, how can the remember stuffs be equal to knowledges? That’s the gist of holidays. Try to think about the scene, we can quickly be packed and start out for a trip, to learn natrual scenery. The plants and animals we have learned in biology class can be encountered during the trip. And the mountains and caves we seen are the best examples in our geology classes. Students are able to change their remember stuffs into knowledges because of using the spare time to experience by themselves, no lerning methods can be compared to that way.
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Backing to the basic function of holidays, is for relaxation. During 4 consecutive month’ term in school, students really need to have a rest, which will help students to incrrease their learning efficiency in turn. Important as classes are, for it is the resource of knowledge we get. If the knowledge is detached from practice, the knowledge will surely be forgotten some day. So that is the significance of holidays, not only can students take a good rest, but also practise what they have learned in classes, then re-fuled and make preparations for next semester.


看得比较粗嘿嘿,感觉段落间的逻辑关系不够强,每一段缺主题句,没有鲜明的结尾段。托福作文其实还是八股比较吃香吧可能嘿嘿,个人意见^^。

PS.俺的word贴上啦^^

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