请大家帮我看看这个提纲有问题吗？

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issue3： It is more important to allocate money for immediate, existing social problems than to spend it on long-term research that might help future-generations.

提纲：
1.Admittedly, many urgent problems exist in our society. There are people starving and struggling on the margin of death. Every minute there are souls leaving us and go to God who should have been alive if we have attached a little bit more attention to and allocated some aid on them. Just a look at the photo of those African children dying of hunger and thirst will make us regret the life we are living and the materials we are enjoying now. We need to act, act to save more of them from sufferance.
2.However, can we just sacrifice the interest of the future-generations to solve the immediate problems we see now? Obviously better not.
3.Actually, the two ends don’t conflict so much.  
① Tasks for a country or a government is various, not only including those who are suffering, but also those concerning better development and better living condition. They can never sacrifice one of them for another. A powerful government has the foresight and balances the two aspects well.
②Just think, don’t those research fruits in the past help us solve the current problems? In the same way, in the future, there will appear new problems, which is likely to be solved by the research fruits achieved now. Long-term doesn’t necessarily mean ineffective or inefficient. It is not only necessary but also beneficial.
4.结论：观点是片面的，应该注重双方的发展。

自己看自己写的，老觉得思路有点怪怪的，请大家指点一下吧~~:)

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自己顶，希望看到的筒子们能回复一下啊~

lingli_xiaoaiUID: 172506

your outline seems ok to me.
this is a topic easy to elaborate. but your point one may be problematic in a sense that the point your're discussing is more like charity than solve immediate social problems. of course, if most people in a country are still fighting for food, the government clearly don't have a choice other than spending limited amount money help people to stay alive.

It make me think your topic is spending money on other countries or on your own.
only my two cents.

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3# lingli_xiaoai
真心的谢谢你：）
我明白你所说的了，谢谢姐姐~o(∩_∩)o ~

hyacinthUID: 2184492

i really like your point 2 (the one w/ a circle)

if you have good examples, it'll be an awesome essay.

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5# hyacinth

我就是觉得这里很怪，我都被这个想法绕晕了，版主可以指点一二吗？说实话我的逻辑能力真的很差啊~~

gtxyncUID: 2850271

使用Admittedly,however说明你的观点是大正小负，而你的结论是注重双方的，这里有点问题。结论应该类似是Human beings should take into account both long-term interests and short-term interests when making budgets.论证的时候不要用admittedly，应兼顾双方或者有点小tilt，但是最好不要有大的Wavering