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Issue131——"The arts (painting, music, literature, etc.) reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society."  

观点:不是所有艺术都揭露社会理念和动力,但大师作品都会。
分论点:
1. 艺术表现的是艺术家的思考,所以未必反映社会理念和动力。
2. 但艺术也能用来反映社会理念和动力。
3. 经典的传世之作大多反映了社会理念和动力。

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    What is art? According to Freud, art is a kind of release of individual lust, converting the human libido into plentiful creativity. Since arts are simply a reflection of the artists, they do not reveal the hidden ideas and impulses of a society all the time. On the other hand however, if we examine the history of air carefully, we will find that great works are the arts that reveal human characters and social ideas.
    Arts are created by artists, and therefore arts, in essence, are the expression of the artists, which might not have something to do with revelation of social ideas and impulses. For example, romantic love stories written by Jane Austen, such as Pride and Prejudice, stand on the view that one of the ways for a woman to raise her social status is to find a husband who owns both money and gentry. These works reflect more of her own senses than the ideas and impulses of a society, because the idea of pursuing for an outstanding husband is a human character which has remained for centuries and will definitely last, which cannot be described as impulses of a society. Another example is the Heroic Symphony, which was composed by Beethoven to honor and praise the wise general Napoleon. However, he felt disappointed after Napoleon announced himself the King and altered the original title of the symphony which contains the name of Napoleon. This composition reflects completely the political view of Beethoven, since there actually lay little demurs for Napoleon to be the King and therefore his view mixed in the composition cannot be called the ideas and impulses of a society.
    Arts, on the other hand, do have the function to reveal ideas and impulses in a society. Artists are people who live in a society and their ideas can somehow be regarded as the representative of contemporary people. For instance, Uncle Tom’s Cabin, a novel highly praised by President Lincoln, has aroused great sympathy for the African Americans who have been the slaves in the plantations in the South. This novel reflects the miserable lives of the salves and their pursuits for happiness and love, and some comments even describe the novel as the one which directly leads to the Civil War. We cannot gainsay that this novel reveals the ideas and impulses of the American society. Picasso is another example in the painting field. His painting work Guernica, which is a quite abstract one, denounced the German’s bombing in Guernica in the Spain Civil War, which involved in hundreds of thousands of innocent people. This work reveals not only his hatred, but also the accusation of the imperialism and the demands for peace of the whole society.
    Even if both styles exist in art field, there is fact which cannot be denied is that those influential works in art own the function of revealing social ideas and impulses. One of the most important reasons why these works deserve being defined as the great works is that the social ideas and impulses which are contained in these works strike a sympathetic chord in the viewers and critics. For example, the Catcher in the Rye, the book which George Bush considered one of the books that affected him most, has called for the society attention to the spiritual demands for youngsters, which evoked the same feeling of many readers. The Old Man and the Sea, written by Hemingway, mirrors the ideas and impulses of the American society to overcome difficulties and head for success. Millions of readers have been moved by the famous saying which I paraphrase that “Men can be annihilated, but they should not be defeated.” These works which are regarded as classics own the feature in common that they all disclose the human character and the social ideas.
    As Picasso said, “Art is a lie that tells us the truth”. It is because exaggerated methods are adopted that art is a lie, and it is because of the social function of arts to reveal the society ideas and impulses that art tells us the truth. It remains the truth that not all arts should head for society ideas and impulses, but at least those masterpieces should.
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我正准备写这篇~
写完发上来和你互改

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Issue131——"The arts (painting, music, literature, etc.) reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society."  

