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Video camera have come into being only in the late 19th century as a production of industrialization and served to record and represent life. As is contrasted to the written records, video camera, which is loaded with immense information, presents us a three-dimensional world as vivid as the real world we are living in and is widely utilized in various fields in the contemporary society.Under this background, written records are considered by many as out-of-date and less important than video records.Is this popular viewpoint really justifiable? We should take at least two aspects into consideration, according to the purpose of recording for human, that is, to record historical facts and to spread knowledge.

In terms of recording facts, video records, besides accurate and convenient as has been mentioned in the issue,  are vivid and faithful in presentation of facts and details with bright colors and rich sounds. Its drawbacks lie in the higher cost and the fact that it just presents the raw objective world before us while functions not so effectively when it comes to the presentation of the inner heart. Written records, in contrast, is comparatively monotonous in that various senses including sight, sound, smell and touch can only be depicted in words, which, though also faithful, only provides us with flat and limited information. However, the abundant cultural connotations lying behind the limited information makes it a unique way of recording life. The metaphoric significance implied and conveyed in written words is best manifested in literary works, the great results of human creation. As is known by all, good literature is fascinating and intriguing just in its limited presentation of life, which leaves the reader  to interpret the text on his own and gain his unique understanding and experience through reading, just like the famous quotation goes: there are a thousand Hamlets in a thousand people's eyes. In addition, much information is hidden in what the author did not put out straightly, waiting for intelligent readers and critics to discover, just as Ernest Hemingway does in his outstanding novels according to his famous “Iceberg theory”. Thus written records is an amazingly complex and intelligent form of human creation and not at all less significant than video records.

In terms of spreading knowledge, video camera conveys its content in digital forms,hence we can watch it only with electricity and certain instruments. And the immense information load it boasted sometimes also becomes a big trouble which exhausts our time and energy. So much time have we spent abandoned in the colorful or even sensuous world in the screen that after the long-term passive acceptance of information we are on the verge of losing our own way of thinking. On the contrary, written records are a physical entity that can be touched. We can easily carry it with us and read at any time and in any places without necessary facilities. What’s more, as written records is free from dazzling images and noisy sounds, we are able read in total tranquility and indulge us in the intelligent or scathing words of those insightful authors and communicate directly with our soul. Away from the sound and fury in the outside world, we can learn to think with a sober and independent mind by reading. Written records, as such an opposite to video records, though old, feeble and somewhat clumsy, will never ever disappear from human civilization.

Finally, in my opinion, although the video camera is welcomed and advocated by contemporary men who have been used to the cultural fast-food, the fact that its role in spreading knowledge surpasses the function of written records is a dangerous signal of a kind of cultural loss.

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本帖最后由 lingli_xiaoai 于 2010-7-18 06:48 编辑

Video camera have come into being only in the late 19th century as a production [product] of industrialization and served to record and [] events of our daily life. As is contrasted to the written records, video [records] camera, which is loaded with immense information, presents us a three-dimensional world as vivid as the real world we are living in and is widely utilized in various fields in the contemporary society. Under this background, written records are considered by many as out-of-date  and less important than video records. Is this popular viewpoint really justifiable? We should take at least two aspects into consideration, according to the purpose of recording for human, that is, to record historical facts and to spread knowledge.

