argument 169 （高频排序第二）模考习作 恳请各位批改 十分感谢！

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT169 - The following appeared in a letter from a department chairperson to the president of Pierce University.

"Some studies conducted by Bronston College, which is also located in a small town, reveal that both male and female professors are happier living in small towns when their spouses are also employed in the same geographic area. Therefore, in the interest of attracting the most gifted teachers and researchers to our faculty and improving the morale of our entire staff, we at Pierce University should offer employment to the spouse of each new faculty member we hire. Although we cannot expect all offers to be accepted or to be viewed as an ideal job offer, the money invested in this effort will clearly be well spent because, if their spouses have a chance of employment, new professors will be more likely to accept our offers."
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TIME: 00:30:00
DATE: 2010-7-14 22:36:42

To substantiate Pierce University should adopted the same policy that offer employment to the spouses of professors as Bronston College in order to attract gifted professors,the chairperson cited results of some studies conducted by Bronston College. Unfortunately, this recommendation based on several unsubstantiated assumptions.
Firstly, no information about the studies of Bronston College were offered by the chairperson. We are not informed the numbers who joined the studies and if the professors who take part in the studies can respresent all the professors in Bronston. With out such evidences, the result of the studies would be doubtful.
Even if the studies conducted by Bronston College were effective, the chairperson falesly equated Bronston to Pierce University. It is entirly possible that Bronston attracted professors' spouses by the unique natural enviorment or modern ubran facilites that abesence in the place Pierce university located.If this is the case, the suggestion by the chairperson would be unconvincing.
Even if the result of studies would be effective in Pierce University, the chairperson neglected other relevant reasons influence the decisions of professors.It entirly possible that some other factors play key point toward the decison of professor but not the just offer employment spouses.For instance, the facilites of research,the salary payed by university or the freedom of research. Without ruling out such possiblities, the author can't confidently claim that the policy would attract professors to Pierce University.
Even if the suggestion would attract professors to Pierce University, there were no information about the cost and if the university can offer enough jobs to every spouses of professors.It entirly possible the investment of this policy would overweighted the harvest,meanwhile no details were informed about whether the amout of Pierce University was enough to the number of spouses of professors.Without such informations,the policy’s feasibility would be doubtful.
The recommedation, while seems to be somewhat logical at the first glance,revealed several logical fallacies as metioned above. To strengthen this suggestion, we have to know the detail about the studies and the conditions about Bronston College and Pierce University to make sure if this policy would be effective in different place.Moreover the author should clarify the curcial factor to affect the discison of the professors and provide the detail information about the investment and the numbers of jobs could be offered by Pierce University.

eddie_hUID: 2849684

红色字体是我自己后来自己改的。。。
由于是独自备考
所以非常需要大家的批评指正

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2# eddie_h

argument也有高频？

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09年7月以来的ARGU排序
只不过ARGU高频意义不大
呵呵 题目算是个噱头