观点:不是所有艺术都揭露社会理念和动力,但大师作品都会。

分论点:
1.
艺术表现的是艺术家的思考,所以未必反映社会理念和动力。
2.
但艺术也能用来反映社会理念和动力。
3.
经典的传世之作大多反映了社会理念和动力。

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    What is art? According to Freud, art is a kind of release of individual lust, converting the human libido into plentiful creativity.[
易判雷同啊] Since arts are simply a reflection of the artists, they do not reveal the hidden ideas and impulses of a society all the time. On the other hand[前后对应不明] however, if we examine the history of [air][arts] carefully, we will find that great works are the arts that reveal human characters and social ideas.[一段和二段的开头有点重复]
    Arts are created by artists, and therefore arts, in essence, are the expression of the artists, which might not have something to do with [revelation
可以用词变换] of social ideas and impulses. For example, romantic love stories written by Jane Austen, such as Pride and Prejudice, stand on the view that [one of the ways]=[one way] for a woman to raise her social status is to find a husband who owns both money and gentry. These works reflect more of her own senses than the ideas and impulses of a society, because the idea of pursuing for an outstanding husband is a human character which has remained for centuries and will definitely last, which cannot be described as impulses of a society. Another example is the Heroic Symphony, [which was] composed by Beethoven to honor and praise the wise general Napoleon. However, he felt disappointed after Napoleon announced himself the King and altered the original title of the symphony which contains[ed] the name of Napoleon. This composition reflects completely the political view of Beethoven, since there[where-composition, in which] actually lay little demurs for Napoleon to be the King and therefore his view mixed in the composition cannot be called the ideas and impulses of a society.[作为让步的这段篇幅有点长呢,个人认为只需要把艺术还能反映个人情感、观点这一事实及原因说清楚就可以了
]
    Arts,[ on the other hand][
楼主使用此短语时都没有前面的on the one hand. 不知道有没有问题
], do have the function to reveal ideas and impulses in a society. Artists are people who live in a society and their ideas can somehow be regarded as the representative of contemporary people. For instance, Uncle Tom’s Cabin, a novel highly praised by President Lincoln, has aroused great sympathy for the African Americans who have been the slaves in the plantations in the South. This novel reflects the miserable lives of the salves and their pursuits for happiness and love, and some comments even describe the novel as the one which directly leads to the Civil War. We cannot gainsay that this novel reveals the ideas and impulses of the American society. Picasso is another example in the painting field. His painting work Guernica, which is a quite abstract one, denounced the German’s bombing in Guernica in the Spain Civil War, which involved in hundreds of thousands of innocent people. This work reveals not only his hatred, but also the accusation of the imperialism and the demands for peace of the whole society.
    Even if both styles exist in art field, there is fact which cannot be denied is that those influential works in art own the function of revealing social ideas and impulses. One of the most important reasons why these works deserve being defined as the great works is that the social ideas and impulses which are contained in these works strike a sympathetic chord in the viewers and critics.[
例子很好!学习
] For example, the Catcher in the Rye, the book which George Bush considered one of the books that affected him most, has called for the society attention to the spiritual demands for youngsters, which evoked the same feeling of many readers. The Old Man and the Sea, written by Hemingway, mirrors the ideas and impulses of the American society to overcome difficulties and head for success. Millions of readers have been moved by the famous saying which I paraphrase that “Men can be annihilated, but they should not be defeated.” These works which are regarded as classics own the feature in common that they all disclose the human character and the social ideas.
    As Picasso said, “Art is a lie that tells us the truth”. It is because exaggerated methods are adopted that art is a lie, and it is because of the social function of arts to reveal the society ideas and impulses that art tells us the truth. It remains the truth that not all arts should head for society ideas and impulses, but at least those masterpieces should.