In terms of recording facts, video records, besides accurate and convenient as has been mentioned in the issue, are vivid and faithful in presentation of facts and details [facts and details 并列也比较奇怪]with bright colors and rich sounds. Its drawbacks lie in the higher cost and the fact that it just presents the raw objective [很奇怪的形容词] world before us while functions not so effectively when it comes to the presentation of the inner heart. [这句话比较中式,建议在表达能力有限的情况下,把这个换出两句简单的话,首先说花费,然后说录影一般比较直接,没有办法表达更加抽象的信息。顺便举个例子说明那些抽象。]Written records, in contrast, is comparatively monotonous in that various senses including sight, sound, smell and touch can only be depicted in words, which, though also faithful, only provides us with flat and limited information [是吗?我倒是觉得文字表达的信息更多。你这个例子只适合比如人写日记,或者什么国家地理杂志,人文风光纪录片之类的,但是你这里没有specific的情况下,直接说这个statement,显得很武断]. However, the abundant cultural connotations [like what?什么叫做cultural connotation,用大词的时候需要specific] lying behind the limited information makes it a unique way of recording life. The metaphoric significance implied and conveyed in written words is best manifested in literary works, the great results of human creation. As is known by all, good literature is fascinating and intriguing just in its limited presentation of life, which leaves the reader to interpret the text on his own and gain his unique understanding and experience through reading, just like the famous quotation goes: there are a thousand Hamlets in a thousand people's eyes. In addition, much information is hidden in what the author did not put out straightly, waiting for intelligent readers and critics to discover, just as Ernest Hemingway does in his outstanding novels according to his famous “Iceberg theory”. Thus written records is an amazingly complex and intelligent form of human creation and not at all less significant than video records. [这段总体的contrast还是出来了。但是要讲的内容太多,但是每个点都是一句超长句带过。显得论证不够具体。而且比较乱。尤其是写written record的时候前后矛盾,开始说flat and limited information,然后最后转到amazingly了 中间没有过度。然后 你说但是 the abundant cultural connotations,用了however就是强调了,我会expect你后面讲书里面怎么展现了 录影带没有办法深入的,比较抽象的文化问题,结果你完全没说,就直接开始讲文学作品。感觉这段你的信息是丰富的,但是过渡是没有的,就像一盘珍珠,没有串起来。]

In terms of spreading knowledge, video camera conveys its content in digital forms,hence we can watch it only with [ when ] electricity and certain instruments [are available]. And the immense[可以换个词语了] information load it boasted sometimes also becomes a big trouble which exhausts our time and energy[这句话后半句非常难懂,becomes a big trouble 太口语化了。我知道你的意思是说,当需要表达大量信息的时候,video的效率很低,会需要大量的资源,时间。但是你的用词并没有把这个意思表现出来。]. So much time have we spent abandoned in the colorful or even sensuous world in the screen that after the long-term passive acceptance of information we are on the verge of losing our own way of thinking. [这句话也难懂,除此以外,你这句话完全是一个statement,你说我们光看声音和图片,让我们失去了自己思考的能力。这个理论光看这句话是没办法让人接受的。如果你说,我们把能量完全放在录影带带来的感官刺激和高效率上,会让我们失去深入思考现象背后的问题的能力,然后举个例子,这一点才能算完。不能make 了一个逻辑上不直接相关的statement你就算了,要讲明白。] On the contrary, written records are a physical entity that can be touched. We can easily carry it with us and read at any time and in any places without necessary facilities. [要对比到位你这个地方就应该开始说,书可以用很少的资源记录大量的信息,比如书面教程vs视频教程]What’s more, as written records is free from dazzling images [书也可能有图片的]and noisy sounds, we are able read in total tranquility and indulge us in the intelligent or scathing words of those insightful authors and communicate directly with our soul. [这个也是statement,更像是story-telling而不是论证。难道看一部感人的纪录片,就不能touch your soul了?虽然issue写得生动也是必要的。但是生动的例子只是为了论证服务,你的例子最好能完美支持你的结论。比如这个地方,被动接受和抽象思考,是你对比的要点,那么你就应该把重点放在这上面。] Away from the sound and fury in the outside world, we can learn to think with a sober and independent mind by reading [like how?只是因为没有声音和图片,所以我们就能学会独立思考了?这个因果联系在哪里?你可以说without being distracted by vivid pictures and sounds, when we’re reading a book, it is easier for us to focus on understanding the real meaning behind  words…这样的,更容易让人产生逻辑联系的句子。]. Written records, as such an opposite to video records, though old, feeble and somewhat clumsy, will never ever disappear from human civilization. [你现在用的词语全部是负面的,负面过后的结论是永远不会消失?为什么?如果我是你,就会总结为,因为它可以更有效率的传递大量抽象信息,让人不受感官的干扰,这种优势是不会被video取代的,所以它不会消失。总结后半部分。你要注意一个问题,这里的逻辑就是直接。从A-B,就是你好,我爱你。和你不好,所以我不爱你。这样的就叫做逻辑。不要说 你很穷,你很死板,你很丑,我还是爱你。这句话是有很大的逻辑错误的,因为除了你,别人都不明白你后半句的结论那里来的。你可以仔细想一下这个问题。]

