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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students who keep their rooms neat and organized will be more likely to succeed than students who do not.
Everybody wants to figure out the relationship between success and other issues. Actually, conditions promoting success should be identified according to individual’s condition.

Some people are convinced that the students who manage to keep their room tidy are more prone to be successful. I think the judgment is only suitable to students who majored in science or subjects requiring strong logy and accuracy. Actually, keeping room clean is a sign of carefulness which is definitely required to do well on science. To prove it, Chen, my roommate, majored in math always has a table with books tidily piled up. Meanwhile, he is the top student in his major since he virtuely makes no mistakes in each assignment. Moreover, he is good at deduction which could be a disaster to students lacking logy or organization ability.
However, when it comes to students majored in arts things could change. This is because, for them inspiration is more important than anything but a too tidy room will only make them stressful and confined.
For instance, my brother majored in industrial design never tried to make his room neat or organized. However, he always conceived unique works which are really eye-catching with practical and innovational functions. According to his statement, his room where he worked did not make him feel confined and even gave him some inspiration sometimes. Therefore, it is as clear as crystal that tidy rooms might be an obstacle for students majored in special subjects


To conclude, although keeping room tidy seems to be a good habit, it is not universally helpful. Hence, what subject a student majors in determines whether a neat room can serve as a judgment to predict the student’s future success.

梦的弃儿UID: 2840846

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students who keep their rooms neat and organized will be more likely to succeed than students who do not.


Everybody wants to figure out the relationship between success and other issues. Actually, conditions promoting success should be identified according to individual’s condition.（观点很新颖，不过不知道这样模棱两可的观点不知道是不是最好的选择哦）

Some people are convinced that the students who manage to keep their room tidy are more prone to（好词，学习之） be successful. I think the judgment is only suitable to students who majored in science or subjects requiring strong logy（？logy是呆呆的意思，LZ可能想说的是？logic） and accuracy. Actually, keeping room clean is a sign of carefulness which is definitely required to do well on（in） science. To prove it, Chen, my roommate, majored in math always has a table with books tidily piled up. Meanwhile, he is the top student in his major since he virtuely（virtually） makes no mistakes in each assignment. Moreover, he is good at deduction which could be a disaster to students lacking logy（logic） or organization ability.

However, when it comes to students majored in arts things could change. This is because, for them inspiration is more important than anything but a too tidy room will only make them stressful and confined.
! P" u. C7 h. y3 @" \2 vFor instance, my brother majored in industrial design（major和try是并列的吗，那用个连词and，如果majored是形容词，可以改成定语从句my brother who majored…） never tried to make his room neat or organized. However, he always conceived unique works which are really eye-catching with practical and innovational functions. According to his statement, his room where he worked did not make him feel confined and even gave him some inspiration sometimes. Therefore, it is as clear as crystal that tidy rooms might be an obstacle for students （who）majored in special subjects

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; K& p0 ~! v) t& B4 F, WTo conclude, although keeping room tidy seems to be a good habit, it is not universally helpful. Hence, what subject a student majors in determines whether a neat room can serve as a judgment to predict the student’s future success.（很喜欢你结尾的改写！）

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2# 梦的弃儿 谢谢，写的匆忙，用了点没把握的词

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Doyou agree or disagree with the following statement? Grades encourage studentsto learn.

Nowadays,countless organizations assess a student by giving grades. They mightbelieve
grades play an importanrole in encouraging students to learn and making them better. While people havedifferent opinions towards this issue.

Somepeople are convinced that grades do encourage students to keep learning andreach a higher level because grades make individual different from others. Thatis what we like in this age which stress character and power. High gradesregarded as somewhat prizes encourage students especially those caring aboutGPA and scholarships to keep excellent while low grades served as inspirationencourage students to catch up with their peers. For example, Chen, one of myroommates cares lot about his GPA because he expects to learn abroad aftergraduation. Bsides, with high GPA he can receive a scholarship from schoolwhich is critical to him as his family is not so rich. In that case, no matter ahigh or low mark definitely inspires him to learn more and better.

However,grades might not help encourage students if they merely just want to learnsomething instead of obtain a scholarship. Grades are less important comparedwith the whole learning process. To prove it, I once registered a course calledsocial psychology which was famous for low grades only because I liked thesubject and I felt it would be of great use in the future. Although I out ofquestion got a low mark in the final, I never felt regretful since I came touniversity for knowledge not for marks. So when I knew my grade I simplytreated it as several digits without any depression or anger.


Toconclude, for a student, fulfilling his own academic goal is of greatimportance and inspiring. But grades sometimes cannot serve as the ultimatejudgment. That is to say, it is up to students themselves to decide whethergrades are encouraging in learning.

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Doyou agree or disagree with the following statement? Grades encourage studentsto learn.


Nowadays,countless organizations assess a student by giving grades（建议用given grade）、. They might
believe (that) grades play an importanrole in encouraging students to learn and making them better. While people havedifferent opinions towards this issue.建议你第一段就提出自己的观点

Somepeople are convinced that grades do encourage students to keep learning andreach a higher level because grades make individual different from others. Thatis what we like in this age which stress character and power感觉你这句表达得有点含糊不清which 从句修饰age么？那应该用in which,这是固定用法~. High grades regarded as somewhat prizes encourage students especially those caring aboutGPA and scholarships to keep excellent while low grades served as inspiration encourage students to catch up with their peers. For example, Chen, one of myroommates cares lot about his GPA because he expects to learn abroad aftergraduation. Bsides（besides）, with high GPA he can receive a scholarship from schoolwhich is critical to him as his family is not so rich. In that case, no matter ahigh or low mark(感觉这句用no matter怪怪的，建议写成名词形式的主语，或换成whether引导的从句) definitely inspires him to learn more and better.

However,grades might not help encourage students if they merely just want to learnsomething instead of obtain a scholarship. Grades are less important comparedwith the whole learning process. To prove it你这样说，意思是I registered a course。。。的目的是to prove the opinion，逻辑意思不太合理, I once registered a course calledsocial psychology which was famous for low grades only because I liked thesubject and I felt it would be of great use in the future. Although I out ofquestion got a low mark in the final, I never felt regretful since I came touniversity for knowledge not for marks. So when I knew my grade I simplytreated it as several digits without any depression or anger.

Toconclude, for a student, fulfilling his own academic goal is of greatimportance and inspiring. But grades sometimes cannot serve as the ultimatejudgment. That is to say, it is up to students themselves to decide whethergrades are encouraging in learning.结尾段不错~~~