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本帖最后由 jjooyy 于 2010-7-9 15:11 编辑
The occurrence of economy tsunami started from the bankruptcy of Lehmans Brothers update the competition in the job market all over the world. In order to meet more strict needs from those employers(employees), most of us would like to pay much more attention to education we received. Beneath such a circumstance, some people hold the opinion that students should receive a better education if they were required to attend for 11-months-semester, which buttress values that the more time spend at class, the higher quality of education it would be. Moreover(是转折吧), when those hidden factors are carefully taken into consideration, they may find that actually it is little bit ridiculous to agree with them. That is, personally speaking, I am not in favor of their opinion.$ W5 m# N: U, f) { ?
First and foremost, time is not a reliable element to maintain the quality of education. Take myself as a example. When I was preparing my final examinations, the library was just like my ‘second dormitory’, namely I spent nearly 10 hours on reviewing. However, I was not concentrated on my major courses, instead, I always thought about where I would like to travel with my parents during the summer vacation. The consequence that I did not get a ideal scores is as I expected. Such a unpleasant memory gave a lesson to me that the more time you spent do not mean better results.(总觉得有点怪!)
Secondly, individuals need to take a break so that they can keep energetic. Just as those mechanic theories exhibited in books, if you want to make use of your machines operates\ well(make use of &operate, delete one!), sufficient time is needed for them to have a break. It also works on individuals. Without sufficient time to take a rest, it is impossible for anyone to keep on working efficiently. Once they are lack of rest, neither their efficiency nor enthusiasm on study will be wore out.(wonderful!)
From another perspective, education is a word with broad contents, which include not only classes given by school. We are also nurtured by those education provided out of classes, such as communication with our(their) friends or families. Once those time are occupied by attending classes, there will be no time left for them to study other things from vivid(?) life, which is of relatively high possibility to cause a lack of essential skills for those kids to enjoy a colorful, joyful and meaningful life. Lonely, cold-blooded and selfish persons will be the products of this kind of education.
To sum up, when those factors anglicized(英国化?) above are taken into consideration, one can easily deduce the conclusion that it is a unwise choice to force students to attend 11-month-class. Instead, schools are welcomed to offer proper time arrangement to maintain a better, effective and high-profile education for our next generation.
恩 lz注意句式杂糅,a&an的区别,还有,有拿到word里面 语法检查吗?我没看你的word版。。
第一次返回托福作文,还没调整过来,有问题可以讨论哦~
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