Finally, in my opinion, although the video camera is welcomed and advocated by contemporary men who have been used to the cultural fast-food, the fact that its role in spreading knowledge surpasses the function of written records is a dangerous signal of a kind of cultural loss.
[其实我觉得你这篇文章,整体思路还是很不错的,也没有太多模板的痕迹。思考得也比较深入,但是你论证的时候太发散了。逻辑关系有点模糊。这是很多写惯了中文文章大家的毛病。但是只要你注意就能避免。好好想一想怎么样才算直接的因果联系。然后就是习惯,作出了statement一定要论证。说了花了美,一定要说为什么美。不要偷懒。]
人生有些决定是大胆的,但是那并不代表这些决定是错误的。

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发表于 2010-7-18 09:12:19 |只看该作者
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谢谢小哀姐姐的修改,可能是因为我还没开始看argument,所以写的东西逻辑感比较差吧= =总是天马行空,想到哪写哪。
也谢谢你的肯定,因为我是学文学的,所以潜意识里总是有点抗拒那些中规中矩的模板,总是不想把自己的东西写成那样~~
还有我会认真研究一下汉语和英语的习惯用法,努力写出地道的英语的~~

真的很感谢你的修改,我会认真思考我现在存在的问题的~~祝你在大洋彼岸一切顺利:)
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发表于 2010-7-27 18:21:57 |只看该作者
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我想看看大家ISSUE8都是怎么写的,怎么找不到呢?:L

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发表于 2010-10-7 19:54:30 |只看该作者
晓晓,如果你来的话,我写的是这篇的commentary:)

