Issue130【六人行小组7.25】by Echo

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Issue130【六人行小组7.25】by Echo

"How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."

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The speaker claims two ideas about the children socialization. The first one is that how children are socialized today can cause different kind of effort in the future. Further more, it might change the society. And the second view is the speaker challenge the authority of raising children that in the speaker's view

All of us do not find a correct way to raise children who can bring about a better society. I partly agree with the speaker’s idea, but some of the speaker's view is one-sided.
Firstly concede that the way children are socialized today can give different effect later. Children socialization includes talking with their parents, appropriate behavior at school and other contacts with the strangers. According to a recent survey, the experience of being raped is likely to cause a woman to be distrustful for others. This example can be a powerful evidence to testify the idea that children's indecorous socialization can change their living styles in their lifetime. But socialization is only one factor that is functioning in children's grow-up behaviors, there are other items
which can make something different .Culture is one of the greatest item .For example ,a couple from Harvard University once made an experiment, they choose 6 children from different country varies from Asian to North Africa ,they found that even the same treatment the parents give to their children, the children acts different since their cultures are different.

consider next the speaker claims that we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society .Actually ,the real great man who can help people get a better life and living in a more developed city ,he or she did not need to be socialized correctly ,the key of their courage lies in their heart .For example ,in the early 1900s,the Chinese greatest premier Chou Enlai was in his primary school ,he wrote his personal faith on his notebook :studying for the sprung up of China ,which he did as he wrote .He made up his mind during his early years ,the courage is not the parents or teachers gives him but from his own heart .An even more remarkable modern example in architecture field is Le Corbusier ,he is not very good at math or other courses ,and during his early years ,the World War happened in his hometown .All these things did not stop his way ahead to create new type of architecture ,he write his hope during the early year that he would like to change the world through architecture. He achieves his goal and was the greatest architect throughout the world.

Turning from the individuals to the society, the speaker claims that our society did not have the ability to raise children that can help us create a better society. The educator and all the governments spare no efforts to make great improvement for the education in kindergarten and primary school .The Japanese kindergarten give an good example to other countries :the children who goes to the kindergartens learn the first thing is to smile, and then learn to be on time .The teacher said that these two things are the basic living skills .The kindergarten also demand the students to bring all kinds of bags to classify things ,big ones for putting clothes ,small ones for putting pencil box, they have to bring about 12 bags everyday, all these training made the children more patient and teaching them how to separate things, this training can also
help people classify garbage when they grow up.
And the American kindergarten also do well in children’s education .Children in the kindergartens must learn to do things by themselves and the teacher do not like to grade the students, this is helpful for children, they can live in a healthier mental condition and can do well in their working without always wanting to be No.1.These examples are all that can testify that we have learned much than we can imagine to raise children who can help bring about a better society.
In sum, there is no doubt that it in some aspects children are socialized today determines the destiny of society, but it is really a complex problem, the children's later behavior also decided by other influence by the relatives or friends or personal conviction. Even though we are not best raising our children for a better society, but we tried a lot and already have some good examples for education. Conclusively ,I partly disagree with both aspects of the speaker's dual claim.

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The speaker claims two ideas about the children socialization. The first one is that how children are socialized today can cause different kind of effort in the future. Further more, it might change the society. And the second view is the speaker challengeis that the speaker challenges the authority of raising children that in the speaker's view 最后一句想说的是发言者的第二观点么，前后的view好像重复了吧that in the speaker's view去掉怎么样，个人观点啊
All of us do not find a correct way to raise children who can bring about a better society. I partly agree with the speaker’s idea, but 这两句的意思差不多啊，不如把but改成and吧some of the speaker's view is one-sided.
Firstly， concedeconceding that the way children are socialized today can give different effect later. Children‘s socialization includes talking with their parents, appropriate behavior at school and other contacts with the strangers. According to a recent survey, the experience of being raped is likely to cause a woman to be distrustful forof others. This example can be a powerful evidence to testify the idea that children's indecorous socialization can change their living styles in their lifetime. = =为什么感觉妇女被R的例子无关But socialization is only one factor that is functioning in children's grow-up behaviors, there are other items
which can make something different .Culture is one of the greatest item .For example ,a couple from Harvard University once made an experiment, they choose 6 children from different countrysvariesvaried from Asian to North Africa ,they found that even the same treatment the parents give to their children, the children acts different since their cultures are different.后面再加上例子的分析会好一点吧

consider next the speaker claims that we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society .Actually ,the real great man who can help people get a better life and living in a more developed city ,he or she did not need to be socialized correctly ,the key of their courage lies in their heart .For example ,in the early 1900s,the Chinese greatest premier Chou Enlai 周恩来？was in his primary school ,he wrote his personal faith on his notebook :studying for the sprung up of China ,which he did as he wrote .He made up his mind during his early years ,the courage is not the parents or teachers gives him but from his own heart .An even more remarkable modern example in architecture field is Le Corbusier ,he is not very good at math or other courses ,and during his early years ,the World War happened in his hometown .All these things did not stop his way ahead to create new type of architecture ,he write his hope during the early year that he would like to change the world through architecture. He achieves his goal and was the greatest architect throughout the world.还是一样，加上分析会更好

Turning from the individuals to the society, the speaker claims that our society did not have the ability to raise children that can help us create a better society. The educator and all the governments spare no efforts to make great improvement for the education in kindergarten and primary school .The Japanese kindergarten give an good example to other countries :the children who goes to the kindergartens learn the first thing is to smile, and then learn to be on time .The teacher said that these two things are the basic living skills .The kindergarten also demanded the students to bring all kinds of bags to classify things ,big ones for putting clothes ,small ones for putting pencil box, they have to bring about 12 bags everyday, all these training made the children more patient and teaching them how to separate things, this training can also
help people classify garbage when they grow up.
And the American kindergarten also do well in children’s education .Children in the kindergartens must learn to do things by themselves and the teacher do not like to grade the students, this is helpful for children, they can live in a healthier mental condition and can do well in their working without always wanting to be No.1.These examples are all that can testify that we have learned much than we can imagine to raise children who can help bring about a better society.
In sum, there is no doubt that it in some aspects children are socialized today determines the destiny of society, but it is really a complex problem, the children's later behavior also decided by other influence by the relatives or friends or personal conviction. Even though we are not best raising our children for a better society, but we tried a lot and already have some good examples for education. Conclusively ,I partly disagree with both aspects of the speaker's dual claim.
个人观点啊，例子上很下工夫，但展开叙述的部分少，议论不多，中间夹一些比较好。。。还有，字数好多。。好认真，改的不好，望谅解