欢乐拍作文小组----issue 138

crazyjooUID: 2805124

TOPIC: ISSUE138 - "Only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress."
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  The speaker asserts that only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress. I fundamentally agree with this claim for two reasons. Firstly, it is accord with our personal experience. Secondly, it can be applied to all areas of human endeavor, that is to say, mistake is the very foundation upon which our society advances.

   As the American businessman, H.J.Kaiser says ''Trouble is only opportunity in work clothes''. Understandably, mistakes play an indispensible role in our growth. Although no one want to make mistake and thus most people regard mistake as a troublesome and annoying event. However, should we abhor mistake since it appears intended to be a totally negative factor? In my observation, it's highly impractical and naive to do so, given the fact that our daily lives are teem with anthropogenic mistakes. In this respect, we should try to find its merit rather than to dispute it all the time. In fact, I did not see the merit in mistake until my parents asked me to create a mistake-collection book when I was in grade four. At that time, I was troubling with my math homework, not to mention the more pressing math exams. Every time I made a mistake, I just simply turned to my classmates who are generally good at math for help .Unfortunately , I  consistently made the same mistake in exams on the basis that I underplayed the my mistakes right after I got the correct answers from my classmates. Later, I reluctantly accepted my parents' suggestion, that is to say, writing down all mistakes I had ever made in math to a book with a funny name-----mistake-collections. Surprisingly, I had made big progress since I began to collect my mistakes and analyze them carefully. Why I make this mistake? Can I avoid making the same mistake next time? By asking myself such questions I find out what is unworkable and hence I can amend my ideas and finally approach to the right solutions. It seems to me that my own mistakes help improve my critical thinking and comprehensive analyzing to a far greater extend than the correct solutions afford by my classmates.

The same principle can be also applied to scientific research. The research is an exploration of unknown for true answers to our question, and for lasting solutions to our enduring problems. However, it is almost impossible to find such a lasting solution in scientific area. With the rapid development and people's further understanding of a specific scientific project. It is not uncommon to see that many once correct principles are proven to be ill-conceived and limited ones. One apt illustration of this point involves the three physical laws created by Essiac Newton. These three laws set the foundation of modern physical research since a myriad of other physical law or principle are deduced from them and countless physical experiments essentially are reflections of themselves. They dominated the physical academic area  until the presence of Albert Einstein ,who render his 'Relativity'' theory, claiming that though the big threes are generally plausible in most situation, however, their practicality and functionality become dubious when it comes to the research in micro world. The people who against the speaker might argue that it is Einstein, the mistake discoverer, ravages the well-established the entire physical knowledge structure. Conversely, as it turns out, it is Einstein who discovers the hidden flaws in the physical knowledge structure make it more comprehensive and convincing. In other words, only through a fallen of an old principle can there be new discoveries and more robust principles.

In sum, the speaker correctly asserts that it's through mistake that discovery and progress are made. We humans, make a strip to the truth whenever we realize a mistake we had made.

德芬郡奶油UID: 2843869

The speaker asserts that only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress. I fundamentally agree with this claim for two reasons. Firstly, it is accord with our personal experience. Secondly, it can be applied to all areas of human endeavor, that is to say, mistake is the very foundation upon which our society advances.

As the American businessman, H.J.Kaiser says ''Trouble is only opportunity in work clothes''. Understandably, mistakes play an indispensible role in our growth. Although no one want to make mistake and thus most people regard mistake as a troublesome and annoying event. However, should we abhor mistake since it appears intended to be a totally negative factor? In my observation, it's highly impractical and naive to do so, given the fact that our daily lives are teem with anthropogenic mistakes. In this respect, we should try to find its merit rather than to dispute it all the time. In fact, I did not see the merit in mistake until my parents asked me to create a mistake-collection book when I was in grade four. At that time, I was troubling with my math homework, not to mention the more pressing math exams. Every time I made a mistake, I just simply turned to my classmates who are generally good at math for help. Unfortunately, I consistently made the same mistake in exams on the basis that I underplayed the my mistakes right after I got the correct answers from my classmates. Later, I reluctantly accepted my parents' suggestion, that is to say, writing down all ()mistakes I had ever made in math to a book with a funny name-----mistake-collections. Surprisingly, I had made big progress since I began to collect my mistakes and analyze them carefully. (“)Why I make this mistake? Can I avoid making the same mistake next time?(“) By asking myself such questions I find out what is unworkable and hence I can amend my ideas and finally approach to the right solutions. It seems to me that my own mistakes help improve my critical thinking and comprehensive analyzing (analysis) to a far greater extend than the correct solutions afford by my classmates.