Higher Immigration, Lower Crime
Major Cities’ Plummeting Crime Rates Mystifying” proclaimed the headline atop a Washington Post article on July 20, 2009. Thestory went on to report that crime rates have dropped in New York, Los Angeles, and other large American cities to levels not seen in 40 years—“a trend criminologists describe as baffling and unexpected.” An FBI report in September showed that a nationwide plunge in violent crime dating back to the early 1990s has continued largely unabated; it too offered little by way of explanation.
One plausible reason behind this welcome phenomenon, ironic as it may sound, is increased immigration, including low-skilled and illegal immigration. How can this be so?
Opponents of expanded immigration through the process known as legalization argue that allowing more low-skilled workers, especially Spanish-speaking ones, into the United States or legalizing their presence here will swell the ranks of the underclass—broadly speaking, those residents confined to the lowest rungs of the socio-economic ladder, with low earnings, minimal education, and who (in the worst cases) exhibit dysfunctional behavior like drug addiction and higher illegitimacy rates. Our immigration regime is thus said to “import poverty,” thereby bringing in its wake rising rates of crime and social chaos.
Chief among the eloquent worriers is Heather Mac Donald of the Manhattan Institute, who warned in a 2006 article for City Journal:
Our immigration policy is creating a second underclass, one with the potential to expand indefinitely if current immigration rates merely stay the same, much less treble, as they would under [proposed immigration reform]. Given the rapid increase in the Hispanic population, the prevalence of . . . socially destructive behavior among Hispanics should be cause for serious concern.
Mac Donald’s logic may seem unassailable. And yet there is no arguing with the numbers. The past two decades have seen the fastest increase in immigration since the early part of the 20th century. The past 15 years have seen the most rapid drop in crime rates in the nation’s history. At the same time, in all sorts of metrics, the social instability that has beset the United States since the 1960s has either stabilized or begun, happily, to reverse itself. The two should not be happening simultaneously if the critics are to be believed. And yet they are.
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This debate has a familiar ring to students of immigration history. When the great waves of low-skilled immigrants flowed into American cities a century ago, many of them Italians and Eastern European Jews, some native-born Americans feared an explosion of crime and a general debasing of society. Harvard economics professor William Ripley took out a full-page ad in the New York Times in June 1913 to warn that the “hordes of new immigrants” from Southern and Central Europe were “a menace to our Anglo Saxon civilization.”
The influential United States Immigration Commission of 1907-11, also known as the Dillingham Commission, produced a massive 41-volume report on the consequences of the immigration phenomenon in the United States. It concluded that immigration from countries like Italy, Poland, and Russia posed a general threat to American society and culture and should be drastically curtailed. Interestingly, though, when it came to a specific, concrete issue like crime, the authors came up empty:
No satisfactory evidence has yet been produced to show that immigration has resulted in an increase in crime disproportionate to the increase in adult population. Such comparable statistics of crime and population as it has been possible to obtain indicate that immigrants are less prone to commit crime than are native Americans.
Despite such findings, worries about immigrants and crime persisted into the 1920s and 30s, when Congress passed a series of restrictive quotas. In New York, many natives fretted about a “Jewish crime wave” that was supposedly plaguing the city during these decades. Young Jews in disturbing numbers, it was said, had joined crime “rackets”—that period’s version of gangs—along with children of Irish and Italian immigrants. During Prohibition and again after World War II, legends grew about gambling and bootlegging rackets led by larger-than-life figures with names like Max “Kid Twist” Zwerbach, “Big” Jack Zelig, Vach “Cyclone Louie” Lewis Charles, and Louis “Lepke” Buchalter.
As colorful as some of this history was, the sociologist Stephen Steinberg has found that the supposed Jewish-immigrant crime wave was mostly an urban legend. Crime and population figures show that Jews in New York committed crimes at a rate far below the average for the wider society. During the 1920s, for example, when Jews constituted nearly a third of the city’s population, they committed only one-sixth of the local felonies.
Along with their alleged propensity for committing crime, immigrants of the time were suspected of undermining America’s social cohesion and Protestant ethic. Jews proved to be upwardly mobile over time, but the comparatively slow progression of Italian immigrants—the educational attainment of the second generation was well below the average for other American-born whites—fed suspicions that they too were unfit for assimilation.
The fear turned out to be unfounded. But though the history is suggestive, it is not determinative. The question we must ask is whether the immigration reforms proposed today, of the kind supported by former President George W. Bush and current President Obama, as well as the late Senator Edward Kennedy and the very much alive Senator John McCain, unleash on American society a wave of crime and “socially destructive behavior” of the sort Mac Donald worries about. And what about the notion that by legalizing illegal immigrants and allowing new immigrants to follow them, the United States is acquiescing in the expansion of the underclass?