[艺术类的话题组织思路不难,难得是有充分恰当新颖的论据支撑,无疑,楼主在这方面做得很好!学习。语言上能简洁一点,用词上能富于变化一点就更完美了!]
人生那么短,不要浪费在失败和幻觉上面。

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我晕!!不知怎么贴上来就变成迷你字体了! 不好意思啊。
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https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=1124639&extra=这是我一篇艺术的。恳请指教
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发表于 2010-7-18 22:10:37 |只看该作者
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没事~我贴到Word里看就是了~谢谢你的评论~你的那篇我明后天有空看哈~

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发表于 2010-7-18 22:26:17 |只看该作者
一直觉得对这个题目很困惑,刚才查了一下
看看这个贴,arts是人文科学,不是艺术
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=1100160&highlight=

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发表于 2010-7-19 07:37:19 |只看该作者
一直觉得对这个题目很困惑,刚才查了一下
看看这个贴,arts是人文科学,不是艺术
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=1100160&highlight=
追梦小木耳 发表于 2010-7-18 22:26


这个值得大家讨论啊。。。但是括号里面的那三个painting, music, literature怎么解释呢?我认为艺术其实就是人文科学啊。。。除了艺术还有什么人文科学呢?

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发表于 2010-7-19 10:57:30 |只看该作者
写得很好!不过傲慢与偏见那个例子后来又转为社会共识了,与主题句不符合了。

其他例子都用的很好很恰当,你是如何积累这么多例子的哦

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发表于 2010-7-19 12:25:21 |只看该作者
写得很好!不过傲慢与偏见那个例子后来又转为社会共识了,与主题句不符合了。

其他例子都用的很好很恰当,你是如何积累这么多例子的哦
crazyjoo 发表于 2010-7-19 10:57



Pride & Prejudice的例子确实还不够好,修改的时候我会在论述方面写得更好一些的~

例子的话,这篇是不限时写作,所以我写了提纲之后大概上Wiki去找了一些例子啦。例子积累的话个人感觉每次把写过的Issue里的例子积累一下,能够灵活运用就可以了,多看别人的Issue也是个提高例子积累的好办法~

共同进步啦~

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发表于 2010-7-19 21:32:47 |只看该作者
我感觉你对长句的控制不是很好
有些时候影响了阅读和理解 我站在一个中国人思维的角度上基本上都能理解 考官就更不知道能不能理解了

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本帖最后由 lingli_xiaoai 于 2010-7-20 03:58 编辑

this is actually an well-written article with tons of examples, but it is hard for your to use so many examples in one assay without google or enough time... you may try to use fewer examples, but discuss more. It would become meaningless, if you cannot do it during the real exam, if you rely on real examples too much.

Moreover, you miss the key word " otherwise hidden" , which means if not for  art works , those idea/impulses will remain unknown to people. But you only discussed how art works reflect the idea and impulses which may already knew by everyone without looking at those artworks or even before those art works created, if so...you didn't provide evidence support  this statement.
人生有些决定是大胆的,但是那并不代表这些决定是错误的。

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this is actually an well-written article with tons of examples, but it is hard for your to use so many examples in one assay without google or enough time... you may try to use fewer examples, but dis ...
lingli_xiaoai 发表于 2010-7-20 03:57


在现在写作过程中积累的每一个例子都是可能用到考场上的啦,如果在练习的时候不去积累,就很难熟练运用这些例子了。

关于hidden的问题,我看了很多其他人写的文章,大多也没有提到这个hidden。不过这个应该不难改,因为那些成功的作品的传神之处就在于道出了“人人心中皆有,人人笔下皆无”的东西。心中皆有,但无法表达,是否就可以理解成hidden呢?

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本帖最后由 lingli_xiaoai 于 2010-7-20 09:17 编辑

if you didn't mention hidden simply because other didn't mention it either...i really have nothing to say......i thought what people trying to do here is trying to be unique. If you don't want to be different from everyone else, that's you own choice.

but you don't have to listen to me either....that is just my personal suggestion。
心中皆有,但无法表达,是否就可以理解成hidden呢?


if you can express this idea clear.. it would be a good point..
人生有些决定是大胆的,但是那并不代表这些决定是错误的。

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if you didn't mention hidden simply because other didn't mention it either...i really have nothing to say......i thought what people trying to do here is trying to be unique. If you don't want to be d ...
lingli_xiaoai 发表于 2010-7-20 09:16


Really appreciate your advice~ I would carefully examine my issue and revise it~

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