The same principle can be also applied to scientific research. The research is an exploration of unknown for true answers to our question, and for lasting solutions to our enduring problems. However, it is almost impossible to find such a lasting solution in scientific area. With the rapid development and people's further understanding of a specific scientific project. It is not uncommon to see that many once(-)correct principles are proven to be ill-conceived and limited ones. One apt illustration of this point involves the three physical laws created by Essiac Newton. These three laws set the foundation of modern physical research since a myriad of other physical law or principle are deduced from them and countless physical experiments essentially are reflections of themselves. They dominated the physical academic area  until the presence of Albert Einstein, who render his 'Relativity'' theory, claiming that though the big threes are generally plausible in most situation, however, their practicality and functionality become dubious when it comes to the research in micro world. The people who against the speaker might argue that it is Einstein, the mistake discoverer, ravages the well-established the entire physical knowledge structure. Conversely, as it turns out, it is Einstein who discovers the hidden flaws in the physical knowledge structure make it more comprehensive and convincing. In other words, only through a fallen of an old principle can there be new discoveries and more robust principles.

In sum, the speaker correctly asserts that it's through mistake that discovery and progress are made. We humans, make a strip to the truth whenever we realize a mistake we had made.

crazyjooUID: 2805124

2# 德芬郡奶油

感谢奶油同学。不过你的批改是什么意思啊？纯划线看不懂。。跪求解释。。

yaniiUID: 2807225

TOPIC: ISSUE138 - "Only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress."
WORDS: 627         

The speaker asserts that only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress. I fundamentally agree with this claim for two reasons. Firstly, it is accord with our personal experience. Secondly, it can be applied to all areas of human endeavor, that is to say, mistake is the very foundation upon which our society advances.（首段清晰）

  As the American businessman, H.J.Kaiser says ''Trouble is only opportunity in work clothes''. Understandably, mistakes play an indispensible role in our growth. Although no one want to make mistake and thus most people regard mistake as a troublesome and annoying event. However, should we abhor mistake since it appears intended to be a totally negative factor? In my observation, it's highly impractical and naive to do so, given the fact that our daily lives are teem with anthropogenic mistakes. In this respect, we should try to find its merit rather than to dispute it all the time. In fact, I did not see the merit in mistake until my parents asked me to create a mistake-collection book when I was in grade four. At that time, I was troubling with my math homework, not to mention the more pressing math exams. Every time I made a mistake, I just simply turned to my classmates who are generally good at math for help .Unfortunately , I  consistently made the same mistake in exams on the basis that I underplayed the my mistakes right after I got the correct answers from my classmates. Later, I reluctantly accepted my parents' suggestion, that is to say, writing down all mistakes I had ever made in math to a book with a funny name-----mistake-collections. Surprisingly, I had made big progress since I began to collect my mistakes and analyze them carefully. Why I make this mistake? Can I avoid making the same mistake next time? By asking myself such questions I find out what is unworkable and hence I can amend my ideas and finally approach to the right solutions. It seems to me that my own mistakes help improve my critical thinking and comprehensive analyzing to a far greater extend than the correct solutions afford by my classmates.（此段有些冗长，例子处可以精简一下）

The same principle can be also（换下位置） applied to scientific research. （怎么能适用，简单解释理由）The research is an exploration of unknown for true answers to our question, and for lasting solutions to our enduring problems. However, it is almost impossible to find such a lasting solution in scientific area. With the rapid development and people's further understanding of a specific scientific project. It is not uncommon to see that many once correct principles are proven to be ill-conceived and limited ones. One apt illustration of this point involves the three physical laws created by Essiac (Isaac) Newton. These three laws set the foundation of modern physical research since a myriad of other physical law or principle are deduced from them and countless physical experiments essentially are reflections of themselves. They dominated the physical academic area  until the presence of Albert Einstein ,who rendered his 'Relativity'' theory, claiming that though the big threes are generally plausible in most situation, however,(貌似前后没有转折呀) their practicality and functionality become dubious when it comes to the research in micro world. The people who against the speaker might argue that it is Einstein, the mistake discoverer, ravages the well-established the entire（entire well-established ）
physical knowledge structure. Conversely, as it turns out, it is Einstein who discovers the hidden flaws in the physical knowledge structure make(made) it more comprehensive and convincing. In other words, only through a fallen of an old principle can there be new discoveries and more robust principles.

In sum, the speaker correctly asserts that it's through mistake that discovery and progress are made. We humans, make a strip to(rid a strip of) the truth whenever we realize a mistake we had made.

二三两段貌似太长了，适当分一下层次
举例子时最好简短有力些，不要像是记述，是为了论证自己
进步很快呀，结构、语言都已经差不多了，适当强化一下好了
加油 哦！
3# crazyjoo

crazyjooUID: 2805124

4# yanii

谢谢评论！ 不过你认为我用自述性例子好么？？ 就是亲身经历

yaniiUID: 2807225

可以尝试一下呀:)
满分范文里也有不少身边的例子，名人事迹都被人写烂了，这样反而更清新