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Even though the number of legal and illegal immigrants in the United States has risen sharply since the early 1990s, the size and condition of the economic underclass has not. In fact, by several measures the number of people in America living on the bottom rungs of the economic ladder has been in a long-term decline. Moreover, those immigrants who populate the underclass appear on the whole to be more socially functional than their native-born counterparts.
Consider the most basic measure of the underclass: the number of people subsisting below the official poverty line as measured by the Census Bureau’s Current Population Survey (which measures all individuals residing in the United States, regardless of status). Between 1993 and 2007—that is, before the current recession took hold—the number of individuals living in poverty declined from 39 million to 37 million. The number of immigrants living in poverty increased by a million, but this was offset by a drop of 3 million in the number of native-born Americans in poverty. The period saw an increase of 1.8 million in the number of Hispanics living in poverty, but this was dwarfed by the 3.8 million decline among non-Hispanics, including a 1.6 million decline among blacks.
Another measure of the underclass is the number of adults without a high-school diploma. An adult or a head of household without a high-school education is almost invariably confined to lower-wage occupations with limited prospects for advancement. Sure enough, the trend in education follows that of poverty. From 1993 through 2006, the number of adults in America age 25 and older without a diploma declined from 32 million to 28 million. The number of adult Hispanic dropouts rose by 3.9 million, much of that due to the progeny of low-skilled illegal immigrants from Mexico and Central America. But among the rest of the population, the number of dropouts plunged by 8.1 million.
Educational attainment by citizenship status covers a slightly different period but confirms the trend. From 1995 to 2004, the number of adults without a high-school diploma declined by 2.9 million. An increase of 2.4 million in the number of immigrant dropouts was overwhelmed by a decline of 5.3 million in native-born dropouts. As a result of these underlying trends, the underclass in our society has been shrinking as its face has become more Hispanic and foreign-born.
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Multiple causes lie behind the long-run decline of poverty, and the effect of immigration cannot be discounted. The arrival of low-skilled foreign-born workers in the labor force increases the incentive for young native-born Americans to stay in school and for older workers to upgrade their skills to avoid having to compete with immigrants for low-wage jobs. At the same time, the addition of low-skilled immigrants expands the size of the overall economy, creating higher-wage openings for managers, craftsmen, accountants, and the like. The net result is a greater financial reward and relatively more opportunities for those Americans who finish high school.
An August study for the Cato Institute by Peter Dixon and Maureen Rimmer estimated that a 29 percent increase in low-skilled immigration would boost the total income of U.S. households by as much as $180 billion a year. Such an influx would no doubt increase nominal government spending on welfare, school, and crime abatement, but the fiscal cost would be overwhelmed by direct economic gains to American households.
Immigration restrictionists are fond of arguing that the gains only accrue to the relatively well-to-do in the form of docile domestic servants, but Dixon and Rimmer refute this by noting what they call an “occupation-mix effect”: the creation through low-skilled labor of better-paying jobs further up the occupational ladder that over time steer more Americans into the middle class. For example, someone overqualified for work as a short-order cook need not necessarily settle for that job but can rather go out for the chef’s position to which he aspires. And so on. A certain portion of the native-born underclass will remain in such straits because of their own particular circumstances, but over time the creation of a slightly better mix of jobs allows the more functional members of the underclass to escape. Most important, the presence of low-skilled immigrants in the workforce helps new labor-force entrants avoid joining the underclass in the first place.
A dynamic like this may have been at work in the early 20th century, when millions of Jewish and Italian immigrants were stoking fears of a permanent underclass. Most of them were low-skilled compared with native-born Americans, and their arrival exerted downward pressure on wages at the bottom rungs of the economic ladder. But it was probably not a coincidence that during that same period, the number of Americans staying in school to earn a diploma increased dramatically, setting off what sociologists call the High School Movement. From 1910 to 1940, the share of American 18-year-olds graduating from high school rose from less than 10 percent to 50 percent in a generation. Today’s immigrants are arguably contributing to the same positive trend.
Restrictionists argue in response that Southern and Central European and Jewish immigrants of a century ago were of better cultural stock than today’s newcomers and that American society of the time exerted more pressure to assimilate. Of course, the same kind of argument was invoked then looking back to an earlier period, as it was invoked in the mid-19th century when hordes of unwashed Irish flooded New York and Boston.
The existence of the American welfare state, to be sure, is a profound difference between now and then, and the present-day obsession with multiculturalism is certainly a hindrance to integration. But despite follies like bilingual education, the evidence shows that the children of today’s immigrants speak fluent English and otherwise outperform their parents in terms of education and earnings. America remains a great engine of assimilation.
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The great recession of 2008-09 has obviously reversed some of the national gains against poverty, but the recent growth of the underclass cannot be blamed on low-skilled illegal immigration. According to the Pew Hispanic Center, the number of illegal immigrants living in the United States has declined since 2007 as jobs in construction and other sectors where they have traditionally found work have dried up. Fewer are entering the country, and a growing number of them have returned home. Those that remain are far more likely to be working than loitering on street corners. There has been no uptick in crime.
Over the long term, the inflow of low-skilled immigrants has not only coincided with the underclass’s shrinking but with its transformation into a less socially destructive one. One striking fact about low-skilled immigrants in America today, legal and illegal, is their propensity to work. In 2008, the rate of labor-force participation of foreign-born Hispanics was 71 percent, while that of native-born Americans was 66 percent. Immigrant dropouts—those 25 years or older without a high-school diploma—were far more likely than native-born dropouts to be participating in the labor force (61 percent vs. 38 percent). According to estimates by the Pew Hispanic Center, male illegal immigrants, ages 18 to 64, had a labor-force participation rate in 2004 of an amazing 92 percent. Illegal immigrants are typically poor, but they are almost all working poor.
Across all ethnicities and educational levels, immigrants are less prone to commit crimes and land behind bars than their native-born counterparts. In congressional testimony in 2007, Anne Morrison Piehl of Rutgers University told the House Judiciary Committee that “immigrants have much lower institutionalization rates than the native-born—on the order of one-fifth the rate of natives. More recently arrived immigrants had the lowest relative institutionalization rates, and the gap with natives increased from 1980 to 2000.” Piehl found no evidence that the immigrant incarceration rate was lower because of the deportation of illegal immigrants who might otherwise serve time.
Crime rates are even lower than average among the poorly educated and Hispanic immigrants—those who arouse the most concern from skeptics of immigration reform. The scholar Rubén Rumbaut analyzed census data from the year 2000 and found that incarceration rates among legal and illegal immigrants from Mexico, El Salvador, and Guatemala were less than half the rate of U.S.-born whites. Immigrants without a high-school diploma had an incarceration rate that was only one-seventh that of native-born high-school dropouts.
The reasons are several. Applicants for legal immigration are screened for criminal records, increasing the odds that those admitted will be the law abiding. Illegal immigrants have the incentive to avoid committing crimes to minimize the risk of deportation. Legal or illegal, immigrants come to America for the opportunity to work in a more open and prosperous free-market economy. Running afoul of the law puts that opportunity in jeopardy. As a rule, low-skilled Hispanic immigrants get down to the business of earning money, sending remittances to their home countries, and staying out of trouble. In comparison, 15 years ago, a member of today’s underclass standing on a street corner is more likely waiting for a day’s work than for a drug deal.
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Yet just as was true a century ago, fears remain. No politician has done more to exploit worries about illegal immigrants and crime than Lou Barletta, mayor of the small Pennsylvania city of Hazleton. In 2006 he made national headlines by convincing the City Council to enact a law revoking the business license of any local employer who was found hiring illegal immigrants and fining landlords who rented to them. The mayor justified the crackdown by blaming illegal immigrants for a rise in local crime. But during a court hearing on a challenge to the law, it was pointed out that Hazleton’s own police records showed that of the 8,575 felonies committed in the city since 2000, only about 20 were linked to illegal immigrants. Like all those Jewish “racketeers” of the Depression era, today’s low-skilled Hispanic migrants are victims of a stereotype unsupported by the preponderance of evidence.
In fact, the major social challenges facing the Hispanic community are not among Hispanic immigrants themselves but among their progeny in the second and third generations. As Heather Mac Donald and others have correctly reported, the children and grandchildren of Hispanic immigrants are far more likely to become unwed parents than first-generation immigrants, and far more likely to drop out of high school than non-Hispanic whites.
But as troubling as these trends may be, they have not spilled over to a general breakdown in social order, as the crime figures persisting into the recessionary period clearly attest. Our focus should be on addressing social problems directly, which after all are not unique to the Hispanic community, rather than suppressing Hispanic immigration at great cost to our economy. Similar social fears about Italian immigrants early in the 20th century proved to be unfounded, as their children and grandchildren eventually assimilated into the middle class.
Based on recent and historical experience, the argument in favor of a policy allowing more low-skilled workers to enter the United States legally is a strong one. Such a policy might plausibly continue to transform the underclass into a more socially functional segment of society while enhancing the incentives for native-born Americans to acquire the education and skills they need to prosper.
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发表于 2010-10-7 20:47:54 |只看该作者
Opponents to the ongoing immigration reforms hold the view that the unrestricted immigration threatens to increase crime rates and that too many immigrants into the nation equals to importation of underclass and poverty. In response to these oppositions the author raises his insightful opinions and gives empirical evidences to support his viewpoint. According to the author, the stereotype about immigrants---esp. the low-skilled and the illegal ones---that they are expanding the underclass and prone to commit crimes are actually unfounded and problematic. The author cited statistics, facts and historical experiences to make his argumentation rather persuasive.

The relations between immigration and crimes, suggested in the title of the passage, analysized and proved in the text is a sound defendence against those opponents to immigration reforms who take it for granted that immigrants are unable to be assimilated, or even constitute an unstable element to social stability. While these deeply-worried mayors, politicians and professors are engaged in alleging the illegitimacy in allowing more immigrants into the US and in legalizing the illegal immigrants, they are in fact standing opposite the fact and the interest of the society.

According to the statistics quoted by the author, as opposed to the stereotype of criminals, the immigrants are a major contributor to stabilizing the society. As is mentioned at the beginning of the passage, major cities' crime rates are plummeting as the immigration keeps rising. What's more, the following facts below undeniably attest to the immigrants' law-abidingness---according to Anne Morrison Piehl of Rutgers University, immigrants have much lower institutionalization rates than the native-born on the order of as low as one-fifth; as to the most despised and suspected Hispanics, crime rates among them are even as low as less than half the rate of the US-born whites. The author and these numbers makes us doubt whether our impression of immigrants may have been prejudiced.

Maybe it's human nature to refuse the approach of strangers. As to myself, I have such experience of involuntarily rejecting strangers. In the case of immigrants discussed above, since they are unfamilar to us and different with us, we, as the majority, tend to suspect them or even misunderstand them to be crimnals, which is totally arbitrary. To be tolerant and rational, what we should better do is to try to understand and accept them, at least give them impartial evaluations.

Another point the author debated is the common notion that immigrants, esp. the Hispanic and the illegal immigrants, are adding to the fiscal burden of government and enlarging the underclass, dragging behind the development of the nation's economy. The author again quotes telling statistics to disclose the fact that despite the expansion of immigrants since the early 1990s, the nation's undergone a decline in poverty and the size of underclass. In addition, it is the immigrants who play an active role in it.

The one function of the immigrants mentioned by the author is impressive to me. They stimulate students to upgrade their skills to avoid competing with immigrants for low-wage jobs, which is a vigorous element that helps to animated the whole economy. The other important function, i.e. the occupation-mix effect created by immigrants is also an evidence that immigrants are vital in improving social mobility and bettering economic structure.

However, despite the contribution they have made to the economy, their own living condition is not optimistic. Although the underclass decreases, the immigrants account for a good part of them. What was worse, the educational attainment of their progeny is troubling. These problems are a reflection of unbalanced living conditions among the society as a whole.

As for myself, the legitimate immigrants, as a large social group and a part of the US citizens, deserves fair treatment and support instead of being ignored or even contempted. The illegal ones who are facing opportunity of being legalized now and the Hispanic who bear most suspition and hostility, according to the author, tends to work hard instead of loitering in the society doing nothing and living on aids (like many among the whites do). They deserve a legimate place in the US.

The history of the US is, after all, a history of immigrants of various races establishing it with gathered intelligence and energy. The so-called "native" Americans are, actually, very likely to be the descendent of immigrants. To be tolerant and accept them welcomely is the best way for the US to maintain its vigor and energy.
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发表于 2010-10-7 20:50:36 |只看该作者
7楼是原文,8楼是我自己写的,真的觉得太麻烦你了。因为我自己就是个不大喜欢给别人修改作文的人(惭愧)我也是实在没办法了= =
如果你有空的话就帮我随便看看就好,不急什么时候都行。

现在你应该在睡觉吧,好梦:)
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